Honkai Impact Journey

Draw your sword, everyone, all my wives here are mine

Alas, I can only say that this book is unprecedented! Simply great! Know a proverb? Wang Po sells melons

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It's good, after all, this is our friend's first book and it can't be embarrassing, right?

So you are, the ultimate fisherman😊

The author will talk about the shortcomings I found. There is no segmentation in Chapter 4. The protagonist's state at the time should not be uneasy, but nervous and excited. And a game usually gives you an initial preparation, so the protagonist cannot be without equipment at that time, and without equipment, most people will buy equipment first instead of going to the wild to fight. Also, the protagonist cannot find Shino later. There is a friend system in SAO and the location of friends is displayed. Function, and the murderous intention shown by the protagonist in the seventh chapter cannot be so obvious. After all, the protagonist has not really killed anyone yet, and it is impossible for him to emerge like that without experiencing a battle. I have not read the rest of the seventh chapter. Finally, I hope that the golden finger of the protagonist will not speak in that way. It is a bit uncomfortable to watch. I also hope that the author's writing style can improve. Judging from the current writing style, the author's writing style is not very good.