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The plot is quite smooth, and the conflict is written at the beginning, which easily attracts readers to continue reading. The writing style is not awkward either. All in all, it is a very good article. However, the author may be lacking in some transitions and explaining the causes and consequences. Take the sound transmission part of Chapter 4 as an example. Before the words of the voice transmission, it should be explained that this voice suddenly sounded in the male protagonist's ears, and it was not the conversation of the people around him. Otherwise, the reader may be a little confused. Moreover, shouldn't the male protagonist be very surprised after realizing the message? Even if he appears calm on the surface, he should be confused and shocked on the inside, and there should be some psychological description. Finally, an unknown person suddenly told him the news. The normal reaction would be to doubt the authenticity of this sentence and the purpose of this person telling him the news, instead of accepting the news calmly. In short, the author has no problem with logic in the big structure, but he still needs to pay attention to some small plots. Although these causes and consequences have already appeared in the author's mind, he cannot not express them because of this, otherwise it will make readers feel a little abrupt. The above are just my personal thoughts, which may be biased and are for reference only by the author.

Because the internal investment in science fiction has passed yesterday, the update may be suspended. If it is not updated within seven days, the application will be completed! In fact, I also have mixed feelings. I have read fantasy novels in the past few years but not science fiction novels. I originally thought that I would not be able to pass the internal submission anyway and I was going to update it tomorrow. By coincidence, I read the novel in Chuangshi. More than half of the required initial investment of 10,000 yuan has not been completed, and the outline has not been written. I should focus on updating the new book in the future. (I have never seen what a webmaster looks like, so I decided to write a new book about successful reviews. I'm very sorry!) Please stop voting for recommendations!

I will study online classes in the evening, update the code after finishing the class tomorrow night, and then update for three days in a row 😁 The investment will not be interrupted. If the application for contract signing is unsuccessful in the future, the application will be completed even if I do not continue writing! By the way, I would like to thank: Mo Qian Yi Feng Jing 20, Continue That Wrong, Feng Qing, Ze Zhu Mo Jun, Zhi Jun Bo 33, Zhen Shui Du Qin, Sen Sen Ting Yun Guan Hai, Orange Flavored Dove Crayfish for their recommendation votes!

It's not enough, can't you add more?

I have a lot of homework, and my coding speed is also very slow 😭ヘ(_ _ヘ) I would like to send a thank you post before going to bed, thank you for the recommendation votes of Sensen Listening to the Clouds and Viewing the Sea, Continue That Wrong, Hug the Bear Tight, Xingmo｀Death, Xuan Xuyao, Linxia Mufeng, Qingqiu 2006 Sound Control Is a Disease, Who Changed My Pen Name 😡 Good night everyone 🌙

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Exist? Chatting, it's so boring⊙∀⊙!

The author is great. I love you. I hope you can update three times a day. Chong Chong Chong.

... Come on (ง •̀_•́)ง

Dear writer, your new book is very good. I have joined the new book investment group. Please update~

It's quite interesting, let's put it on the bookshelf first!

Come on come on! Be prepared to invest in your investment!

Morning🤓

I don't know why. Every time I read a book I wrote, I feel like, no. . How about (๑˙ー˙๑) Hey, let's write it like this first (´-ω-`)

I can't stand it, can you please update it? It's whetting my appetite 😍

I signed a contract with Red Sleeve, and I guess there is no one here (￣ε(#￣) Currently I am working hard to get perfect attendance at Red Sleeve Code. After finishing it, I will consider a second book. The new book "Repeatedly Jumping on the Edge of Cannon Fodder" is Danmei 🙂

(Seeking votes, collection, investment)

Can you update more chapters at once?

Support! Well written! I just hope the author can update it soon, and I look forward to the next content!

Take notes tonight, do your Latin homework tomorrow morning, update tomorrow afternoon, take notes tomorrow night (๑•́ωก̀๑) Don't worry, your investment will not fail directly!

Why didn't the author write anymore? Is it the eunuch's rhythm?

The writing is very good ~ the story is also quite interesting

The book is beautiful! Dear friends, invest quickly! This book is going to be a god!