The Great Collector Who Can Transform Into

After reading your work, I have some feelings. The author has a very good grasp of emotions. He writes about things between children, which not only shows the charm of children, but the writing style does not appear childish. But there is one thing to say, the rhythm needs to be controlled. Some plots are also abbreviated. Some are written in detail. For example, at the beginning, it is enough to turn the first 5 chapters into 1 or 2 chapters. Your writing skills are quite sufficient. If it were me, Chapter 1: The part where the boy is chosen by the girl, including the potion. Chapter 2: Directly use the form of a girl's diary to recall and write about heart-to-heart conversations, boys and girls, and their other bonds. Chapter 3: The boy prepared a birthday gift for the girl. The married girl encounters unnatural dangers, and then the plot follows you. Such ups and downs are interesting to watch. Your writing style is very good and your characterization is better than mine. But the pacing and plot control are slightly unsatisfactory. Come on, let's work hard together.

I hope everyone will read the book after receiving the red envelope and point out any shortcomings.

Because something happened in the middle, this book was interrupted for more than seven days and I couldn't invest in it. I'm sorry.