Yunwu Mountains and Rivers

I have just read two chapters, and the author still needs to learn more about the list. The writing style cannot be said to be naive, but there is a big problem with your expressive ability. The most typical one is typesetting. If you are not very strong, or you are a great god who has been famous for a long time. Never challenge the narrative mode of long paragraphs. Speak the sentences separately and make each paragraph brief. Psychological description should be divided into separate paragraphs. This will make readers feel comfortable. There is also the issue of condensation of text. Before writing, repeat it in your mind. Let's take a look and see if people talk like this in their daily lives. No? Is that because the sentences are too written and artistic? If you find that this sentence is not a written expression, it means that this paragraph needs to be changed. Because it is neither written, literary nor spoken sentences. It can basically be judged as [awkward] If it is too embarrassing, readers will not want to read it.

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