The Rise of Sunagakure

It's well written, I hope it will be updated more often.

Personal opinion: With regard to the magnetic escape of the Third Kazekage, he uses magic to create a large magnetic escape barrier to trap the enemy from all sides, and then launches various attacks within the magnetic escape barrier. This is basically an invincible move. And you just have two large ranges, and the power is not concentrated, so you can't defeat the enemy's ninjutsu. Naruto's sage mode hits Pain, Kabuto's sage mode hits a kaleidoscope and an eternal kaleidoscope at the same time, and the protagonist hits a third-generation Tsuchikage, no KO, and half of himself is destroyed. I feel that you are poisonous. The plot is slow, not exciting, and you are self-inflicted. Updates are too slow. It's strange that you can attract talents. After all, the most attractive aspects of your book are the novel perspective of the Third Kazekage and some of the plots at the beginning.

1 • Question: Given the weakness of Sand Ninja, education reform is bound to happen. However, education reform will inevitably encounter a lot of opposition and support 1. Advantages: (1) The weakness of the Sand Ninja represents the weakness of the Ninja family. Facing the powerful Kazekage, the resistance to change will be relatively small (Qin State Shang Yang's reform was only fully implemented when the Qin State was so weak that it was on the verge of collapse. Other countries were abandoned by the nobles halfway. Stop) (2) The defeat of the sand ninja on the battlefield (they almost lost a third of Konoha and suffered heavy losses) and the difficulty of survival in the desert forced the family ninjas to also crave change and benefits, so a certain degree of change in a good direction is what they are happy to see (meaning they are willing to make certain concessions) 2. Disadvantages : (1) Education will inevitably consume a lot of resources, squeezing the village's originally few resources (2) The emergence of poor ninjas will inevitably damage the existing ninjutsu and the monopoly privileges and interests of the ninja family, and they will definitely oppose it (after King Hui of Qin succeeded to the throne, he continued to implement Shang Yang's reforms, while looking for trouble and killing Shang Yang to calm the grievances of the nobles. Shit. It can be seen that the stock determines the head. Even if you know that reform is needed, you will not harm your own privileges and interests.) Two • Suggestions (this is only done because the Sha Ninja Village is small): (1) Establish a ninja technical vocational school and select poor children to enroll. If poor children do not enter the school, the whole family will be punished. (There are parents who do not want their children to go to school in many backward areas) (2) School-age children of ninja families must also enroll in school to cultivate team spirit and village honor. (Families can take day study and take one or two months off) (3) Provide free meals, accommodation, clothing and other materials to school students (to lure poor families) (4) Conduct a two-year semi-military management, obedience training and physical strengthening, and conduct a large number of village-loving education. [Key Points] (5) Teach basic literacy, three-body skills, two basic general ninjutsu (compulsory) based on personal five-element talents, poison skills, medical skills, puppet skills, etc. (Elective). Three • Diversion education (conducted after the basic talent tendencies are seen within two years, extra points can be added when the family ninja is divided with the family after meritorious deeds) (1) Children without talent will receive a one-year low-level class of physical education, blacksmithing, farming, and other skills education. (2) Children with weak talents will undergo a one-year intermediate class to educate production ninjas in low-level engineering ninjutsu such as digging ditches, collecting water, breaking rocks, tunneling, and building roads (learn at least a few engineering ninjutsus, and graduate packages will be distributed, and geniuses will have the opportunity to be promoted to advanced classes) (3) Children with high talents will enter the advanced class where children of family ninjas with medium and high talents will be educated in killing arts. (4) Cultural and production-oriented ninja education for family ninjas with weak talents. (5) Family ninjas can get extra points by participating in foreman and teacher induction assessments to bribe family ninjas. (If the opposition is really strong, just propose this as a concession. However, there are no points in the post-job assessment, so you may be dismissed due to poor performance) Four • Advantages of this graded education: (1) Saving resources: Most children actually only receive basic education, and are responsible for three years of food and clothing (accommodation is not valuable) (2) Development of productivity: The work efficiency of productive ninjas is much higher than that of the poor, especially the poor. The main reason is that the large-scale canal water diversion and afforestation projects after the protagonist will inevitably require the power of ninjas. However, the number of existing national defense and mission-oriented ninjas in the sand ninja is insufficient, and the dignity of ninjas cannot be spared (Konoha genin find cats to farm, but those who do not specialize in this will be laughed at) (3) Easing the resistance of family ninjas: The vast majority of poor production-oriented ninjas cannot threaten the privileges and status of family fighting ninjas, they only create wealth and are exploited. This kind of reform actually favors family ninjas in all aspects. (The second-generation Hokage implemented poor ninja education just to find cannon fodder. Look what did Sakura learn in school? Only the Three Body Technique. In this way, a large number of geniuses still emerged among the civilians of Konoha, such as Minato, Kai, etc., So don't worry that the civilians cannot develop) (4) It can carry out class circulation and increase the work enthusiasm of the poor: Qin's twenty military merits are the cornerstone of class circulation and sweeping the six countries. Production-type ninjas are also ninjas, and their income and benefits are bound to be much higher than those of ordinary poor people. Even those without talent can still learn some survival skills by hanging around for two years. What's more, physical training is conducive to work, and craftsmanship is conducive to survival and family inheritance. In ancient China, being an apprentice meant working as an ox or a horse. (5) Productive ninjas are also ninjas. They have learned the Three Body Technique and can be used as cannon fodder when necessary. Even civilians can be trained to transport supplies. If it is really useless, it can be used as welfare to buy people off and increase their loyalty and happiness. Even if they immigrate in the future, they will still be spies in reserve (6) Focus on a two-year village-loving patriotic education to cultivate direct lineage, reduce spies, cultivate loyalty, and increase bonds. (Yes, I'm talking about scorpions!)

