Me and My Tavern

I saw Chapter 102 and wrote a comment. The author's writing style is good. Just talking about writing style, on a ten-point scale, I would give it eight points. In terms of plot, I give it five points, with some wonderful points and some poisonous points. Let's talk about the poisonous points. The first is the issue of the protagonist's life experience. Before the time travel, the protagonist's mother was seriously ill and dying. The protagonist was filial. After the time travel, the protagonist only had one narration to express worry? There is no description after that, which is very bad. There are also rules in the protagonist's tavern, so people just think it's weird? No one explored it. The protagonist himself was very weak, but a sword hanging in the tavern could easily defeat or even kill the most powerful grandmaster in the world. No one explored it. The wine brewed by the protagonist can increase internal strength and treat terminal diseases with blocked meridians, and no one covets it. All the good guys and bad guys in the book are too chivalrous and perfect, as if they were in a dream. There is no good or evil but only moral struggle. Many supporting characters are so perfect that it is easy to get tired of watching them. The world is perfect, but the world is not perfect. Let's talk about the protagonist. He is too restricted by the rules of the system. The rules are not like those in a tavern. They are too deliberate. And brewing wine is too... Easy, yes, it is easy. It is not like the protagonist brewing it. It seems like it was redeemed from the system. He is not a brewer, but a shopkeeper and a wine seller. The protagonist has no goals. Running a tavern is the goal of the system, but the protagonist is not the system. The book introduces many things, including family and country, love and hate, spiritual practice, Tao, and wine, but they are not goals. The protagonist has no goals.

I can't stand it anymore, I don't know why. This novel is like a mess that can't be described. I obviously feel that the author has put some thought into it, but it's just not attractive. It would be a shame to call it a trash novel, isn't it? I feel like I'm feeling overwhelmed! Grass! !

My personal suggestion is that you should abandon this book. As an old bookworm, this book is very watery and a bit disorganized and pieced together. My personal suggestion is that you should abandon this book.

You write about martial arts, and the name is Jianghu Tavern. So, haven't you noticed that your routine writing actually doesn't have any characteristics? What is the core thing of martial arts? Is it just the level of martial arts? The core of martial arts is stories, which are different stories of different people, which may be incredible or ordinary.

The novel is very well written. Writes about all kinds of situations in the rivers and lakes, and writes about the warmth and coldness of the world. Drink the wine of Jianghu and see all the affairs of Jianghu. When the glass of wine is gone, the affairs of the world are unfinished. The drunken complaint has stopped, and the joke is that life is short.

It writes a story about rivers and lakes, but the priority is not clear. It talks about the name of a tavern, but the subsequent chapters are basically separated from the tavern, and the wine tells the story. There is a new wine, but the wine is not served and the wine is not the main line. The supporting characters gradually turn away from the guests. The protagonist has always been a spectator and has always been just a spectator. The subject matter is very good, and the writing is actually also readable. But the author needs to think carefully about how to write, tavern, tavern, don't forget your original intention.

Keep it up like this, don't listen to their nonsense, just be a spectator. It's actually very good. Being ordinary is the real thing. If you really want to write about pretending to slap in the face, it won't be interesting. Come on, keep an eye on you.

Many people said that it was a bit poisonous and I didn't want to watch it immediately 😰😰😰

，，，，，(，，)， After seeing the latest plot, it gives people the feeling that it has a forced rhythm. Also, if you want to be a bystander, be a bystander. Don't think from the perspective of someone just because you are familiar with them🤔. Jianghu itself is complicated, and so are people's hearts. The most important point is that people's hearts are fickle, and it is never as simple as 1+1=2 (of course, few people can write about this kind of fickleness, after all, it is troublesome). I hope that the author can write more detailed stories and in-depth characters in the future, which will be a very good novel The last thing is, after I quit, I started to engage in cultivating immortals. The net was cast too wide and it is difficult to take it back (basically it is rare to see this kind of novels about the transformation of immortal and martial arts styles that can be written well. For most old bookworms who are pursuing it, it is just a refreshing article with ten lines in one glance, and they will be forgotten after reading it). It's rare to have a good subject matter, don't waste it, spend more time thinking about it and clarify the overall structure.

