The King of Idol Singers

The plot is quite smooth. The worldview is also described in great detail, which is very helpful for understanding this fictional world. But I would like to make a suggestion. The author should not write things in too much detail, as it can easily appear procrastinating. I wrote 15 chapters about the festival, which is really unnecessary. For example, there are too many stories about the woman who wants to play "diving" (if this is a foreshadowing, just pretend I didn't say it) and the audience, which distracts from the importance of the main mission. A couple, three good friends, a father and daughter, a woman who plays diving, the conflict between the band's fans and the original lead singer's fans... It's too much and too dense, really, it's very tiring and scattered, and I can't even remember the name 😵

The world view is well written, but the plot is a bit long-winded and tasteless. It would be a pity to abandon it.

The threshold for writing and singing may seem low, but in fact it is difficult to write well without writing skills. Come on, Saonian