My Apprentice Is Only Reckless

The golden elixir you think of - the next level of the foundation building stage The golden elixir the system thinks - once a golden elixir is swallowed into the belly, my fate is up to me; I can reach the nine heavens to embrace the bright moon, and the nine netherworlds below can drink the underworld. The Yuanying you think is the Nascent Soul that is born from the golden elixir The Yuanying the system thinks is the fruit of three flowers and five qi, jumping out of the reincarnation of heaven and earth; I dare to ask where you are from, the Great Luo Immortal in the Purple Sky Palace. The distraction you think - Yuanying sends the distraction, and from now on, you can control the world The distraction the system thinks - three corpses are killed, but there are no worries, the majestic purple energy is endless;

I have just read Chapter 2 so far, and I haven't fully understood the interesting aspects of this game. However, there is one thing that must be pointed out. The typos and sentence fragmentation make me feel a little uncomfortable (personal comments are declined). Please read it thoroughly and check it before publishing. You are responsible for the readers and yourself. The preliminary ideas can be clearly seen. I will try to continue reading and look forward to the counter-routine plot that will unfold later.

Now that I have seen the latest chapter, I have some thoughts about what Nianjun asked about before and about the work itself, so I can talk about it. Let's talk about Qi's role. Judging from the description at the beginning, Qi's age (on the surface, not taking into account circumstances such as recent reincarnation or loss of memory) should be between five and twelve years old. Since the age is clear, generally speaking (it depends on the positioning of this book, it doesn't matter if it is positioned as a funny and happy sand sculpture), you need to have a worthy IQ (logical thinking). Judging from the previous ten chapters, perhaps to highlight the "recklessness", Qi's performance made me feel a bit inappropriate for her age.                     His speech is monotonous (basically all very short sentences, as if he doesn't know how to organize language), his behavior is monotonous (drawing a knife, cutting), and his thoughts are rigid (not accepting guidance from the outside world). These characteristics make me feel that Qi is not a normal person, but more like a robot or a patient suffering from some kind of mental illness. In the recent chapters, you can see that Nianjun is trying to change Qi's image and begins to describe Qi's thoughts and long conversations. Although such a direct transformation is a bit abrupt, it does enrich the character a bit. If the change in Qi's behavior needs an explanation, the Circus plan I think of is to supplement Qi's origin. For example, Seven is the reincarnation of the system, and some of the characteristics of the system as a machine are left in Seven.

This book? ? ? I see a little bit. . . Fresh. . . . Come on!

I am participating symbolically, (Qidian Coin), don't worry about me! 😏😂

Let me give you two small suggestions first 1. When writing an article, you must have a complete plot plan, and the big plot must be sorted out. You cannot write the plot in small pieces. This will make it difficult to connect the plots together, and it will easily make people feel like drinking red wine, white wine and beer. At least there must be a certain big plot that can at least make people understand what is being said. When you read the whole plot of the book, you will understand what is being said at which stage. In short, when writing a book, you need to make a table and write an outline to explain the main storyline (without going through the details). For example Xu Ran led his disciples to the Immortal Continent (immortal border → main city → main divine building) to save the system boss Supreme God. Failed to level up halfway and returned to the Immortal Continent Xu Ran was alone in the Holy Tomb (outer layer → inner layer) to explore the truth of the system boss Holy Tomb Guardian Success After learning the truth, he became decadent and traveled around the world ………… Each major plot can be divided into 50 or 100 chapters, even if the word count is low. There must be a prominent plot. 2. Attract readers. What do readers like to read? Sand sculptures, plots, dog food, human nature, passion... Choose one or two key points to write about. The image of the protagonist must clearly reflect the key points, just like he is a living person, and must have his own characteristics. In real life, the characteristics do not need to be distinctive, but in the book, his characteristics must be distinctive, and exaggeration is better (it must conform to the three views of ordinary people). Does Xu Ran have any characteristics? Yes, the description is there, the description is very good, and it can be remembered. However, it seems that he does not have any outstanding features that would prevent readers from continuing to read. You must focus on describing one of his outstanding characteristics, and describe it throughout the whole text. Instead of emphasizing it, just describe it slowly as the plot develops. The above are definitely not comprehensive suggestions. After all, I am not an author, but a reader. I hope the author will not give up hope of writing, and I hope the author will not rush for success. Come on

，       ，mmp，Laugh 😁, so he practiced in seclusion until he became a big boss (the most powerful one), but he was still too timid to give up. This book follows the cute and brave Xiao Qi and the coward Xu Ran on their journey of becoming invincible (funny), one big and one small, one timid and one brave!       （），，max，，，！ I hope the author can write more about the daily life of these two people, so that our readers can have an aunt-like smile ^ω^, no matter what, I will be sweetened to death! ! ! Come on, author⊙▽⊙

What can I say about this book? I feel that the characterization is a bit abrupt and there are too many identity transformation scenes. Especially when the Immortal comes out later, he often overturns the previous character creation. For example, the character Yu Heng started out as a disciple and then turned into a boss and found his sister inexplicably. Xiao Qi, a little girl, turned into a terrifying character in an instant. Although there was some foreshadowing in the front, it was still too stiff in the performance. The placement of Qu Ritian's character was also a little embarrassing. Did he glance at it when he was rescued? The article constantly uses supplementary forms to complete the settings of the previous characters without specific conceptual expressions, resulting in a sense of nonsensical reading in the whole book. It always breaks the rules and gives people a very casual feeling that this novel is there. Is there no so-called outline? Just let yourself go? The structure of the article is also a bit confusing. I hope the author can correct it... (I'm not a troll... And there's no need. I'm just stating my personal views. If you think it's a bit too much, you can delete it)

There are many keywords, but it's a pity that you don't write them down. If you did, I would give them to you! What a pity

The characters in this book are all very cute and in line with the author's personality. 🤭🤭🤭

Of course every book must have idioms and solitaires

Characters, plot, dungeon, map, collection building! ! ! If you have any ideas, please leave a message here! ! A new author is crowdfunding to write a book! As long as it conforms to the overall plot setting of the book's plot. I believe that the imagination of netizens will always be infinitely powerful! (So scary)

It will be on the shelves at noon today. Please place an initial order in advance. Can you support the first order then?

The person who posts the most in this comment area is actually me, haha, I am invincible!

The event has begun! When Tiandao came out at the beginning, I felt that Tiandao was very cute. Recently, Nian Nian began to describe Tiandao, and the image of Tiandao gradually became clearer. I like Tiandao the most (I always want to pinch Tiandao's face)

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Gee, the author writes well (*๓´╰╯`๓)♡

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Give a reward to the fifth disciple🤭 I want to see how the five heroines can coexist peacefully🤭😏

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I'm here for a single heroine, all reservations are supported.

I haven't watched it yet, but I heard it's very interesting. I'll order it all first😏😏😏

I stopped watching it because of the college entrance examination. After watching it for so long, I came to watch it today and it's actually finished?

It was finished just a few days after it was added to the bookshelf?

Ah, I just finished reading Chapter 80, I really like it! Ah! Ah! Well! I hope the author can make it longer. Is it okay to make the next book longer? 😢

Good guy, this introduction is being used to stack buffs.

I just remembered that this book is over. Okay, see you in the next book.

It's actually finished. I thought it would take me a long time to write. I've ordered it all. Don't read it.

This kind of maverick eunuch from Ba Cheng Hui

I really like this author, so cute. 😜