Technician No. 67

Everyone has said what I want to say, but when I saw "Loneliness", I guess the author found in his reflection a problem that people in modern metropolises wrapped in reinforced concrete structures will face at different points in time...

Here it is, already collected, read slowly

A great book worth reading! The writing is indeed good and the story is fascinating, keep up the good work!

Attracted by the name, come in and take a look.

After reading your book, it's my cup of tea. The writing style is very good, and the description of things is very unpretentious and simple, which is my favorite style. The author's experience is obviously relatively deep, and what he writes is more logical and has a strong sense of substitution. But pay attention to segmentation. I hope the storyline can be expanded upon more, but there is still a little more to it. Support your book.

The writing is good. The first-person perspective has some of the feeling of Zhang Xiaohua's original "The First Chaos in History", and the writing style is better than his original. The paragraphs and chapters may be a little different from other online articles, but it doesn't matter after ensuring the number of updates.

This book is beautiful. It is suitable to keep a paper copy on the bookshelf and take it out and read it from time to time!

Come on (ง •̀_•́)ง, the writing is pretty good.

The author's writing style is really delicate. After reading it carefully, I felt that it was quite literary and artistic.

All I can say is nb, the writing is so good, I can't write like this anyway (crying) The plot description is also very delicate, and the development is also very reasonable. I'm so sad, I wish it a great success!

Comment back. Yours is really more suitable for publication. Even though online literature now includes a lot, it is difficult to get ahead with this kind of work. I don't deny anything. All results will be verified by time. I have only read Chapter 5, what should I say? I am a non-smoker, so I don't quite understand the sustenance of things like cigarettes, but I also know that in this society, cigarettes have placed a lot of people's thoughts on them. Your first-person writing skills are very strong. You put the image of the characters in front of me at once, and the image of the protagonist was also portrayed. I believe that the supporting characters Brother San and Brother Tao will also be portrayed by you later. But the writing is depressive, and I always feel that the end of the story is a tragedy. I believe you have experienced a lot. It seems that I can't write anything that you can learn from, so let's leave it at that. Thank you.

The narrative method is quite novel and the paragraphs are well connected. It just feels a bit inconvenient that each chapter doesn't have a name.

It's pretty good, come on! The writing is very good

Come on! Everyone should keep writing

Surreal! The author writes well, I can learn from you!

The more you write, the better! I will keep chasing! Come on!

Nice, very interesting book.

I'm here and I will comment well, so I hope Haihan understands what I said is wrong. 1. Readers will be tired when reading. The main problem is the problem of paragraph division. Paragraphs are too long. In the past, I would recommend such paragraphs to be one sentence at a time, but your novel is not suitable for this. Your novel should have some paragraphs that seem to make the article feel, but it still needs to be divided into paragraphs. Split the paragraphs slightly to give everyone a buffer time, so that they will not always stare at each sentence and fear that they will not be able to find where they read. 2. I read it directly without looking at the genre of the novel. This was mainly to make it easier to judge the content later. I think the author did a good job. I judged it to be youth literature after reading the first chapter. It was so obvious, so it has distinctive features. 3. Let's change the introduction of the novel. It feels a bit vague. The introduction is very important. It is the first impression for many people. The introduction is used to judge whether to read it or not. 4. If I write, I can't write this content. For me, only through experience can I write good articles. I guess these words are not wrong. Are these inspirations that the author got from every bit of life (if not, just treat me as nonsense). Anyway, I think it is very true. Come on, author, don't be discouraged even if no one reads your first novel. Not many people become popular with their first novel. Don't forget the original intention of writing a novel!

Let me briefly talk to you about the idea of ​​writing this book. In fact, it is mainly because I am bored at home recently. The plot of the book will be a little dull, because I didn't have the idea of ​​writing a book before I started it. Now that I have written it, I will slowly think about it later. So, the first chapter you see is mostly boring text at the beginning, and the plot comes later. The plot has been written for so long. I originally wanted to write more, but how can there be so many ups and downs of love stories in real life? Isn't it all an ordinary life? I don't want to waste the meaningless plot anymore. This concludes the first major chapter. Chapter 2 and Chapter 3 will be different stories with different people, and will not affect each other. I have seen many people say that this book is not suitable for online writing and is suitable for publishing style. Yes, I wrote it with the intention of submitting it at the beginning. Later, I tried to make some changes to adapt to the online text according to the readers' requirements, with less boring text description and more plot. I wonder if it's a bit nondescript? This book is on the Internet, and it is difficult for an impetuous heart to calm down and read it. Here I would like to give you a piece of advice, that is, read it slowly and don't read it all in one day. Although the number of words is small, it will really make you tired after reading it for a long time. To use an inappropriate analogy, can you read a book of Norwegian Wood in one sitting? Obviously not, it's too tiring. It is most appropriate to read something every day. Calming down is also a kind of enjoyment in life, which is a feeling that long-form online articles cannot bring.

I saw many friends making suggestions without chapter names. Actually, my original idea was to have three chapters in this book, and the rest were just sections. It is not difficult to name the chapters. I followed what you said and added a title to each section. It took me about ten minutes to sort it out. Titles were also added to the previous chapters. Thank you for your opinions. I received two messages today. There will be two waves of starting point promotion starting next Monday. Thank you again.