Xuanxuantianshangdao

I have read the first three chapters. The writing is good and fluent, but the story setting is temporarily unclear. From the title to the introduction, it is a very traditional fantasy novel. The opening chapter is too bland. If you are a newcomer, it is not recommended to write like this... If you have a foundation of readers, you can create whatever you want, come on!

Too little, I can't see more at the moment First of all, praise your segmentation! I will come back to review after writing at least three chapters.

Come on write! It will be even better when the plot is fully developed! The writing style is a bit immature, I look forward to your growth!

Come on (*'▽'*)♪

The sense of immersion is strong and the story is good, keep up the good work

Read it in one sitting! Shocking! Looking forward to the update, keep it up!

Wow, it's very good, but too little. Please do your best.

Come on together! (Spread flowers)

It's well written. I've collected the book. Let's work together.

I have read only a few chapters, and the overall feeling is quite good 1. The writing is very smooth, the writing is good, and the words are concise and concise 2. The main line is very clear, and the characters are also very prominent 3. There are a few typos 4. The upgrade may be a bit fast, you need to pay attention to the rhythm

This is really too bland... The reader feels a bit like the calm before the storm, but I think too much... Even if there is a small twist, it is still so bland... Well, the writing is okay, but when it comes to writing this kind of thing, it is not good, and the rhythm and plot are really too... The characters don't stand up, but are flat as hell. It would be troublesome to make suggestions, so I won't mention it. After all, if you make suggestions, you have to change your writing style, which is very annoying, so let's just do it...

When I first opened the book, I couldn't see much. Give me some advice~! Pay attention to the control of the plot, pay attention to the characterization of the characters, and don't just write about the background settings Let's work together! Mutual encouragement!

Update soon! 😍😍😍

"Xuanxuan Tianshangdao" The main idea of ​​this book is that the young Song Kuang entered Xuanmen and went through ups and downs before entering the upper courtyard gate. In the process of subsequent cultivation, he saw all the intrigues in the world of cultivation, and went through all kinds of difficulties to achieve great success and attack the holy realm to seek opportunities. After becoming a saint, he participated in the confrontation with the remnants of the God Realm and the eternal enemies who came from the upper reaches of the River Styx. I accidentally learned the truth about the war in the ancient era... In the end, Emperor Cheng reopened the immortal gate and led the cultivators of all races into the immortal world to fight outside Yashan...

Come on (ง •̀_•́)ง