Nib Book Travel Notes

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Pastor, I give you the recommendation vote. Come on and update, we support you! I, kind, dove. . . If you can't remember who I am, you're dead. ... Haha.

This book is very old, like it was written ten years ago. If you still like it, please tell me and I will continue writing it👋👋👋

In fact, you can completely "use" Ergen's "Seeking Demons" as a template to make a copy. The world structure you wrote is terrible

Very good writing. Come on

Come and accept each other Already collected

It's very well written, keep up the good work! Received

Come on, the title of the book is quite good, but the introduction is a bit discouraging (´-ω-`). Do you want to revise it?

Just look at the writing and introduction. I don't understand it at first glance. Just write and express your personality. In fact, the weapon flow is not bad. I don't understand the introduction, so I have to feel invincible. However, your invincibility is just a cool article, so please be more restrained! Once cool, it will cool down

Introduction The title of the book is very interesting! The setting of the protagonist Goldfinger is also very interesting, making people want to find out. She is the heroine. Why do you call her Xun'er? It is easy for people to think that you are writing a Dou Po fan. . . . But the suspense at the beginning is set up very well! Come on Duck!

The introduction persuades you to retreat. The plot background of the first three chapters is not clearly explained, and the character dialogue and psychological description are a bit awkward. The advantage is that the description is in place and the characters are vivid.

After reading three chapters, I won't be perfunctory since I'm here to comment. Let's see if you can accept it. If I were your editor, I would ask you to delete everything from the beginning of the first chapter to before entering the topic. There are too many irrelevant things explained. You may think it is important, but as a reader, it is a bit confusing. You can slowly find opportunities to talk about it later, otherwise you will just feel like you are suddenly jumping from one story to another.

After reading the first three chapters, to be honest, I didn't feel much in my heart. While the first chapter was a bit long-winded, I personally would actively block the first-person writing, and there were also some problems with the segmentation. But there are also advantages. The origin and ability of Goldfinger are described very interestingly, and the suspense at the end of the chapter is just right. The three chapters have a clear and clear idea.

It's interesting, but the beginning part is a bit redundant. Make the plot and speed faster.

Already invested, I invested for "The Girl Is Offended"! The author's writing style is very good and worth investing in!

After reading 5 chapters, I would like to briefly share my thoughts. I apologize for any bad comments 1. The writing is very smooth, the writing is good, and the description of some scenes is quite good 2. The story is relatively traditional, but it is also very suspenseful and unfolds very quickly 3. Some of the wording may not be particularly appropriate 4. Overall, it is great, come on

The author hurriedly updated it. If the writing is so good, I won't update it. I'll send you the razor blade 🤭🤭🤭

Bro, I think you need to change your profile.