Digimon Childlike Innocence

Well, author, I suggest you change the first person to the third person, otherwise it will be hard to get used to it. After all, the books in Qidian are all in the third person.

Why do I feel like I'm just watching Digimon? The main character doesn't even appear at all.

It's not a pornographic novel. What first person pronoun do you use?

There is actually a first person pronoun.

First person! Sorry to bother you. Goodbye.

I couldn't stand it anymore after reading the beginning. I clicked on this novel many times. I tried to read it several times to see what it was about, but failed to persevere. Every time I couldn't read a chapter, I left. The punctuation marks were so uncomfortable.

Is there any mistake? Is the male protagonist's presence so low?

The male protagonist's sense of presence is too low. Even if he is there, it is just soy sauce. At least let him have something different from other children. And I hope that more heart-warming interactive plots between the male protagonist and Digimon can be written. Otherwise, the male protagonist's Digimon will feel like they are simply dispensable. Also, the male protagonist is Mitsukorou's brother, so should he take care of Mitsukorou? And then there is the male protagonist. The system is completely useless. Why is the male protagonist given two swords? In the world of Digimon, which Digimon can he defeat? It is simply a waste of food and tasteless. Finally, since the male protagonist turns out to be an older person and knows the original work, he can be designed to be a role similar to the life mentor of children, at least to reflect the advantages of a time traveler. Another thing I hope the author will not give up is that there are very few Digimon fans, and there are even fewer who write the first fanfic like this. Although I don't know why the author writes it in the first person that most people can't accept, but I guess it's because the author also likes Digimon very much and wants to write it like this, so that he can feel included in it. So I want to tell the author, if someone likes the book you write, don't give up, at least don't stop updating it. Even if you only finish one book, I will still support it to the end. Come on

This almost all follows the original plot. Can you add more original plots of your own?

Meimei, this is very obvious, it's okay, but this is still a conversation, it feels very anxious.

The character selection is good, but the general and other things are a bit cliché, and there are also martial arts, and I feel that the style of painting has changed a bit 😜. Dark Octamon, this is not a particularly powerful Digimon, but it is very mediocre. Isn't it better to choose a normal dark type? 🤭 Demon beast, little demon beast, wizard beast

What kind of jb is it written? There are no punctuation marks. What grade is it?

It is recommended that the author add quotation marks, otherwise it will be a bit tiring

There isn't even a single punctuation mark in the dialogue?

No wonder no one reads it. You don't change the first person. Are you writing a diary? Writing a diary as a novel?

Garbage,,,, first person. . .

It's good to copy and paste. Adding the protagonist is completely Shuangshuang's addition. Shuangshuang doesn't say anything. It's exactly the same as the original. It just adds a protagonist who doesn't know why.

There are a lot of little question marks🤔🤔🤔

The character design of the protagonist is not good! It feels like it would be pretty good without this!