The King of Time Travel and His Dream

After reading the beginning, I felt a bit ignorant, no offense intended, just telling the truth. Then, I put together some suggestions: 1. The introduction needs to be changed. This introduction is too weak and not eye-catching enough. 2. Paragraphing problems. There are too many words in each paragraph and the paragraphs are too long, which greatly affects the reading experience and makes readers tired. 3. Regarding punctuation, exclamation points are used too frequently, giving people the feeling that everyone in the book is screaming with all their life. Overall, there is a lot of room for improvement, come on! (Just a suggestion, no need to take it seriously)

The first-person journey through the future is very immersive, come on (ง •̀_•́)ง

The paragraphs seem to be okay now. Although some parts of the first-person words feel silly, they are innocuous. Keep up the good work later and keep going!

Most of them are about traveling through ancient times. This time traveling into the future is quite innovative. Come on💪, I hope the plot will be more novel and unconventional.

The subject matter is novel and the storyline is compact, good.

I followed the comments and revised the paragraphs. I used to read the computer version, but now I have changed it to the mobile version. Please be patient and give me some time. I will update it and revise the previous chapters. Please don't abandon the article~

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