Don't be impetuous, don't be too aggressive. New people, new works, be more understanding and more tolerant.

I made a mistake. The Third Raikage died in the Third War instead of the Second World War. This has been corrected. Thanks to this friend for the reminder, and everyone's opinions are welcome here. If you have any mistakes or suggestions, you can tell me.

Only the Kingdom of Iron can create ninja tools? Are you kidding me? Has the country of craftsmen been conquered by you? The Kingdom of Kong was tricked by you? The Kingdom of Sky can now build flying ninja tools, but also small shurikens, kunai and other rubbish? Uncle Snake has already built a mechanical Naruto, the Kingdom of Stars has computers, and the Kingdom of Snow has trains. You don't understand Naruto's weirdness, do you?

I watched the beginning and it was pretty good. I gave you 27 votes.

Can you kill the Toad Immortal? I hate people who make prophecies and are self-righteous. What can a prophecy mean?

The author took a good look at Naruto first and slipped away

The recent ones that are purely political have been a bit watered down, and there are too few ninja content. You can learn from the story content of the anime Naruto to make it up, there is no need to worry about how to write it yourself. For example: As a hidden disciple, can Xie be brainwashed without having the will of sand? Hold a joint ninja exam with other ninja villages. Can you make up your own genin names? As an author who has watched Naruto, can you still not know the regular ninjutsu of other ninja villages? It's down to earth, it's a ninja novel after all, right?

When Chinese people write Japanese anime fan fiction, most of the things written by the authors are a bit out of tune with the real Japanese style, which makes it very embarrassing to read (of course, I have also seen two or three Japanese writers who write very well). Kishimoto's Naruto background may be based on the Kamakura shogunate era, when the shoguns and daimyo armed forces divided one side, and the emperor could only survive in name, pretending to be stupid. The above is the background. The most problematic thing is the dialogue between the various characters in the article. It looks too Chinese and awkward. Although Japanese culture is partly borrowed from China, it is self-contained. I have been traveling in Japan for a while. When I was in college, I had a classmate who was a Japanese student. I communicated with Chinese people on a daily basis, but there were some differences between them. But these small differences made people feel a big difference. You can go to Bunko to read Nikkei, or you can read Japanese literature to get a feel for it. There are quite a lot of great Japanese literature 😅.

