Yongdao

You should pay attention to punctuation. It is recommended to have more dialogues and have long and short paragraphs, otherwise it will easily cause visual fatigue.

Come on, you must stick to it

1. Your introduction has discouraged many people. I suggest you change it. 2. It is not very comfortable to read in paragraphs. It is recommended to look at the masters and see their paragraphs.

The setting of the two protagonists is very novel, please update it

The thinking is clear, and I am almost addicted to watching it.

Details determine success or failure Come on (ง •̀_•́)ง

This article is quite slow to gain popularity, but the introduction of the dual protagonists at the beginning is very fast, the writing is also very good, and the novel is quite interesting (♡˙˙♡). It is recommended to subdivide the article into some paragraphs, and you can also try to give more detailed descriptions. Come on, update it, I hope you will do it!

Come on (*'▽'*)♪

The writing is okay, but one suggestion is to pay attention to paragraphing. Paragraphs that are too long affect the reading experience.

Come on, add more details.

You can buy some foreshadowing, but you must explain it later. If you grasp it well, this book will be great; if you grasp it poorly, it will be a poisonous point. Come on, author, I believe in you.

I read the first three chapters and they were well written, but there were some typos and some words that needed more thought. The most important thing was that I was confused by the plot.

Accept it, thank you, author, for making progress together!