Landing on Journey to the West a Thousand Years in Advance

The plot is a bit awkward. The scene in the 20th chapter still seems to be going well, but there is no foil, there is too little foreshadowing, the character's psychology changes too quickly, and the previous and later are inconsistent, resulting in the climax being missed and a bit awkward.

After reading dozens of chapters, let me tell you what I think about this book First of all, I would like to suggest that the author change his name, give a more relevant title, and provide an introduction. Secondly, the protagonist's personality should be changed, and the other thing is not to keep emphasizing that you are different. Then, there is the sect. The sect is a bit poisonous. The Five Hegemons of the Spring and Autumn Period and the Seven Heroes of the Warring States Period should not let the sect be so powerful that even the country looks down upon them. There are cultivators in this era, and the army should have military formations and the like. Otherwise, all those cultivators would be unparalleled, and it would be too perverted to fight one against a thousand. The force value should be increased, because generally speaking, the force value in mythology becomes lower and lower with the passage of time. The force value in this era should not be so low. (If there is spiritual recovery or something later, just pretend I didn't mention it.) However, the author's writing is still very good. Please work hard. It's my first time to write a long review, so please forgive me.

What the hell did you write

I feel relieved to see so many book friends criticizing the author! !

The author's writing is very good even if it doesn't collapse.

Did the author eat up the protagonist's lifespan?

The author is daydreaming with a serious face Are you playing stand-alone?

Shuhuang accidentally saw the title of the book, and became interested in reading it. Although it has flaws, it has been written to 350,000 words, and the shadow of Journey to the West in the title has just appeared, but the plot is very interesting and it is indeed good. I recommended it and invested in it. I am ready to read it again.

Very creative. Writing: Is the protagonist still strong when he travels back in time and faces the pressure of a severed finger and a blood-written book? Afraid of losing your mind? Obviously inconsistent with the original character. What's more, because of this incident, I feel indifferent and have no sense of belonging? Go on missions to other countries to show off your intelligence. . It's even more impressive. You can really treat people from the Spring and Autumn and Warring States periods as ancient people. A weak country went to an enemy country to show off their IQ and operations. Are you the best in the world? Think about the time when Ying Zheng's father was a hostage in Zhao State. At that time, Qin State was stronger than in the article, right? His father is more and more low-key. There is also the previous dialogue with the system. It's so simple. The more I read, the more uncomfortable I feel. Whether writing about ancient times is a fiction or not, you have to bring in the thoughts, world background, cultural background, and the details of Huanzhong's behavior and speech. Otherwise it is poison! Poison! ! Poison! ! ! It's okay if you have some problems with speaking, but if you think the IQ of ancient people is not as good as that of modern people, then just wait and see. Modern people at most have more information than ancient people. If you send someone who only knows about dynasties but nothing else to go to ancient times and see if he will rise? (It is estimated that if someone sells it, you will have to pay for it)

The author has published three books in a row, will nothing happen?

The writing is messy and mixed. The cultivation system seems to exist, but in fact it does not. The article looks profound, but is actually plain. The protagonist has been emphasizing immortality, but in fact he has been seeking death. To put it bluntly, the author's main plot is unclear and he doesn't know what he wants to write. On the one hand, he must follow history, and on the other hand, he must take into account the immortals. Moreover, the description of the pre-Qin period is too weak. To be precise, it describes a world of Chinese martial arts, without any atmosphere of apotheosis.

Travelers have no family ties at all! One moment he invited himself to leave the clan, and the other moment he had a deep brotherly love and worked hard for the rise of Qin...

The author has gold-level ideas, silver-level writing, bronze-level protagonist's emotional intelligence, and black-iron-level protagonist's character. The portrayal of the protagonist was extremely failed, and a major debacle occurred in the sixth chapter. People always want to meet their needs. I feel that Qin Xiangong can't help you, so I have no sense of belonging and indifference. If you have Nezha's temper and cut off your bones to repay your father and your mother, I will admire you.

I don't understand that you are a young master of the Qin Kingdom. The king's younger brother is responsible for sending Gongsun Du back to the Wei Kingdom. How do you show off your IQ? Are you afraid that the enemy will not know that you are smart? In order to prevent the tiger from becoming a problem, kill you first? It is okay to show off your IQ in the enemy country, but there are two conditions. First: You are very skilled and are not afraid of open and covert attacks. Second: The forces behind you are much stronger than the enemy country. You don't even have a protagonist, so you still show off your IQ? As long as the enemy has brains, he will definitely find a way to kill you or put you under house arrest. Personal comfort and honor and disgrace are secondary. I'm afraid that this meal will end your IQ show. To change history, the enemy felt that it would be safer to destroy Qin first. That would really show off the sky. And the daughter of the Tian family, who is the successor to the head of the first intelligence agency in the Central Plains, has such a low IQ? You can't even tell who is talking about "far away in the horizon and right in front of you"? And the protagonist stops talking and is so anxious to let the protagonist say who it is? There is no stability or city at all, are you kidding me? Seeing this, I really can't stand it anymore

This protagonist is really self-righteous and thinks he is awesome, but in reality he feels like a loser.

