The Pride of Another World

The story is very good, but the writing style needs to be improved, and the punctuation needs to be a little more standardized, but it's not a big problem. The setting is relatively novel, and there are a lot of foreshadowings at the beginning. It seems that a big plot is on the way. I hope you will continue to work hard. Then I hope that the genius protagonist always has good intentions (my head hurts when I see the domineering young man who kills people at every turn) and can kill everyone, but don't become the person he hated most in the past.

Personal suggestion, the writing style is a bit complicated, it's not that it's not good, it's a bit too gorgeous and too complicated... I suggest shortening the sentences, changing long sentences into short sentences, and long paragraphs into short paragraphs, otherwise I will have a little reading difficulty...

I have collected the book and have only read the first five chapters. There are no major flaws. The writing is average and the plot is compact. As for the content of the story, it is not cliche, but some places are still a bit abrupt and strange, such as the use of punctuation marks... No need to add more later. La If you mind, you can delete the comment. I just mentioned a small flaw. By the way, if you are interested in Xiaxia, you are welcome to return and criticize "The Top-notch Queen Forced to Cultivate Immortality"