Under the Dazzling World

There is something, but the number of words is too few, so I will save it first

The writing is pretty good, at least I, an old bookworm, can read it, haha

The best way to overcome persistence is to have no readers, Oli! Haha, just kidding, come on! Everyone will not have many readers at the beginning, so you still have to persevere in this aspect of the novel!

The writing style is very good, the plot becomes more exciting as it goes on, the foreshadowing is well laid out, the characters have distinct characteristics, and the twists and turns in the story are exciting. In particular, the novelty of the skills in the latest chapter aroused my curiosity about the future of the protagonist. Come on, you'll be on fire!

The story is indeed wonderful, the writing is smooth, and if you work on the concept a little more, it will be perfect. Come on! Received!

The introduction is good and the writing is also very good.

I have noticed the problem of ellipses. The reason why I use "..." Instead of "..." Is probably because I am influenced by some fantasy works, so subconsciously I am more inclined to use "...", But since someone has pointed it out, I will get rid of this bad habit of mine.

Come on 🌹🌹

The writing is delicate and well written, keep up the good work

Second Young Master, don't embarrass me, little old man.

A paragraph of a dozen lines, ugh. For the time being, this point needs to be greatly changed. Received! Take a look at mine when you have time and learn from each other's strengths.

The structure is very good. The pig's feet are ups and downs at the beginning, and the contradictions are directly explained. Then upgrade as a matter of course. Punctuation in some places and slightly improved wording. Don't make each paragraph too long. Come on, hold on.