One Piece: The Dimensional Chat Group

Hmm... First of all, the development is a bit too out-of-the-box, just like cross talk with sesame cakes. The baggage at the front has just been thrown out, and before the audience can taste it carefully, the baggage at the back is thrown out again, giving people a feeling of being in a cloud. Another point is the strength of the protagonist. I saw the pirate who was fighting a pirate on Pigeon Island who had a bounty of more than 10 million Baileys, was knocked away by the protagonist with one punch. We still don't know the protagonist's strength or the specific situation. There is not much description. The protagonist has become so strong inexplicably. Although the protagonist is currently exercising with Saitama's training method, you did not write it out. Is it useful? So it would be very baffling for the protagonist to suddenly become so strong. The summary of the plot is too abstract, and the ending and beginning are not connected, which will make the audience feel confused and confused. The protagonist's strength is not clearly described, which makes the audience feel confused. Overall, the idea is good, but the writing still needs some practice. Okay, I won't hit you either, come on! Hopefully I have raised these points. You can correct it.

Why write about Saitama's training? Saitama's training volume is just a warm-up level for Chaofan. There are many people in One Punch Man who train more than Saitama, but none of them are stronger than Saitama. Who gave the protagonist the illusion that he can become stronger by using Saitama's training method?

Good guy, after eating the communication fruit, can't you communicate with all realms by yourself? If you are not strong enough, just take your time. ™ When One Piece comes out, will the protagonist still be the protagonist? The protagonist in the meaning of the world, I slipped away.

After reading the introduction, if you eat the Communication Fruit, you can communicate with all realms. Then, if you eat the Door Fruit, can you directly travel through time?

Writing for primary school students😅

At the beginning, I was quite interested. When I saw the monsters from outside the world, I felt like they were playing together. When I recruited people, I didn't write down the characters of the members. I felt that the presence was too low in a flash.

I slipped away, I personally don't like it!!!

Come on (ง •̀_•́)ง

In the chapter, the God of Creation combined with the protagonist's Devil Fruit to create a dimensional group. The God of Creation is the administrator, and he is like a manager. He will introduce new people when they come, and he does his best. The leader of the group, the protagonist, self-destructs when he comes up. I am a time traveler, and I know your future and so on.

There are more and more weird fruits these days