Celestial Master of Red Mansion

It's confusing as you write it. Earlier you wanted to cultivate immortality, so after your death, Jia Dairu left the Jia Mansion and ended the worldly relationship. Now you want to open a harem, so you want to inherit the Ning Mansion. The main plot is all messed up.

I personally feel that the break between the protagonist and the family is too bluntly written, and the old lady's IQ is a bit low. Although I also think that the old lady does not look like the protagonist, but it is not like this. I personally feel that the old lady knows that it is wrong to have the surname Xue, but she will turn it into a big deal. Then the protagonist feels unfair and realizes that his wings are not strong enough, so he tolerates it. The protagonist realizes that he and the Jia family are not a family, but at this stage, he uses the Jia family, I think it's a bit exaggerated that people follow the protagonist after saying just two sentences. Everything those people enjoy is given by Jia's family. If the protagonist doesn't show the strength to fight against Jia's family, most people will not follow the protagonist. I still like the protagonist to defeat Jia's family with his wits. The protagonist's force is just a tool. Of course, if the protagonist's force can defeat the country, then the protagonist can do whatever he wants.

The writing is still good, I have to be sure of that, but what is your route? Practice martial arts? Cultivation? Catching ghosts? Doing business? And engage in the industrial revolution? Do we still need to study Western theology? You have to distinguish between the main and the primary. There are too many things. Western theology and Eastern spiritual cultivation are mixed together, which is neither fish nor fowl. Do you want to write it in a way that feels like the punk era?

It is said that it is written about Red Mansions, but the key is whether the author has read Red Mansions? Jia Rong and Qin Keqing called Jia Rui, Uncle Rui? ? Is Jia Yuanchun Jia Zhen's sister? Having passed the county examination, you are considered a scholar, and you have obtained the Fairy Family's treasure, the Fengyue Treasure Book. You have the Fairy Family's spells but you don't practice them, and you practice martial arts secrets? It's really a great idea, it's all open! ! ! Got it! ! 88

I thought it was about cultivating immortality in the Red Mansion, but it turns out that the author has never even studied the Red Mansion and read it most. In the article, the Red Mansion is like white lotuses sacrificing themselves for others. The gift of immortal weapons at the beginning is so stupid that the writing is too dull. I don't know what route to take to compete for hegemony in the imperial examination or martial arts. Don't mention the distilled glass. Do you, a modern person, understand this?

In fact, the chapter predicting Jia Yuanchun's concubine was written a bit brainlessly! In ancient times, he must have been executed by the emperor! The emperor's wife may be concubine, but the emperor himself may not even know it! , I really admire it! You should also write less modern things. It would be better if you write more about ghosts instead of doing something industrial.

The author has amazing skills and a good conscience.

The plot of the bet is annoying to watch. I didn't want to watch it like this ten years ago, but I still want to watch it now. It's a masterpiece if you don't pass the exam.

Update, will the author update it ten times?

It's so beautiful, but it's a pity that the book is too thin now. Collect it first, fatten it up and then kill it!

The author's creativity is quite good. The protagonist has great characteristics, but the setting is a bit complicated. It is recommended to consider the original character setting. Some conflicts are too simple.

I hope the author can grasp the development of the plot and not fall into the vicious circle of creating suspense for the sake of suspense. Now these existing clues are enough to make the whole novel exciting and exciting. There is really no need to add too many condiments, which may dilute the main plot.

Here I come! Welcome to return visit

Not bad, not bad 😰

It's quite nice, please give it a try, author ^0＾~ But the cover is not very good, I suggest the author change it to a darker one, one that prefers ink and wash will be better.

Author! The protagonists are all controlled by the military and the government, and their power has been sweeping for half a week. Don't think about retiring to cultivate immortality. You can also climb to the top and wait twenty years before retreating! Otherwise, you will become just like the two cheating protagonists in Double Dragon of the Tang Dynasty! Why would you want to retire when you are halfway through the game? It's poisonous! You have a greater advantage than Shuangyong, so don't trick any of your students to death. This is the most poisonous aspect of The Legend of Two Dragons of the Tang Dynasty.

I turned over bored. Paired with Bao Dai. Withdrawn.

Why did this happen for so long?

Under the banner of Red Mansion, it is about cultivating immortality and fantasy. It's getting more and more baffling. My educational level is low.

It would be great if you could be more serious about writing books, ugh

I'm afraid of dying, give the author a reward

It's a good book. I keep checking for updates every day. Come on, I like your articles!

Why did Crow Tengu suddenly appear in the latest two? ? Isn't it a ghost fire crow? ? Didn't I look carefully?

All ten recommendations were given. Fast updates are the last word

In a word, the experience of the college entrance examination is an archeology of modern scholars.

Author, which one has the higher share of rewards and subscriptions?

It's too poisonous. It's okay to develop your power, but start by educating children? Just because he's a college counselor? The way he behaves when he has a falling out is that of a primary school student.