What do you think, author, that the medicine used to buy a pig's trotters for one year's lifespan includes century-old ginseng that can add one year's lifespan, and then the finished product can add half a year's lifespan?

The first few chapters are okay, but later you should keep a low profile and pretend to be cool if you have nothing to do. If you don't buy useful knowledge in a few years of life, you have to buy a chess game that is of little use to show off.

This system is intelligent, capable of dialogue, and even mocks the protagonist. Do the big guys think you should quit?

Tell me what you think! As for the author's portrayal of the protagonist, I think it is a failure. No one owes the protagonist anything, but the protagonist just thinks that this is what he deserves. For example, later the protagonist asked Uncle Hei to sit in the auction. Just because Hei Bo explained the reason why he was injured and could not attend the auction, the protagonist thought that Hei Bo did not get his respect. I couldn't stand it anymore after seeing this paragraph. There are really too many problems with the portrayal of the protagonist. Either you are completely evil! Or, you can be white! Don't take anything for granted! Of course, this is a family opinion. Maybe my poison resistance is a little low. Readers who haven't read it can still read it.

No need to read, it poisoned me Keep skipping till Chapter 23 The protagonist 1v3001, let alone being beaten, was almost crushed to death by his momentum But I don't know what happened, but a yy operation of "Chess Road" killed 3000 Wei Wu pawns in seconds

Chapter 20: Your life span was 9.5 Years at that time, so you spent 8 years just to show off. Isn't it a bit crazy?

Why did I stop updating? It's a classic. I hope I can keep writing about it.

In the Fire Cloud Cave, the three saints were sitting around fighting the landlord. Suddenly the landlord Shennong noticed something, so he counted with his fingers. "Well... An extraterrestrial devil has come and reincarnated into the human race, so that's fine. Let's figure out what his future will be like. Pfft...!" The farmer's second saint watched Shennong fall to the ground and asked, "The cards are not that bad, right?" Shen Nong: "Woo... Wow!... Poison!"

It can only be said that the upper limit of the IQ of the characters in the book comes from the author. The author himself has insufficient experience, so his writing about human behavior will not be very exciting. If you want to avoid it, you can only reduce the self-exciting plots.

They are selling dog meat on sheep's heads, a group of weak Qin people. Chapter 30 has nothing to do with Journey to the West. One section confused me "The reason why Qin has not been destroyed until now is because of the sect behind it. Recently, the sect has increased its collection of offerings, and the poor people in the court can't blame it." Are you writing about Qin? ? ? Slip away, starting point, now all books are pushed up?

I understand, the author is talking about thousand-layer cakes, but unfortunately most readers, including me, don't like this. Probably like this; Most of the protagonists are created: 1. Traveling through time as a child, entering into the local thinking, a series of events, and finally becoming a big boss. 2. Time travel when I was a child, the thinking of the earth, easy and hilarious type 3. Starting a business when I was a child, thinking of the earth, the cheap type 4. Direct time travel, diaosi thinking, purely relying on the system to become a boss without any brain. 5. Travel directly, enter the local thinking, hide yourself, and become a boss. 6. Travel directly and add some recklessness. 7. Invincible Flow Wait And this book: Direct time travel, The protagonist is an earthling's thinking that is disguised and forcibly substituted into the local thinking, and it is extremely egotistical. In general, the author wants to truly write about the changes in the mentality of ordinary people after time travel when they are clever and systematic from a modern perspective. They do not look at the plot from a God's perspective, and then slowly change it later. It goes around like this, but the writing is not good, resulting in a fog, and the protagonist is like a shab What he wants you to see is what he wants you to see, the hope he hopes to see.

Spending your life to buy knowledge, this knowledge is just equivalent to memorizing it. That would be more practical than buying a photographic memory.

What the hell are you writing about? Immortality is longevity. Politics and the country are intertwined. . . Fei Zi Fei Shen B. . . . Throw the book away. If you mind and like traditional historical texts, you can give it a read

If you don't set it up as a portable grandpa, the entire smart system will also have voice chat, or will the female system wizard be available in the future? I've seen too many of these, and it's simply too poisonous. Don't keep comparing the journey to the west with history. The description of the pre-Qin Dynasty in the journey to the west is too weak. I feel that in the future, I will probably be at the level of a nuclear bomb saint. It doesn't matter. Anyway, I can't hold on to the end. What about the nine-turn golden elixir that has killed people? Is what Laojun practices fake medicine? If you don't have good creations of your own, don't make blind changes.

Stopping at 11, who can explain to me? Is the imperial doctor right to do this? When the father was in charge of the family, he gave the protagonist a century-old ginseng as a thousand-year ginseng. When the protagonist's brother succeeded to the throne, he immediately gave the protagonist four thousand-year ginseng. Isn't this harming the protagonist in a sense? ? How interesting is this? The father is the head of the family, so take what you take. After all, it is one family. If the brother is the head of the house, it is really two families. Isn't it an eye salve at this time? Isn't it cooler to have a deeper memory? This is obviously harmful to people.