I Wish I Could Ride the Wind and Rise

To be honest, the writing style is very good and the description is excellent. I am very envious (so sad) But to be honest, rather than saying this is a light novel, it feels more like reading modern Japanese literature. It reminds me of the fear I once had when being dominated by all kinds of messy names. It is very literary and feels very stable, but the simple dialogues and descriptions of actions and expressions, coupled with the literary title, title, and introduction, make it impossible to associate it with light novels. I guess you are also worried about the setting, because you added fantastic elements, but you didn't show it at all in the first five chapters, so that it felt like a modern romance. The tail is slightly exposed at the end, but before that, people who come in because they see the "light novel" label will leave disappointed. The story is very good, and the main plot is explained in the later chapters. It gradually becomes attractive, but it always makes people feel less realistic. If it were me, I would disrupt your current writing order: Start by writing about the time when you just crossed over, that is, your seventh chapter - the intersection of the world lines, write about the scene before going back to the past, that is, the first half of chapter six - write about daily life, and then let the male protagonist make an exception The behavior leads to past events - reveal the main line, fully describe the hero's psychology or language, and explain his behavior This way it will look better, and I will also change the title to a slightly more exaggerated and relaxed sentence. And the introduction... I really want to complain but I forget it. Hurry up and change the introduction, at least into sentences that can show the outline of the story... I said so much in one breath because I remembered a book written by a friend of mine. There is a big story, but due to the rigorous narrative method and slow development, It makes the story unable to get to the main theme, and the introduction and title are the same as yours. In the end, I wrote more than 50,000 words and no one has read it. Of course, all the above points are based on the premise that you regard your book as a "light novel". If you want to continue to maintain this writing technique full of "literary award" atmosphere, I recommend you to write short stories, simplify the story and directly highlight the theme. It is better that way, and the classification is better (laughs)

To be honest, the writing is really good. It feels like reading a novel or a stand-alone novel. It has a quiet and gentle feel, which is very suitable for little girls. Have you ever considered sending your article to a magazine? The writing style really suits the magazine! If you are being picked up by a magazine, you don't have to go to the trouble of recommending the book and just concentrate on writing. I think it's more suitable for you! Ps: Miss Kaguya is very popular recently, and it feels a bit similar to your article. Love Brain Bar, you can check it out👀‎! Cartoon!

The writing is good, keep up the good work! Big

The author's language is really beautiful and makes people look very artistic, like reading a memoir.

The writing style is really good, the content is clear, it is a good article

Although I don't like the so-called "three golden chapters", I really don't feel that the beginning is very attractive.

Come on, why don't you have a book cover?

Well written, voted, cheers!

Come on, thank you for supporting me, you should come on too, I hope to see you in the future

I'm here waiting for you to come back, waiting for you to come back, update! ! ! 🙂🙂🙂