A Journey to the Stars

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? He said coldly: "Are there dimensional creatures in this book?" ? He smiled and said: "It's true or false, what nonsense are you talking about?" ? Calmly said: "I sensed it." ? Against? A slap on the head and said: "After checking in, I will go home and have a full meal" ? And? Looking around, there was a bang and the body was broken into large and small pieces. A gust of wind came out and these pieces dissipated in the air...

I gave you my first recommendation vote from Qidian. I hope the author will work hard and read this novel.

1. The author's writing style is very clear and not difficult to read, but as a reader, I don't understand what the author wants to express? 2. A confusing start. I don't understand what kind of world structure the author wants to create? But what I am sure of is that this is a magical world. 3. In the second chapter, you say that an old friend returns. Where in your article do you express who the old friend is and what kind of old friend he is? I really can't understand it. 4. Author, what is the world background of your novel? Where is the main axis? I really didn't see it. 5. The only advantage is that the setting is absolutely novel and the mind is absolutely open. If you can clarify your thoughts, it will definitely be a good article!

Ling Yu's skills still have a lot of room for improvement, boy, rise up

I just read four chapters. The world view setting is quite innovative and the writing is smooth. I have saved it and will read it slowly 😁

Revised the first four chapters, deleted the original chapter, and split the fourth chapter into two chapters

I have read the three prologues and the first three chapters. The prologue is well written, explaining the background of the story, or describing the world view of the whole story well, but you have used it as a prologue. Generally, not many people will read the prologue. The whole three chapters is almost 8,000 words! If I wasn't commenting for you, I would definitely be passing by. Let's talk about the first chapter. The protagonist wakes up and discovers the golden fungus. Then the protagonist meets the trainers from the Noble Academy. I originally thought that the protagonist would have a battle with these trainers to give a cool point. Who knows that the author just passed it by? So what is the purpose of the author having these trainers from the Noble Academy appear? Maybe it has something to do with the subsequent plot (my guess) In the second chapter, the heroine appeared, and the description of the vines made me very difficult to read. Anyway, the hero was beaten to the ground, and the heroine also fully sacrificed to save the hero. This chapter describes the misfortune of the hero and heroine. The third chapter is a bit abstract. It seems to be describing an evolution of the hero, or it may be related to the hero's training system! In general, this book is relatively slow to read. Some of the sentences in the book need to be proofread, and sometimes it is awkward to read!

Come on, Zero Degree, it's getting better and better

How did you change your name? I was just wondering how this book ended up on my bookshelf

Just read it again because of the author's changes. After the changes, it is obviously much better than before. Plus, watching it for the second time, the plot is easier to understand than before. The author seems to have listened to my suggestion and added a description of the basic structure of the novel world to the author's statement in each chapter, so that it won't feel confusing at first glance. The biggest highlight of this book actually comes from its unique plot and writing style. The author's writing style is very good, I'm not sure it is the first, but at least it is one of the best among the novels I have read. Secondly, many of the novels leaked now have the same plot, which gives people a very vulgar and unreal feeling. After reading it, I just want to say WOC. But this book is different. A large part of its novelty comes from the unique double character. Line writing method, but the disadvantage of double line writing is also very obvious, that is, it places high demands on the author. Once the author cannot handle the relationship between the two lines and the connection during the transition, the whole book will undoubtedly collapse. So far, the author has done a good job in handling this part, at least after the changes and additions, it does not give people a very abrupt feeling. In addition, I have some suggestions for the author's writing method of three lines in the next volume, which I hope the author can adopt. The double line itself is already very difficult to write. You can imagine the difficulty of the third line, but I am also looking forward to it because the plot will become richer, so I have the following suggestions for this third line: First, you must pay attention to details. The three lines may not directly determine which one should be written in detail and which one should be abbreviated. However, in the different plots of the three lines, the unimportant ones can be appropriately abbreviated. Otherwise, the connection between the three lines will become difficult and the readers will be discouraged, because that is equivalent to reading three books mixed together at the same time instead of reading one book with three lines. Second, there is a better way to use one of the lines as the middle line connecting the two lines. The third line continuously connects the two lines, but it can be an independent line, so that the problem of connection and the three lines can be solved at the same time. Third, the quality of a character does not lie in the number, but in the contrast and portrayal of each character. It is a very common and good method to reflect the character's characteristics from the side in different things. In addition, the characters must also be prioritized. The protagonist's image, whether good or evil, must be full. The supporting characters may not be as detailed as the protagonist, but they must also have their own uniqueness. Finally, the environment of the novel (natural environment and social environment) is also an indispensable place, but because it is a fictional novel, this part becomes difficult, so there is no need to be so entangled in this part. There must be separate descriptions, but there is no need to describe them in large lengths for the sake of perfection. The best way to describe the social environment is to react from the side in different events, so the detailed description of the events in the main line is also particularly important. The above are some of my suggestions. Of course, they are definitely not perfect, so the author can just take a look at them. I hope they can provide some help to your writing. In addition, having said so much, please add some details, thank you.

