The Steady Mage in the Pirate World

After reading it, I feel that the writing is okay, but I have never played World of Warcraft, and I am a little annoyed by the settings.

The writing is pretty good. I've been reading a lot of pirate novels recently. In Poison Points and Yun Haimi, the writing is pretty good, but it can also be seen that the author takes this article seriously. Although he has always claimed to be a newbie, he also has the idea of ​​​​not being too careful! ! Come on, keep writing. Although I spend most of my time studying how to write long and good psychological scenes about people, and I feel that I don't have much experience with long novels, the author's grasp of the characters is quite good. The only thing I feel after reading the whole text is that it's a little bit unacceptable. It's Caponebeki. He doesn't talk about One Piece's perspective on life like other One Piece novels. He has a strong sense of being an outsider. From what I can see now in most of the Pirates fanfics, Hing cannot portray the protagonist very well. Even if he thinks he is in the world of One Piece, he doesn't put him in. There will always be a sense of disconnection, but we have done a great job! I hope to see the writing getting better and better. Next are some of my writing methods, because I haven't tried many long-form works, but generally my own writing will delve into the perspective of a character, what he thinks and speculates in the point of view, and then study how to accumulate experience. I think what the author wrote here is very good, but there is a little bit that makes me want to look forward to it, which is the protagonist. Is he an independent person in the writing, can he think independently, not just when encountering danger, but from subtle to very deep, his future changes, mentality changes, like Ace, in simple terms, he is a person, he must have many shortcomings and advantages, I see that I have not found the main shortcomings and advantages of the protagonist. I would be very happy if the author could read it, and I am very happy to be able to read this book today. Come on!

Boss, can you let the protagonist practice some practice? In your plot of more than 150 chapters, only two or three chapters are about practice. The protagonist is only a second-level mage, but he goes around causing trouble. I am really afraid that he will be beaten to death. Whether it is a fantasy novel or a hot-blooded series like this, will you let us readers see the growth of the protagonist? It's not about letting him take the initiative to fight, it's about letting him hide his cards and become stronger. The story in your novel has become a daily routine, and there are many other supporting characters described in it. The protagonist has unified the East China Sea, but is only a second-level mage. Do you think the protagonist's strength is worthy of his power? Your description is a bit mismatched. You want readers to see the strength of the protagonist instead of the power of his subordinates. But now what we readers see is the protagonist shaking off a so-called clever baggage from time to time. This is too boring.

Don't be stubborn, it's not that the writing is not good, it's that if you continue to read it in the world of pirates, this book will become very useless, and it is inconsistent with the style of the world you live in. It would be weird to go to SpongeBob SquarePants to talk about science and logic. If a pirate doesn't show off his passion, he wouldn't be a pirate. If you want to rise, you should suppress it first, but it would be boring if you just shrink back and continue to be stubborn. With your writing style, if you add a little passion, it will improve a lot.

Three golden chapters, the first chapter is about black iron

Does the author like Erha very much? Let's just let Erha be the protagonist. He's like a dog-licking protagonist.

Looking at the introduction, it looks like the gold nanny of One Piece, the kind of post that is backwards

Well, I looked at the main character who looks funny but is actually an idiot.

940,000 Words have not been published on the shelves. I really wrote a book based on my hobby.

It's been a while since I've seen a well-written Pirates fanfic.

The article always emphasizes stability, but what is expressed is a self-exciting article. Slipping away

It's too boring. Arcanists are actually more suitable for constantly exploring new dimensions and doing research. You can only have fun by having a nanny. Soon there will be nothing else to write about. The grinding stuff is boring.

Fine. It just drags out the plot. Also, I didn't want to read it after about 20 chapters. . . Don't know why. . . But it's just annoying. . . Eh. . .

Why are there so few collections? It's quite beautiful.

There is a reason why it is not popular, the plot is a bit bland, change the characters, change the original setting... Otherwise, just use original characters and plot, and don't touch the original plot in One Piece (the butterfly effect can be there, the bigger the change, the more logical it is). When we read fanfiction, we want to see more stories and better plots. Not to mention that it can exceed the level of the original work, at least it cannot lower it too much. For example, Erha, you can just set up your own character, and you have to add more than necessary. Another example is the Island of Precious Beasts, where you add settings in a superfluous manner. Kamon's original work didn't discover anything for twenty years, but the protagonist of this work discovered it when he went there? What the hell... The author's writing style is okay, but the rest... Since I am writing a fanfic, I have to understand how to write a fanfic! When writing a fanfic, I am most afraid that the characters will not match the original setting, and there will be an extra protagonist but the same events in the original plot will still happen! If you can write these two points well, you can write without any scruples as a human being!

It's a very interesting Pirates fic. The starting point and setting are very unique. I haven't seen it before. I really like it.

Not stable at all, mouthwatering! There is no definite number in the heart, just no number!

Arrita is here to cause trouble, right? ? ? ? ?

I feel like there is too much nonsense😰😰

Why was it released at chapter 44 when I read it? To be honest, it's rare for novels to be released so early.

Boss, who is the heroine? Is there a Robin?

I would like to make some suggestions. The layout of this novel is different from that of article composition. It is better for online articles to be one line or two or three lines. Occasionally, more than one sentence is okay. It is not good to have five or six lines and one sentence like this. This is impossible to control without some writing power. Especially since there are so many settings mentioned above, it makes people feel very dragging and difficult to read.

The book is a good book, but the author lacks a blade 🐷

This plot looks really comfortable

Everything is under my control

"One Piece: Becoming the King of the World from the Age of Rocks" If you are short on books, you can read this book. It is a very interesting and novel pirate fanfic. This book stretches the timeline to before Rocks attacks the Valley of the Gods. The protagonist Li Yuan has his own domineering body-tempering secret "Sword God Body Tempering Art". Rise up in the Rocks Pirates, become a cadre, and plunder the property of the Celestial Dragons in the Valley of Gods. After the Battle of the Valley of the Gods, participate in the New World Hegemony and occupy Wano Country. Become the world's greatest swordsman and dominate the new world with Whitebeard and others. The protagonist has four children, Stephens-Gane, Wei Zhuang, Esdeath, and Chi Tong, all of whom are great swordsmen and compete with Hawkeye and Red Hair...

It's a very good book, but why don't I feel like many people are reading it? Don't speak

Generally speaking, the writing is great, and the Pirates novel is also at the level of fairy grass, but some of the oral habits are quite annoying. For example, every time I mention Alita, I always say a certain Erha, and when I mention the white mouse, I always say "little white... Volunteer". Also, when I mention some characters in the original work, I always turn around the corner, such as a certain flamingo, once or twice, but it is always like this throughout the whole story. Other than that, the plot is pretty good

Why are the hundreds of chapters repeated?