The Strongest Top Player

To be honest, I've been poisoned to death now. Let's not talk about the plot and writing. Could you please correct the typos before uploading? Don't use punctuation marks randomly.

I don't know much about e-sports writing, but I think your writing style... Still needs to be revamped. The pale description at the beginning and the journal-style writing style are really discouraging (keeping notes is like a primary school student writing a diary...). Also, pay attention to the description of battles. Writing e-sports articles is not about playing games after all. You have to pay great attention to word choice and sentence construction. Some words you say smoothly when you are playing games will not feel good when written in the article, and readers will be surprised just by reading them. Regarding paragraphing, I have no problem with long paragraphs. Some things can only be expressed in long paragraphs, but if you want to create a tense atmosphere of battle, long and protracted paragraphs are definitely inappropriate. You need a large number of short sentences and short paragraphs to keep the reader with a sense of urgency in the battle.

This novel is the only one I have seen among so many e-sports novels with novel themes. It seems that the author has put a lot of effort into describing the scenes, and his writing style is sophisticated. At first glance, it seems that he is a great writer who has been writing for many years. In addition, the portrayal of the characters is also refreshing. The eyes look like wearing reading glasses, and the dual personality characters are split. And the role of this punctuation mark is the finishing touch to me, which makes people's eyes light up. People who stutter can at least cure their stuttering disease by reading it several times. Well, it has a therapeutic effect. However, it is recommended that the author divide the paragraphs into two or three lines. Because it is 2020, there are too few descendants of Turtle Immortal, and the Turtle Breathing Method has been lost. Therefore, for the sake of readers, it is recommended that the author not divide the paragraphs into too long. Generally, three to five lines will be enough. The last sentence is that the author's book can be regarded as a god in one book. The prerequisite must be to remember to write more than one million, and you will be the platinum author! The starting point is your stage!

It's so well written, I've never seen such a good book. 😁

1. The title and introduction of the book are pretty good, especially the title fits the book well. 2. The combat style and environment description should be strengthened. 3. The entire general worldview is shaped step by step. Reading the first few chapters feels a bit like a running account. 4. It's a bit slow, so keep a good rhythm. Come on big time

I'm from Tieba, come on 😁 Only by writing can you realize your own shortcomings, and you can quickly see your own shortcomings through everyone's comments. You must stick to it.

Collect it, save more and watch them together, I will continue to follow them

I've read a few chapters, it should be an e-sports article. The characterizations and scene descriptions are very detailed, but some paragraphs are a bit long and the number of words in chapters is uneven. But I'm happy because it's really well written 🌹

Looking back many years later, you won't be able to bear to look at yourself... I hope you can keep writing on the Internet, read more and learn more. Only in this way can you make progress, and only when you make progress can you discover the problems of the past; and only in this way, many years later... Will you be qualified to spurn your current self.

Come on, come on 😆😆

Paragraphing is really important, as is getting off to a good start. I feel that I am quite lacking in the use of language, but I can gradually get better at it. The overall story quality is still very normal, and it falls within the normal level of travel writing. Please do more work.

I like online games, fattening up and then slaughtering, come on

I feel like the prologue at the beginning could be changed a bit, it's a bit too vernacular.

Already collected. This is my first time reading a game novel. I feel pretty good about it.

Well, it's not bad. The paragraph is a bit long. Is it better to divide it into paragraphs?🤔

The author's writing style is very good. The plot connection needs to be strengthened. Overall, it's good. Come on.