The author's writing skills are good, but the setting is too confusing. The descriptions are too fragmented. If these words are cut into dozens of short articles, they can still be read as prose. Some of the descriptions are quite amazing. The author is probably a man in science and engineering. The structure and setting of the novel are very rigorous, which is its shining point. It's a pity that the imagination is too broad, and 90% of people will be confused and confused after reading it...

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I have read Chapter 5 and will briefly comment. Please forgive me if anything is inappropriate 1. The setting is actually very exciting, with a new world and new rules. It can be seen that the author should have a huge layout for this story 2. The writing is very smooth, and there is nothing particularly stiff when reading the whole story 3. A small problem is that there are a bit too many settings, and the transition is a bit unexpected, which makes the overall impression a bit confusing... 4. Come on

The writing is fluent, the characters are vivid, and the plot is novel. It is a rare good article, but it is not updated well. Come on!

The previous writing is pretty good, so forgive me for skipping the prologue and reading the main text. There are no problems with the plot, the writing is quite delicate, and many details are reflected. However, if you look at the comment section, you will know that the main plot has been revised. In fact, in this case, you can go to the internal version after the revision. I think the quality is quite good. Rush! Looking forward to a return visit

It's a very popular book. Usually when I read a book, I only look at the writing and plot. The author's writing style really doesn't have much to choose from. It reads smoothly, with almost no typos or irregularities. The details are well drawn, and the characters' personalities are relatively distinct. To be honest, I didn't think about who the protagonist was when I read it. I think it's the Ling family. As for the plot, the author is very imaginative and thoughtful. The description at the beginning gives me a hazy feeling. I really like this kind of scenery. Then the plot is more focused on the daily life of that world, but I didn't feel bored after watching it. It's quite good. If you don't pick it carefully, it's overall good. Great, come on⊙▽⊙

It has been greatly changed again. It can be seen that a lot of effort has been put into it. I feel that the content of the story has completely changed. I might consider updating the introduction as well. Let me make some suggestions. When telling a story, you must first clearly explain the content of the story, followed by the writing, rendering, creativity, etc. In the previous chapters, it is best to be concise and straight to the topic, with less foreshadowing and personal opinions. Don't blame me if you don't like it.

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It's winter vacation, is Zero Degree planning to publish a new book?

New year, cheers Zero

I read the first four chapters carefully and wrote chapter reviews. The chapters were greatly broken and the sentences were broken up very well. It looked comfortable and the writing was smooth. It's a good book, I've collected it and will update it soon.

To sum up, the author's writing style is great, the environment is well described, and the details are well rendered. I just can't understand the plot, but it's worth watching! Looking forward to a return visit

Come on brother, my book has been signed with an external station and is no longer written at Qidian

Good evening Zero Degree, thank you for always voting and supporting me.