Star Field Order

To be honest, I was a little tired from reading it, and I didn't understand many parts after reading it twice. The title of the book sounds like a science fiction novel, and the introduction sounds like a fantasy novel, but I chose a light novel? 1. After reading more than 10 chapters, I still don't understand what the protagonist wants to do. The way to resolve many conflicts is a bit too simple. For example, the protagonist easily solved the disease that his predecessors had not solved (still a genius setting). When he went to Yaowang Valley, he just had a simple fight and everything was fine. 2. The progress of the plot fluctuated quickly and slowly, and some things were passed by without being explained clearly. There was no emotional interaction with Huang Yanran, and he fell in love with her after he was saved once. 3. The protagonist has too few roles, and there are so many supporting characters that I even forgot the name of the protagonist in the end. Chapter 4 has too many names for the supporting characters, making it very complicated. It is recommended that the supporting characters who disappear once do not need to have names. 4. Regarding the issue of the power system, I did not introduce the specific system divisions under this world view. I just saw the words "foundation building" and "golden elixir". The protagonist and the master fought back and forth, but he did not say what level he was. 5. The writing style is a bit martial arts, and the initial structure and fighting plot also look like martial arts. It clearly has such a big world view. The above is only my personal understanding. After all, there are a thousand kinds of Hamlet for a thousand people.

The writing is very good, the plot is not abrupt, and the world view is huge.

The background of the novel is well thought out. This article gave me a feeling of modern immortality (plus the science fiction universe mentioned by the author in the introduction), and the plot capacity is large. This places high demands on the author, and I can easily fail if I am not careful. I have read more than 20 chapters. The plot is compact but there are too many characters, and it is difficult to distinguish the priorities. The contradictions in the plot are not very obvious. The compact plot is an advantage, but it also tests the author's writing skills and whether he can tell the story clearly within a certain number of words. The introduction is full of exclamation points, which can easily cause discomfort. In the following text, there are situations where an exclamation point is used in conjunction with three periods. The author also needs to distinguish between "." And ".". It is recommended to learn the correct use of punctuation marks. Friendly reminder: The work is written for readers, which requires the author to clearly express the story in the text instead of pointing out his own intentions in the comments. (I'm not saying that this problem has already occurred to me, I'm just giving it a proper reminder.) Personal opinion, don't comment if you don't like it. Come on! The background is well set up, and it would be great to be able to write this article clearly and attractively.

[Book Review] The concept and writing style are both good. [Advantages] The concept is rich and powerful, the writing is average, and the characters are vivid. [Disadvantages] Paragraph content can be streamlined to avoid concentrating large paragraphs of content. Pay attention to the normal use of punctuation marks. The first three chapters are slow and do not lead to the protagonist's main conflict and the golden finger and other attractive content. [Evaluation] C [Remarks] I hope it will be helpful to the author. If you don't like it, don't spray it. If you like it, please add more.

The large writing style is very immersive and visual. Very suitable for writing fantasy ducks. Moreover, the view of the universe is grand yet realistic. It's just that the narration takes up too much, but everything else is pretty good. Thank you for the update (ง •̀_•́)ง

I admire your writing attitude very much. The number of your recommendation votes is very good, which shows that your writing can be recognized by some people. The road is long and far away, I will search up and down. Come on! <>, this is my book, I hope you can review it, thank you!

First of all, I saw the introduction, which has a certain appeal. As I read it slowly, I felt that the author had some great ideas when I saw the preface. My first impression when I read this book was that it should be an ancient text, but when I saw the mobile phone... Well, I was too naive. But I saw that there are many places in the article that have a strong ancient flavor, such as those moves, settings, and those ancient sentences. It feels great, but it has a mobile phone, which I couldn't accept at first. Now, it's still a little hard to accept. There are quite a few original settings by the author in the article, which are very detailed, easy to understand, and appear at the right time. It doesn't cause boredom, it's like the icing on the cake, it's quite interesting. I would like to praise the writing style, it is great. When I first started watching it, it was faster and I didn't feel anything. So I watched it again and it gave me a surprise. Very concise writing! It's also very smooth overall. The idea is novel and you want to create a new style? Come on! I really like it. I'm going to class. I'll collect it first and read it later.