Killing those emerging nobles is a failure, and his political methods are really naive. I should have avoided this section if I wasn't strong enough in writing, but it ended up killing me. This kind of thing has actually happened in history. At this time, the best thing for the new daimyo to do is to win over the new nobles, fight against the old nobles, and achieve a balance. Feeling a bit broken now

Um, are your requirements so low?

The writing is average, the plot is average, and the subject matter is average. A qualified novice, try not to think too hard when reading.

——The composition of magnetic escape—— In fact, there are two types of magnetic escape, one is the magnetic sand of the wind shadow lineage, and the other is the magnetic escape blood successor with the attribute of thunder and earth. The magnetic sand of the Wind Shadow lineage is composed of wind + earth. This is a speculation on the nature of chakra. Wind represents the intangible and intangible, and earth represents particle matter. In the Country of Wind, Hidden Sand Village, and Kazekage, Wind Escape is definitely more reasonable. Troy, the magnetic escape ninja of Yunyin Village, is thunder + earth. This is because modern technology produces magnets, which is a physical synthesis. It is more reasonable for the Kingdom of Thunder, Cloud Hidden Village, and Blood Successor Ninja to prefer the Thunder type. Kishimoto still follows the naming principle for character setting, so as to maintain an established style. ——Advantages of iron sand—— The sand escapers of the Kazekage lineage can levitate, activate sword control, and can be dragged under their feet and fly. You can mark a character and launch a tracking attack. It can be combined with Thunder Release to enhance the voltage and increase the power of Ninjutsu. It can also generate electromagnetic induction and absorb magnetic objects (such as spots) in the magnetic field. The sealing characteristics emphasized in the original work. ——The development direction of magnetic escape—— 1. Earth escape Sunagakure is good at: magnetic sand, poison, and puppetry. So my idea was to combine the three. Sand dust haze: Iron sand is made into small particles and enters the human body through breathing. Sand Dust Virus: Smaller, like a bacterial virus, it spreads iron sand through blood, skin contact, and indirect contact with chakra. Nano worm sand: Combined with inorganic reincarnation, it can achieve the effect of nano worms, producing endless nano-scale magnetic sand, including in the enemy's body. Effect: Remotely control the target's body, regardless of life or death, and use the "magnetic secret technique" puppet technique to achieve the effect of reincarnation from the dirty earth. Mark the target with iron sand, and you can throw the sure-hit "Spear of Death Thorns" and the Thousand Swords to Pierce the Body. Fetching objects from the air can adsorb the marked target to a designated location, similar to the three abilities of Payne. You can use the sealing characteristics to interfere with the target chakra. 2. Thunder Release Wireless charging: It is to achieve chakra sharing at a certain distance. The closer the distance, the better the effect. Electromagnetic Induction: Simulate Tiandao Payne to operate the gravitational and repulsive forces on magnetic objects. Ultra-high voltage: Use magnetic escape to enhance high-voltage output to achieve the effect of Kirin. Explosive Escape: Earth + Thunder can awaken Explosive Escape. Sand and Iron have the explosive escape properties which are very scary. For example, in the Seven Ninja Sword's Explosive Sword Splash, an iron spear is equivalent to a missile. Iron sand can explode when defending, injuring the opponent at close range, and deflecting the opponent's hidden weapons from a long distance. Can also possess the ability of Deidara's clay, a sandworm that explodes in the human body. Steel Release: Thunder + Earth can awaken Steel Release. This is after Beilihu absorbs the Explosion Release Hunter, and then uses the Oni Malo Technique to balance and adjust it into a blood successor that suits him. Bei Liuhu applies Steel Escape to the body. It is an ultimate hardening technique that integrates offense and defense. The hardness of steel is considered to be much stronger than iron... Xun Escape: It is the blood successor who awakened after Bei Liu breathed and collected Ye Cang. There are many opinions about Swift Release. The original work did not say how to match it. Wind + Fire is more believable. But there are endless debates on the forum, whether it is wind fire or fire thunder or thunder wind, it depends on the author's own needs, and he can force the awakening. This Blood Successor is much faster than the Thunder Release Ninjutsu, and is comparable to the Time and Space Ninjutsu. The disadvantage is the same as the Heavenly Sending Technique. Moving at high speed can cause injuries to the body. ——The ability of Burning Release—— Scorching Release is a blood inheritance produced by the transformation of fire + wind attributes, so you can create some ninjutsu of your own, not just steam killing. For example, using the Ninjutsu of Wind Release to add the characteristics of Burning Release, cutting → evaporating → burning into ashes. You can even teach Hayakura Rasengan→Scorch Release·Rasengan Shuriken. Can help Ye Cang awaken Swift Escape. Zhuo Laotangwu (similar to adding earth life, defense and counter-injury, and can also lock up the enemy), Zhuo Clone, and Zhuo Liubi. You can also imitate water escape: 1. Hot Wheels (water cutting, acceleration and collateral damage) 2. Burning Wave (water breaking wave, cutting damage) 3. One Yang Finger (Water Iron Cannon Technique, Water Trumpet Technique) 4. Red Lotus Breakthrough (Hard Vortex Water Blade, Wind Release Rasengan) The attribute difference between Burning Release and Dust Release is one "earth". ——Developing the Country of Wind—— New energy: This is the development experience of Xijiang. Wind power generation and solar power generation can be used to grow plants below. If the plants grow well and block the equipment, sheep can be raised. Shrubs: To retain soil and water in the desert, we do not rely on towering trees. In the world of Naruto, ninjutsu is productivity. It is said that the Death Forest was created by Hashirama using the tree world. Therefore, genetic technology can be used to improve desert plants, such as white cells + succulents/shrubs/dry trees, which have extremely strong growth capabilities. Groundwater: A huge root network is established at the bottom of the sandy soil. Oil: Liquid gold, sand escape loophole, this can be used. Maritime resources: maritime trade, oil, natural gas, jewelry. Garel Mine: Similar to uranium mines in the real world. Weather Doll: Yuta was one of the first batch of test subjects for Orochimaru's reincarnation. He was already dead when he met little Naruto. It has the ability that the weather changes according to the mood. The Kingdom of Wind needs such unreasonable ability. Uchiha Shin: Orochimaru's test subject, not very good character, very talented and highly compatible. The talents of Oto Ninja Village: Take Orochimaru's path, leaving Orochimaru with no way to go. Crystal Release: Guren's Crystal Release is also what Sand Hidden Village needs most. Glass and jewelry are superficial, and semiconductors can be studied. Core technology is the trend.

