Destiny to Cross Immortals

Personally, I found the first few chapters a bit discouraging. The main selling point of web articles is the plot. Writing is just a tool to assist the plot. The character at the beginning fascinates me. Not clear enough. At first I saw Zhao Yu, this character. At first glance, I positioned it as being next to a protagonist. A friend with a straightforward personality and a sense of loyalty who can share adversity with him. His appearance is more to set off the protagonist. If I were to write, I would mainly focus on showing his handsome side. Of course he is not described as stupid. But it is a kind of ambition that is as foolish as a fool. For example, you can refer to Zhao Gongming in Senior Brother. Of course, the best characters are always the original ones. At the beginning, I positioned the protagonist as an elite image. And a lot of his performances. Really disappointing. It feels too ordinary. In addition, the small characters are not distinctive. In short, you have to show off and slap in the face. For example, set up a small plot at the beginning. The protagonist is always number one. Zhang San ranks second all year round. The protagonist did not do well in the exam this time. Zhang San forgot everything. The protagonist's score is still higher than Zhang San's. Zhang San was sluggish. Of course, this kind of plot is very cliché. Like now. It's more popular that the protagonist is forced to act cool. Either like Shen Yong, or slap the protagonist in the face in reverse. What you see online is a plot. Moreover, the author explains the story very straightforwardly in the first three chapters. Qian believes that the reader should be guided to the truth through a step-by-step guide. Shuidong is a fool. It feels very good. Just like in Shuidong's novel. It's obvious that the truth must be revealed. The result was that only the mouth moved slightly. Others were worn away by the power of the great avenue. Although he caused this, readers would like to scold him. But in this way, he captured the readers' hearts. Of course, Shuidong is not recommended for patients with kidney deficiency. Too many times. You can read Cuttlefish's article. It especially describes a sense of mystery. The part in the previous chapters where the protagonist meets his future self. It feels like the description is too bland. There is no constant feeling of being welcomed or rejected. The author's explanation is simply too clear. It didn't give me the desire to explore and discover with the characters, to pursue the direction of the next story. From my personal perspective. Classic of Mountains and Seas. Should stand out should be one. Imagine it as a magnificent continent with dreamy and fantasy colors. Shuidong's overwhelming and perfect writing is very majestic. Well, of course, this is just my opinion on the first three chapters. If you get slapped in the face later, just pretend I didn't say anything.

Already collected, come on! Don't give up⊙∀⊙!

The name is good and has a meaning. The content at the beginning is a bit bland and not attractive enough. I suggest you change it. If the beginning is not exciting, no one will read it no matter how good it is later.

The writing skills are very good and the writing style is very original. I hope your work will get better and better and present more exciting content! Welcome to return your visitヽ(•̀ω•́ )ゝ

We are quite destined. I see that there are many talismans in your novels. I also set up a profession of talisman master in my novel🤭🤭

Coming from the Tieba, I am also a new author, come to warm up the atmosphere. I have collected the book, come on.