Sword Fairy Swordsman

The introduction to the book is good, the subject matter is good, but I don't know how good this newcomer is at writing.

Each paragraph should not be too long, preferably about three or four lines, and one or two sentences should be one paragraph. Nowadays, readers mainly read it on mobile phones, unlike in the past when they read it on computers. If it is too dense, the reader experience will be extremely poor. The content is the same as that of a new author. The pace is too slow and too bland. The first six chapters only talk about a dull apprenticeship. You must know that editors usually read two or three chapters. This apprenticeship can be finished in one chapter. If you ask me, the first chapter is about apprenticeship and breaking off the engagement, so that the plot is compact. You can't be so good at the beginning. Many authors are only good after writing too much. Personal opinion, don't criticize if you don't like it.