Harry Potter Altar of the Heavens

This book by the author can be ranked in the middle of the many HP fanfictions I have read. The plot design is good, but the writing style is still immature. The description of emotions is too perfunctory and cannot reflect the character's character from what he does. The villains don't show off as charismatic antagonists, and the protagonists don't have impressive traits. Insufficient character creation skills are a taboo in writing. The relationship development process between the male protagonist and the female protagonist makes people feel too naive, and the author's imaginative description of love makes people think that you are single. In general, this book is quite promising. If the character creation can be strengthened and the writing style can be improved, it will be an interesting and good book. I hope the author can work hard.

Chapter 12 is a typical protagonist's thinking. I won't go into details, just see for yourself. The others are probably fake fans. Many of the settings are different from the impression, so they can be viewed as originals.

Let's take a spiritual soul bone from the head that Tang San of Douluo Continent gave to Ning Rongrong. This soul bone is mainly for auxiliary immunity, so that the power system will not collapse, and it can fill the hole of Lao Deng's Legilimency and make the trolls speechless 😎

The ideas at the beginning were very interesting and the writing was quite good. But you fell apart when you arrived in the United States. You were immediately persuaded to quit. If you can't write your own plot, don't do it. All the things you wrote before were taken away by you, the United States. How could a kid who doesn't have enough magic power think about doing Auror things? Your aura is too exaggerated. I only watched this United States and I can't stand it anymore 💔💔

I feel that the author has confused the difference between lolicon and pedophilia Lolicon is someone who likes children when they are pampered by their daughters, without any evil thoughts It is not the case with pedophilia. Lolicon is normal, but pedophilia is a mental illness and requires seeing a psychiatrist And the protagonist is a pedophile, not a lolicon

The pig's feet are a bit too big, and he is already comparable to an adult wizard without being a colonel. He is causing trouble everywhere. How can he have fun after going to school? Create a new magic system? Traveling through all the worlds?

Come on author, the writing is very good, don't collapse, especially the power system, Oli gives ✊😡

Why do people criticize all articles, even if they are so well written? Dead weirdo. Traditional spraying, system spraying, this one is already quite stable.

Example: Name: Canaan Brain Personality: Sunny, optimistic Appearance: handsome Traits: Likes to smile It's almost similar to the one above.

The protagonist is inexplicably confident! It's so painful to watch!

It's a good idea, but it's a pity that it was wandering around when it was time to live in peace, and scared people away.

It is recommended that you skip the plot where the protagonist goes to the United States. I really can't stand it if I watch it with my brain.

Chi Chi is so powerful that I can't stand it for more than twenty chapters. I won't talk about Chi Chi at the beginning. I will just talk about the protagonist's physical fitness, magic power, skill proficiency, actual combat skills, and the timing of actual combat. Have you considered these things? What can a child do? He is still a dog. . . The author has such a big heart.

I read four or five Harry Potter fan books at the same time. I feel that Hermione is very busy. Today I meet this protagonist, tomorrow I have to be angry with another one, and the day after tomorrow I have to pretend that I love the other person so much in front of the other person...

Always on the verge of death, you are frantically testing. What does the American Library have to do with you? How old are you? Is it really okay to forcefully embarrass the plot...

In the Harry Potter fan novels, Hermione, Miss Beaver, is really about to become, no, she has already become a bus... Basically every book contains the heroine... One of them, me, a thirteen or fourteen year old girl, it is illegal!

Hermione is tired, almost all HP fans are her, they are all like a bus.

These days, those who forcibly create conflicts are also drunk 💀

Everything else about this book is good, but it's too jumpy and makes me want to die.

I just don't understand. That Delan was arrested for organizing terrorists. Why does the protagonist want to save him? His organization was a terrorist group and killed many people, including Muggles. Just because he knows the protagonist? Did you give the protagonist a wand? Just because we met a few times and talked a few words. You have to save the protagonist after giving him something? Not to mention that the two of them have not known each other for long, but even if your brother committed a crime, you would still go to the police station to rob him from prison?

Come on, it will be put on the shelves tomorrow and you will get monthly tickets, recommendations, and rewards. Just do it and it will be done. As long as the post-production process is not good, the plot is strong, and there are no glitches, support will be enough!

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