The Little Black Hole Planet

The name is good, quite novel, looking forward to updates

Come on, come on, great writing!

Come on (*'▽'*)♪

It's a very good novel, it's already 260,000 words long, why hasn't it been signed?

1. Title of the book: The Planet of the Little Black Hole Author: @ Type: Science Fiction Published: 140,000 words Status: Unsigned Test date: February 14, 2020 Trial reading chapters: the first 10 chapters. 1. I read this little brother's book a long time ago and haven't commented on it because it is hard science fiction that the old aunt is not good at. Let me talk about it purely from a literary point of view. For example, the theory of the formation of small black hole planets, microscopic quantum theory, and the setting of "ether strings", I read it three times and still can't understand it. I think it will be more attractive to straight people in science and technology. Although I don't understand these theories, I have to admit that the overall setting is very detailed. The author has a very complete idea and writes it one by one, as if it were real. The presentation of the theory and its application pays great attention to the description of details. For example, when I wrote about the use of quantum teleporters to transport people to different interstellar places, I wrote down the details of what the teleporter is and the process of transmission. I almost thought there was such a technology, and the author spent a lot of effort. 2. I gave the author an opinion during the previous trial reading. I felt that the theoretical content was too boring and the plot was a bit out of touch with the presentation of science fiction theory. Other drug testers may have the same feeling. The author took the advice and rewrote the first three chapters. It feels much better and more readable after the rewrite. The background of the story is grand, and the main line is clear and profound. The protagonist Lan Yuxiang is a Martian warrior who belongs to the Extraterrestrial Living Space Alliance. He is in love with Lin Jing, a young doctor from the Earth, and the two develop into lovers. Once, Lan accepted an interstellar mission to detect a strange galaxy that resembled a small black hole. As a result, Lin Jing, who went to find him, accidentally fell into a small black hole. He went into danger alone to find his lover. Judging from the introduction of the work, the relationship between the two spans 400 years. It can be said that this setting is quite film and television. 3. The three planets surrounding the small black hole are quite romantic. Lan arrived at one of the planets, and the light emitted by the black hole gave the planet the brilliance of the sunset all day long. The size of the black hole is the size of your imagination. 4. Let's talk about the description of the emotional line. Maybe because this is the old aunt's specialty, she will pick some bones in the egg. Overall, it feels a bit awkward to start with. It can be seen that the author worked very hard to write down the story of how the two met and fell in love, referring to some film and television scenes. The key is that these scenes are relatively earthy, making the development of the relationship seem unnatural. Maybe men and women have different understandings of emotions. Men think a certain scene is romantic, but women don't think so. 5. Finally, pay attention to the paragraphs. Some paragraphs are too long. If it happens to be a theoretical paragraph and the screen is full of data, it will cause a headache.

My comment on another novel was clicked by the author, maybe it was a little casual, maybe it was because my comment had more words, but it was fate anyway. It was during the holidays, so I read the whole book, but only in a cursory way, jumping from the moment the protagonist fell into the new world. I am also a novice, my level is average, let me talk about my subjective feelings. 1. There are some common mistakes such as typos, unsound sentences, and overly long paragraphs, but it should not be a big problem for a web article. Maybe it was written in a hurry 2. The story of each chapter advances a little. . . It's a bit slow, or some passages are a bit redundant. . . The intuitive feeling is that I want to jump just watching it 3. As the author said, there are some logical explanations in the first few chapters and the main plot, but from a reading point of view, there is a slight disconnect. I can feel that the author hopes to build an interstellar civilization like Liu. . But after all, it took Da Liu almost ten years to write about the Three-Body Problem, and the human nature of Da Liu's Three-Body Problem is greater than the theory. The center of the novel is still people. After all, it is not a popular science article. 4. If the author wants to say something, a few personal opinions and many theories can be interspersed in the plot, unfolded bit by bit, and explained eloquently. There is no need to use a top student from Mars University to describe them all in one piece. It's difficult to understand, and a bit stiff 5. In terms of sensibility, there are a lot of scenes of Lin Jing and the protagonist falling in love, but because the disconnect between the previous and later texts is a bit serious, I think it might be better to interject narration in the later text, such as the protagonist recalling all the previous events in certain scenes, which can not only develop the plot but also resonate, and peel off the gratitude of the two people. 6. The male and female protagonists have little interaction in the new world. I think the plot can be advanced by following the traces of the male protagonist and the female protagonist. This may be able to make readers feel like they are not seeing each other, separated by a layer of veil. The above, I am also a novice, and what I wrote is also messy. It is my experience and personal opinion. Overall, I think the novel is pretty good, with a grand worldview, and I hope to keep up the good work. Come on. 🌹🤝

There has been no update for seven days, and the investment failed. It's too true.

Update soon, otherwise I'll send you a razor blade, a very sharp one.

It feels okay, just a little short 😥

Can't stop, exciting and exciting.

At first glance, the front is still awesome, I hope the back can keep up.

Reading this book gives me an inexplicable sense of anticipation, looking forward to seeing the latest content soon.

How many times a day? Are there any updates? Will it break out?

There are actually stickers here? I just found out today. Summarize the content. Celebrating Yu Nian style, one returns to the past and the other travels to the future. There are both martial arts and technological duels, but also the origin of myths; There are lingering love, but also lovesickness and sorrow; There are both legends of monsters, and explanations of principles; There are both cause and effect in the past life, and karma in the future; There are internal fights in the palace, and the warmth and coldness of human relationships; There are both giant beasts and helpless humans. The inspiration for South Korea's "My Love from the Star", an encounter in 400 years.

The title is good, and the first few chapters have a sci-fi feel to them. I finished the book so quickly. Come on

🌹🌹 Happy New Year, go out less and write more!