Okay, okay, the sentences are smooth and the plot is good. There are just some typos, but I can understand it.

I skipped through a few chapters and flipped through the table of contents. The author's writing style is very good, and he is more literary than me. But your novel type is quite different. I guess the author wants to start with stories in different worlds and finally find an opportunity to put them together. If this is really the case, the world view will be very large, and it will be too confusing to describe it as a unit story. When readers who like fantasy are very interested, when they turn to the next chapter, it turns into science fiction, and there may be very few people who do not quit decisively. So the big road will be difficult to walk. But you don't write articles because you like it, right? So please keep it up. Well, actually I'm just a novice and can't express any good opinions. Please forgive me.

I just read a few chapters briefly, which makes me laugh. 1. First of all, the title of the book is "Starry Sky Order Realm", but I read a few chapters and even I didn't find any connection even after I tuned it. I think this should have been taken care of at the beginning The description of the plot is very bland and does not have the sense of grandeur of the book title and message The writing style is better, and the design of the development pit of the plot is also very clever Because I haven't read much, I don't say much, and maybe it's not in place and it makes me laugh I think the first few chapters need to be repaired.

The writing is good, but the plot is a bit messy. Too many world views are mixed together, but the battle scenes are too simple. I hope the author can deal with the rhythm of the novel and sort out some logical issues. Come on!

It's very good, but if you don't read it carefully, it's hard to understand what's written in the book. It only covers ten lines in one glance!

I won't comment on your writing style or anything like that. In fact, you know everything, but you are just going against the market. If you guessed it right, you want to depict a world with a complete history and a grand background, rather than focusing on the protagonist or a certain event plot (although you will definitely string it together later to make everyone realize it, but the readers don't know). You directly take the laws of the world (or some values) as the core, use many characters to expand the surface, and slowly piece it together from many aspects to create a complete, logical, flesh-and-blood world, and compose an epic legend. (The above is a guess) To put it simply, you want to write an epic legend and biography, a bit like a traditional novel... But in the words of the editor, it has no commercial value and is not suitable for today's online writing market (today's online writing is mainly about Shuangdian, and there are very few that can prove the truth from other aspects. I will not know about it in the future. The most important thing about Shuangdian is the sense of substitution. Only after you have been substituted can you empathize with it. Only when you feel it can you feel happy, and your type does not have a sense of substitution) Because Internet articles are different from traditional literature. Every word of traditional literature needs to be revised and chewed repeatedly, and has a great literary nature, while Internet articles are mostly just to pass the time and satisfy the reader's certain realistic desire. How many of them can really calm down and read it? As an old bookworm, have you really settled down before? There are two possibilities for this work. One is to create a genre of writing to confer gods and enlightenment (I have not seen this type of writing that has become popular on the Internet before, maybe I don't know), and the other is to die directly. Both possibilities are based on your reader base, and their acceptance and recognition of your world, or their recognition of the certain ideas you convey. As for whether you can sign a contract, I think you should be mentally prepared when you plan to write this type of novel. If you want to rely on Internet articles for a living, you must follow the audience and rules of Internet articles. It does not necessarily mean that no one likes it or the writing is not good, but because you are a newcomer, and there are very few readers who can come in and know about this book. My personal suggestion is not to be the first novel of this type. Regardless of whether you can control it, from the perspective of readers, you also need to use novels with a large audience to accumulate a certain number of readers and fans. If you insist on writing the first novel, then you have to be prepared to be suppressed for a long time (I guess at least a million), and it is very likely that you will fail to prove your truth. (I chose the second one, because I don't rely on this for a living. I just wrote it for myself. Others may see it better, and it doesn't matter whether it is beautiful or not.) The above are all from the bottom of my heart. I am also an old bookworm. I also have many worlds with grand backgrounds that I have imagined. I also want to convey a certain kind of thought. I want to compose an epic chapter and change today's impetuousness, but I also feel that it is unrealistic from the bottom of my heart. At least I can't stand such extremely slow-burning novels (including my own, writing is one thing, reading is another) (The above is purely a personal opinion and a sincere comment, and can be deleted)

