The Tribulation of Immortality in the Fantasy Realm

It is faster to get to the topic at the beginning. It is recommended to add some transitions, such as beautiful sentences. The author has a good idea, but the details are not too perfect, or the writing method is perfect.

There are so many words but no contract yet! It is recommended that the author make a big internal investment! Come on＾0＾~! Please come back for a visit if possible!

It can be seen that the world background described by the author is very huge, and the fighting is very well written. I can stick to this point. I wish the author a great success in the book. Come on, I have invested.

The fantasy novel is quite good. I suggest you show the golden fingers in the first three or four chapters. After all, except for the works of great masters, which can be slowly released, the works of novices cannot wait.

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The author writes very carefully. Although the story structure is a routine fantasy, the writing is still good and the details must be paid attention to. Fantasy is difficult to write. Come on.

Already invested, come on, welcome to read "I am a middle school teacher and student"

Come on, Da Da! ! No need to criticize, the writing is great! ! !

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It's already 110,000 words long. The author can now apply for a contract.

Already collected, keep updating. Come on! Mutual receipt.

Great writing, looking forward to more updates

Feijianwenxiantu came to read it, the work has been collected!

The setting is very good, I look forward to continuing to create

Come on, save it for later.

The writing is good, it has been accepted, please visit me!

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Ouch, he's actually a eunuch?

The starting setting is very good, and the setting throughout the day has a bit of a night feel. It all depends on the author's control. In terms of tactics, everyone's beliefs, etc., It is recommended that the author control it well. You can refer to Jiang Ye.

The language captures the essence of fantasy novels, the writing is also good, and the appropriate worldview ensures the longevity of the novel. But I have a suggestion for your reference: in the first chapter, you should focus on describing the performance of the protagonist Ling Wuyou, instead of focusing on Mo Ling and Fu Lao. I know you want to get the general story in front of readers as soon as possible, but it's a bit unacceptable to input so much information at once. In fact, you can put this paragraph into the private conversation between Ling Wuyou and Mo Hefu after Ling Wuyou enters school. This not only ensures the protagonist's home field advantage and allows readers to quickly enter the novel, but also hints at a message: this conversation is very important and may even affect the future world. Children like the protagonist are not qualified to participate! This is just a personal opinion, it depends on the direction of your story. Come on! Take good care of you!

The start is quite good, the setting is also very comprehensive, and the writing is smooth. But there are a few small problems 1. There are too many characters at the beginning, and some characters that have little impact on the plot should be mentioned in one go. 2. The character of the protagonist is not highlighted enough 3. Although the biggest suspense of the thousand-year calamity is highlighted, the short-term goals of the protagonist are somewhat unclear. You can add some stories about the protagonist's life and past to give the protagonist a goal or belief