Yinsujian

I'm also planning a second book, but I'm still writing the first one. I think it might be better if you show the ** earlier in the beginning. There are still few words, so keep up the good work and look forward to mutual review.

Here you go, come on and code! Must stick to it!

The introduction is too long. I've read the next two chapters and it's pretty good. I'm still looking forward to the follow-up. Come on!

I have finished reading a large book. The writing is very good and the paragraphs could be shorter. The role of the third princess is very interesting. Come on!

Keep going and perseverance is victory ✌️

Do you want to consider sub-division? It's a bit tiring to watch like this, but the content is well connected

The writing is good, I have collected the masterpieces

Come on, keep working hard!

Come on~ヾ(◍°∇°◍)ﾉﾞ

Thanks to the author for the recommendation I suggest the author describe the background of the story, first briefly set up a world view, and then slowly fill in the details and write more emotional scenes, language, actions, and narration to be more detailed to increase the sense of immersion in the story. Also, each chapter is too short and not enough to read. Overall, the writing is good, cheers to the author! ! !