It can be seen that the story the author wants to write is two different things from fast food literature, but the more I read, the more I feel that the author's writing is not strong enough. The idea is based on food suppliers and blended with martial arts style. However, the story is very nonsense, but the intention is very beautiful. This is very contradictory. How can I put it, it is a pity to abandon it if it is tasteless.

This arena is a bit small, but I'm looking forward to the rest of the story. There should be more main quests, the system seems to have no sense of existence, and so does the protagonist.

A rare good book, what are rivers and lakes? Where there are people, there are rivers and lakes. And no one is the same, everyone has his or her own personality. Everyone has his own life and personality. It's not just about killing monsters and leveling up. I have read too many books with the same content, and even the characters have no difference in personality. They are pretending to be cool, so-called pretending to be a pig and eating a tiger, and the plots are the same. And the plot of this book does not fall into the cliche. Each character has his own story and personality. The role of the protagonist is more like showing these stories and these people vividly to the readers. Although I have just seen the free chapter, I have not yet seen the later content unfold, and I look forward to the author's hard work in the future. I also learned something. I really shouldn't read some reviews. They were just for the sake of being negative, which made me miss a good book for so long.

The novel is very good, better than many novels nowadays. I hope the author will continue to work hard.

I was attracted by the introduction and liked the style very much. After reading a few chapters, I felt that there were some issues that I didn't like. The first one was how Gu Qingshan and Yu Linglong called the protagonists at the beginning. They called them little brother, little brother, shopkeeper, or shop owner. As a result, the protagonist was called Mr. Zhang. This isn't quite appropriate. It feels like it's trying hard to improve the character of the protagonist, it's blunt! And it's particularly dramatic. The second one is the so-called division of realms. Gu Qingshan is No. 4 On the Heavenly Ranking, and Yu Linglong is the Grandmaster of the Earth Realm. Who is more powerful among them? Judging from the Canghai Sword going to kill Gu in the later article, it should be that the masters of the earth realm are powerful. Then the third question arises. There are 3 masters of the earth realm within 3 chapters. This earth realm is too worthless. Are there really just as many masters as dogs? This book has just been opened on the right system. There is not much coloring in the pub and everything, just drinking and not eating? No appetizers? The first thing I drink is a drink that can increase internal strength. Judging from Yu Linglong's shocked look, it should be a good thing. This leaves a foreshadowing for future pretense and slaps. I personally don't like pretense and slaps. There is no problem in writing about cats or supporting characters, but the author feels a bit stiff and unnatural, and naturally loses the artistic conception. It can be seen that the writing style wants to imitate Gu Long, and it also feels a bit like it. But it just feels a bit off. A bit of a crude review.

Come on, author, it's hard to find such good martial arts and rivers and lakes books nowadays, you must write them down.

I have published three books, none of which has more than a million words. The author can do this! There is also a book with more than 2,000 words. It is not bad. I advise you not to write it. I feel uncomfortable just reading it. The green mountains will not change and the green water will flow forever. We will see you on the road 🙏🙏

Ah, this, I'm not going to write anymore, I'm just going to start a new book 😂

I invested a hundred yuan, and I hope the author can cheer me up

It's a very interesting book. It's very bland. It's not a forced slap in the face with brainless pretense.

