Start with the Passerby Heroine

Author, can you determine the character of the protagonist? The character of the protagonist is completely enigmatic. One moment he is indifferent, and the other moment he is like a virgin. The emotional embarrassment is to the extreme, it's just like Shi Yu's licking dog, the kind that says he disdains Shi Yu, but actually licks her like crazy, and still feels inexplicably guilty. And the protagonist's power and energy are not reflected at all. He is just like an ordinary person with extraordinary power, and he was caught in the police station. It made me laugh to death. The main plot is unclear and completely written out of order. The only thing that makes me read it is your writing style. To be honest, if you want to write the behind-the-scenes flow, it is better than the Bankai flow. Author, if you read it again from beginning to end, it is like letting yourself go and feeding the outline to the dog. Obviously the writing is very good, but what you wrote is very awkward. I have no idea of ​​reading this book at all. I look forward to your new book.

Why do I feel after reading a few pictures that the protagonists are too small and the layout is too small? ? ?

Why don't the green ones crawl further away? Are you still taking on a disciple? Are you still going to be the green protagonist after getting together with Hui? ? ?

Finally I found an interesting book. The setting of the male protagonist in the first chapter and the character of the original protagonist are very good. Author, can I make an opinion that should not affect this book? It's like this. In all the daily novels I've read that have a world of passerby heroines, the protagonists will be friends with An Yilun and help him make games. I'm very puzzled as to why Mao has to be friends with him and abandon his own entertainment/leisure time to help him complete the idea because An Yilun also has a whim? Is a person like An Yilun really lovable? Not to mention the ambiguous nature of playing both sides. When making games, he will ask others to help him unconditionally regardless of whether they have time to help him or not. In the process of helping him make games, if others have more important things to do, he will give priority to others to help him finish the game (Yinglili is an example), and the planning book is also It's like a piece of waste paper. I'm not joking. If you say this kind of person would be beaten to death in reality, I really don't understand why those authors who write about daily life like to let the protagonist help him make games and be friends with him. Whether it is to advance the plot or to recruit the heroine, it does not necessarily have to be done by helping him make games, right? Of course, if the protagonist has to study, start a business, or work part-time, I would rather not sleep and help him make games.

Is there any mechanism for adding updates? ?

Chapter 49 is so damn vicious. There is no emotional foreshadowing between the protagonist and Kasumigaoka Shiu, and neither party has spoken much. Suddenly, the character that the protagonist has established in front of him is completely destroyed. Author, I really admire you for coming up with such a plot. To be honest, I'm really not trying to criticize you. If you read the plot you wrote before chapter 49, won't you feel it's inconsistent when you read chapter 49? Doesn't it feel awkward? Are you force-feeding Mr. Yoneda?

The potential is good, I feel it will be popular 😍😍😍

It's better to come directly to a Crystal Palace, preferably with Qiongmei and V's family 😍🥺

I discovered another book with potential and am ready to fatten it up before slaughtering it 😏😏😏

{"NickName":"Author","UserId":90646}Single heroine senior! ! ! Long live Shiyu! ! !

Well, I feel like the author's relationship between the protagonist and Kasumigaoka Shiu is a bit far-fetched, but everything else is pretty good.