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I read the first five chapters first. The plot direction is not bad, but the description of the environment and fighting scenes need to be strengthened. The time jump is not very good, so please give it a try. The title and introduction of the book are a bit fantasy, which is quite good.

I'm going, I'm really speechless about this book. The introduction is wonderful and attractive. The book is also very interesting, the storyline is very attractive, and the characters are well described. I have nothing to say. What's super speechless is that the plot advances very steadily and there is nothing abrupt. Overall, this book is great! Keep up the good work, haha! (The above is purely my personal opinion, don't worry about it, because it's useless to care, hahaha, bye)

The story is good and the writing is pretty good. But as a newcomer, I don't actually recommend writing an overly grand worldview. I've read a few chapters and will share my own views. (I generally don't have a sharp tongue and won't say too much, so don't worry) 1. Since someone is sick at the beginning, don't say funny words. This will be counterproductive and not so comfortable to watch. 2. There are some problems with the use of personal pronouns. If you use Rong Rong at the beginning, don't keep using Rong Rong in the future. It will be annoying. Just use the word "he" instead. 3. It is recommended not to introduce the world view at the beginning. The wedge can be written into the main text, and others may not read the relevant work. If others don't look at the wedge, your work will be confusing to others. 4. This book feels like a fantasy continent from the beginning, and the era should be similar to that in Battle Through the Sky. However, when you describe it, you have a lot of modern colors, which can easily confuse readers. As I said before, Alien Continent is a pitfall for novice authors, so try not to take advantage of the setting. Your atmosphere needs to be changed. It is best to make it heavier and in line with the concept of this world. For specific details, I recommend that you refer to Dou Po and Shen Yin. These two books are also about different worlds. Although they are simple texts, they should be of some help to you. You can take a look at their settings, especially the one tower, two sects and four square pavilions of Dou Po Cang, which are quite similar to yours. You should first write down a rough setting on paper to avoid swallowing it. Summarize the following aspects 1 Person 2 Atmosphere These two are the only ones, but I still hope you can do a good job in the setting. It seems that your novel is quite successful so far. (Maybe some of the above words are ugly, don't take them to heart) Come on ↖(^ω^)↗! (Okay, it doesn't matter if you give me some extra juice, right?)

The writing is good and the writing is smooth, but I personally feel that it would be better if some details could be clearer and simpler.

Come on, why don't you apply for a contract 🙂, support me 🙂

The narrative of the story is clear, but it feels a little flat. It could use more exclamation points to express emotions. In addition, use "" before the verb instead of ""... It still needs to be more accurate.

Thanks, I have a lot of imagination, come on! Keep writing!

Already invested! Big cheers for the author! Thank you also for investing in "Luo Ying and Deed"! ! !

How can I put it, it feels a bit biased and needs to be tasted slowly.

I wish fellow Taoist friends to sign the contract as soon as possible, time will prove everything, come on ✊

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Quite interesting! Collected! Come on update! Welcome to visit us again!

Hay novel, I hope the author will work hard 66666.

Brother, don't say anything, just say one word, and I'll be convinced. If you can keep updating for a year, and 700,000 words, I'll be convinced! I would like to give you a small suggestion. It is not necessarily a good thing to divide it into chapters too thinly, but it would be too bad to rewrite each chapter into one, two or three chapters. It will make you dizzy. Readers cannot read it all in one sitting, and they may not know where they will end up next time.

The concept is really clever, and I can't stop reading it. The author's world view is very grand, and he has created a universe of his own. I look forward to updating it soon. Please support it!