After reading more than thirty chapters, I just can't see the atmosphere of Jianghu anywhere. (If we insist that people who drink are all martial arts masters, we call them Jianghu. I have nothing to say) What is Jianghu? A mixed bag of fish and dragons, from all walks of life, from high to low, from smart to idiot, from benevolent to shameless, etc. It is called Jianghu. It turned out that the people who came to the tavern were all masters, each one more elegant than the other. Each one is more upright than the other, and all of them are gentlemen. It's all the same template, without any highlights. Each character is lifeless and has no unique style. The Jianghu tavern I want to see more is "a group of people from all walks of life sitting around bragging, chatting, anecdotes, etc. One word "lively" is Jianghu." Instead of making it like a rich club, lifeless, well-behaved, and empty of people. If the author really doesn't understand, just go to a lively old-fashioned teahouse and take a look. The other theme, "wine", is even more featureless. In addition to being delicious, it is also good for practicing martial arts. Just gone? For example, the second characteristic of "plum blossom wine" is to "dispel cold". The author should capitalize on the special effects based on this "dispelling cold" characteristic. No one cares whether the result is the same or not. Jiang Rou only mentioned it once, or even not at all. So is it funny that you came up with this "warm-repelling" setting? And after having the second kind of "plum blossom wine", the protagonist intentionally or unintentionally said that the first kind of wine, "lees wine", is not considered wine. Are you mentally ill if you despise and belittle "bad wine" in all kinds of ways? He is simply a scumbag who likes the new and hates the old. Other books written in this way give readers a "funny" feeling. The feeling this book gave me was really "disgusting" rather than entertaining the audience. Every kind of wine has various characteristics and positioning, including "grain wine", which should also be the same. Instead of "forgetting the old love when you have a new love" The third kind of wine "Tourist Drunk" is the same, and its characteristic is "dreaming". In the end, it's really just an ordinary drunken dream. Brother, you are really funny. You give me a kind of "Maotai" worth thousands of dollars and drink it like a few pieces of bulk wine. I don't know how to drink at all, so I might as well drink boiled water. He is obviously a rude man who insists on pretending to be a gentleman. A good topic, but the article is wrong. Each wine has no characteristics, and the only evaluation is "it tastes good, better than all other wines". Brother, with Dim Sum, it's not difficult to copy a review from a professional wine reviewer on Baidu. To put it simply, I didn't see the two highlights of this book: "Jianghu" and "Wine". Also, the defense setting is a real dog, which can only deal with settings above Grandmaster. The protagonist doesn't even have any strength at all. What a waste of time? It is also revealed that you can ask someone to buy it for you, but you have to buy it yourself. If a rich man invites hundreds of servants, can't they each buy a pot? If you have to come here once a day, the halo of wisdom will be greatly enhanced. The entire book should be overhauled, except for the core, which should be cut and rewritten. Tavern: It must be lively, and it should have all kinds of religions. There are countless talented people inside, and everyone has their own powerful "skills". Everyone from beggars to emperors can appear in the tavern. There are countless "odd things" in it, it's up to you to carefully search for the truth and falsehood. This is the home of everyone in the world, and everyone can find the warmth in their hearts here. Wine: Unlimited free basic wine is provided to satisfy people's greed and thirst. Various "specialty wines" require each person to complete a task before they can taste it (the tasks vary depending on the person and the characteristics of the wine, and there is no fixed task and difficulty. The only difficulty is "wonderful", and whether it is completed or not will be judged by everyone in the world). For example: I want to drink "Tourist Drunk" and tell a wonderful life story. Only when several people in the tavern agree that they like it can they get a portion of the wine to taste today. As "plum blossom wine" "dispels the cold", you should do a heart-warming good deed. Only then can you get the opportunity to taste wine today. Defense: It should be changed to frighten people of all classes. At first, it can only attack the weak ones infinitely. There are only a few high-level attacks per day. Slowly increase the number of times and the level of dealing with them. Simply put, "It is not absolutely invincible, but it must be invincible." There is no need to pursue this point deliberately, just focus on writing defense occasionally. After all, the focus of the book is not "fighting" In other words, adding a few plates of peanuts and other food is not good for drinking on an empty stomach. There is no need to specifically write about food, because the focus is on "wine". So don't put the cart before the horse and create a "gourmet show" The Jianghu should have the flavor of the Jianghu, which is made up of continuous short stories of the Jianghu. Of course, the focus is on the world inside the tavern, not the world outside the tavern. The story should not take place outside the world every day, and the special effects should not be used to describe the world outside. The above are my suggestions

Open a post to give some suggestions, everyone is welcome to discuss 1. Drinking wine can increase your internal strength. I personally feel that it is not a good starting point from such a high level. To put it bluntly, shouldn't a green forest hero with low strength and shyness deserve to drink here? 2. The rules of the tavern are fine if they reflect the personality of the protagonist, but they are not beautiful if they are dictated by the system 3. They are just some powerful characters, not ordinary people, and lack the smell of fireworks 4. There is wine! No vegetables! Can't stay overnight! Personally, I feel that the business scope is a bit narrow and there is no internal flavor.

