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One step, two steps, three steps

Big cheers for the author! 🌹🌹

Well written, keep up the good work!

Come on＾0＾~One step, two steps and three steps to turn over the salted fish 🙂

Come on, big brother, two are born, two are born, three are born, three are born, all things are born, the three-step salted fish is awesome

That's great, come on! That language and setting will definitely be very troublesome in the early stage. Picky readers will definitely take it seriously. Come on.

First of all, let's talk about the author's detailed settings, even if I don't understand the language, it's great, and I can see that the author put his heart into it. The story flows very smoothly and the writing is of average quality. Overall, it's passable and very nice. Those who like this subject can get into it. Then I put together some suggestions: 1. The plot of the eldest lady bringing back the male protagonist at the beginning is a bit cliche, but not too vicious. 2. A common problem for new authors is the problem of paragraphing. Fortunately, some paragraphs in the first chapter are too long, but I have already written so much that there is no need to revise it. Just pay more attention in the future. 3. In the first chapter, although the male protagonist has just arrived in time travel, he is still the protagonist after all. The sense of participation in the plot of the whole chapter is not very strong. He cannot speak. He can add more actions, psychological descriptions and so on. (Just a suggestion, no need to take it seriously)

Come on, use the Wolf King Seal to blow their heads off! !

Come on＾0＾~! Persistence is victory

Great, emmmm, the scent of a male star, come on, I don't have any recommendation votes 🤤

The investment signing was divided into 666 ^_^, the author is very grateful

🤝🤝Revisited, come on

(｡･ω･｡) Is now available (｡･ω･｡)(｡･ω･｡)(｡･ω･｡) la la la

First of all, the plot is very smooth, the characters are very distinct, the dialogue is natural, and the relationship between the male and female protagonists is not awkward (this is rare.) The writing style is also humorous, which is worthy of praise. Ahem A large part of the data in this book is due to the introduction. The introduction is the facade. Let's not talk about how good it is. At least it should be clear and concise (I didn't understand the introduction at first) Then there are a lot of narrations. Adding narrations in some scenes will be very abrupt, so you might as well leave some space. Also, I read a few chapters and basically couldn't find your description of the environment. It would be boring without environmental description.