Let's put it this way, the idea is very good, but the author's writing is really awkward. I can't tell you exactly what is wrong, so I stopped reading 😥

The timeline is so messed up, how did you get to Sanjiang?

There has been no movement for several days, so he must have been quarantined.

Once you've sorted out your ideas, come out quickly. It's not easy to find something that suits your taste.

Senior Xiongbao is gone! 😭

He entered the palace. I heard that Zhao Gao fell in love with him.

Come on bear bag, always support.

There is no way to control the abruptness of life, but you can still have some confidence when you are invincible, come on! Mr. Bear Bag

You won't be entering the palace... I finally found a good Naruto fanfic, and the main character choice is finally not Konoha. I just discovered this book yesterday and finished reading it today. Then I checked the latest chapter update time and found that it hasn't been updated for almost a week. If you can't really enter the palace, you can't, you can't, you can't, you can't

Mr. Bearbag. . . Still leaving

Are you a eunuch? No updates for several days!

Your other publisher has permanently banned me. I really don't understand why. I guess not many people can see this comment.

Come on, author, don't you want perfect attendance this month? It's been down for a week, it's time to update

I can't accept such a beautiful novel "Eunuch", it's such a pity...

I think in the author's setting, the three holy places should be sealed places. The biological races in the three holy places are too talented and pose too great a threat to human beings. They should have been driven out of the main world by the protagonist's apprentices from ancient times and sealed in three spaces.