After reading a few chapters, it was too vulgar. Since it is a tavern, it must have the atmosphere of a quack. These are all written as daily trivial matters. For example, Miss Jiang and Uncle Zhang could write that the weather in the south of the Yangtze River is as unpredictable as the rivers and lakes in the south of the Yangtze River. In the pattering rain, the sound of carriages can be heard gradually approaching until they reach the wine house and stop suddenly. When I was young, a strong man pushed in the door, about forty-five years old, lean and strong, wearing a green shirt, a knife, and black shoes with water marks. Standing at the door, looking around, then turning around, he answered outside the room. He stepped through the door with embroidered shoes, dressed in rich clothes, walking dignifiedly, with willow-leaf eyebrows, peach blossom eyes, slightly pursed lips, and a slightly pale face. Seeing the exquisite decoration of the tavern, a smile appeared on his sad face. Zhang Ming could tell at a glance that this pair of master and servant was unusual. Even in the rainy Jiangnan, the most beautiful girl in Jian'an City did not want to wear such gorgeous clothes. Jiangnan in August was too hot. Isn't it a little bit of a Jianghu tavern? The main thing about Jianghu Tavern is not the wine, but the people. A young hero, a scholar, an old man, a passionate guest and a ruthless lover, secretive calculations and an innocent heart... Can any novel really be published in Sanjiang? I almost want to write.

Really, I quite like this kind of inn and tavern writing. But I don't like what you are selling here, what I like more is the kind of people with various personalities, with different dreams, setting off in different directions. Originally, they would never cross paths in their lives. But because of the tavern, they were connected by fate and stories happened together. Or get together by chance on a cold day, tell our own stories, laugh together and say we regret meeting each other so late. As for whether the wine you drink is magical or not, who cares if it can increase your martial arts. In fact, I think the system will be removed, and there will be no need for so many bells and whistles, no need to travel through time, and no need to have outstanding martial arts skills. The protagonist is a native, who makes good wine, makes a group of like-minded friends, and has many stories. Some of them he has personally experienced, some of which he has not been able to experience personally, but can be told by his friends. Wouldn't this be more comfortable? Drinking wine can increase internal strength, which will lead to some people coming to the pub with "impure motives". His gathering is not due to fate, his purpose is just to improve his skills. When there are more people like this, the tavern will lose his soul. Everyone came just for a little skill, drank and left. If you have to control the whole system, it will be uncomfortable to be a boss. How can someone with outstanding martial arts skills resonate with others without a chivalrous heart? Having said so much, it's actually just one sentence. I want to read a purer story.

Type: Title+Character+Weapon+Martial Arts+Character Example: White jade flute Liang Shurong, jade flute, blue wave jade flute jue, lazy but persistent character. In addition to this, you can take on missions from other forces. There are many characters of good and evil that I haven't seen yet. If you have ideas and stories, you can reply to the book review. Thank you everyone for participating!

I lost interest after seeing the mandatory rules of the system. The protagonist is not invincible and has so many rules in the martial arts world? Let me ask you a question; if Ding Chunqiu comes to drink and wants another pot after drinking, if you sell the wine or not, if you don't sell it, you will die if you can't beat him! Sell, the system forces you not to sell, you will die! Rules are made by the strong, even in modern society, the law is based on force!

