The Road to Immortality with No Return

The dialogue needs to be divided into paragraphs, and the narration of the introduction should not be too wordy. 90% Of normal people will not read your first chapter, and then the plot can be a little exaggerated. After all, this is a fantasy novel, and the highlight of fantasy novels is the word "cool", and the plot attracts readers.

The writing is clear and fluent, and it reads well. The beginning is slow and foreshadowing. For this kind of subject matter, you should insist on updating the book.

The first post is for myself

The writing is okay, please pay attention to the paragraphing, keep up the good work.

The writing is pretty good, but the content is a bit bland. Good luck, author.

I stopped updating on the 14th. I was participating in my nephew's 12-day tour. It was quite tiring after a busy day. I apologize to all the book friends.

Not bad. Although I have only read one chapter, I can see the author's writing style and I will add it to my collection.

The writing is good, but I can't comment more on things I'm not good at, so keep up the good work!

Come on! I've been reading Sand Glyphs recently, and I'll read it again after I gain some weight. Definitely next time. 😃😃

There's that smell in the back. Come on.

Already invested, come on! It must be finished!