This setting is quite good, but the original setting is only interesting, and with the author's polish, it becomes vulgar. The rules of the system, what time and what time must be done, a person can only drink one pot a day, etc. It is really unnecessary, there can be rules, no fighting, hurting others, causing trouble, no matter who he is, throw them all out, instead of just kicking out the grandmaster, but he is an ordinary person, a slightly more powerful Xuan level can kill the protagonist. What is the meaning of this kind of setting, those who are more powerful than the Xuan level can be thrown out, and those who are better than him will be blinded. Is the foreshadowing of this setting also going to be like Dihua? Letting others imagine how awesome the protagonist is is turning him into a loser, and there is no need to be serious about it. Firstly, you have written an introduction. You are a daily oriented person, and you also have wine. Firstly, there is no need to engage in hunger marketing, and secondly, there is no need to sell it too expensively. What is Jianghu? It is the three religions and nine streams. It is the life of a trafficker and a pawn. It is the arrogance of a young man who is full of blood. It is the responsibility of a hero to all living beings. It is the vanity fair. It is insincere words and involuntary actions. It is an old man who has escaped from poverty. , Sitting and drinking a pot of wine, telling stories on the road. It could be about seeing someone who couldn't bear to eat human flesh on the roadside, or it could be about struggling and finally seeing the hope of life, instead of not being able to get in, leaving two cents and a love for the Lord. In this kind of novel, the protagonist is just a listener. Like us readers, the protagonist can make a summary of himself after listening to the story. It can be a poem, such as a love letter. At the end, the protagonist sits alone in the pub and pours a glass of wine. He is a drunk tourist, but before he drinks, he thinks of the drunken boy who made a joke during the day. "The heart illuminates the moon, and the moon illuminates the canal. Some things are indeed more intoxicating than wine." The protagonist of the book should listen to stories that are either sad or full of hope from a detached perspective, and slowly pass through the small rivers and lakes of the tavern, showing the elegance of the big rivers and lakes outside, instead of a bunch of young men and young ladies coming to drink every day, being polite, and then blowing on the wine after drinking, and only saying one or two sentences. Nothing can be compared with ordinary wine, as the author said, vulgar. In the world of martial arts, some people drink because they want to drink, some because they want to drink, some because they can only drink, and some people drink it when they see the wine there, not just because of how awesome and sweet the wine is. To put it more vulgarly, a scholar who has failed the exam drinks from frustration and talks about national affairs; a Jianghu man who has not avenged his revenge drinks from patience and hatred. It's about sadness and numbness. A heir of a sect who has just come out of the martial arts world has great ambitions in his heart. He says that the sky is high and the road is far, and the dragon is swimming in the sea.      ， I sincerely recommend that the author, or if you have any author friends who are passing by, use the above ideas casually. Please write more good stories. I feel like the author also wants to write a less vulgar story. Just say a few words. Hope to adopt

After reading dozens of chapters, I couldn't help but browse the chapter table of contents. I couldn't stand it anymore, it was boring. . . It was all in the small shop where I listened to people talk about all kinds of news, about so-and-so's life story, so-and-so's past, and how so-and-so was doing recently. . . Really disgusting. .

There are a few bad points in the first few chapters, but if you can resist them, this book will be pretty good. 1. The protagonist is the tool of the system, such as pricing and purchase restrictions. The system has the final say 2. I saw some mindless passersby gambling again, and the protagonist still dared to block him. This is a martial arts world, killing people without blinking an eye. The protagonist does not know martial arts, and he can calmly bet with guests on whether the wine is good and 40 taels. Money 3. One or two for a glass of wine, four or two for a bottle of wine are just initial. Although I don't know the purchasing power of two, it must be very high 4. The most important thing is that the author knows how to set up. As mentioned before, this wine has no special effects, and then a guest came and drank it and said that it increased internal energy.

If you don't look at it, get out. Don't be blind here. So I'm getting out!

Isn't this nonsense? Are you still going to restrict the purchase of this set? Did someone come to cause trouble later, and then the drinker stepped in to solve it? And there are many places where there is a lot of gossip. I can't stand the old man who wants to stay overnight. It's not a holy bitch. Your cat drinks wine from one vat after another, so you have to pay for it with your own money? What's the point? I can't stand it anymore. What's the point of being human? Your human kindness is a hammer.