Becoming an Immortal

After a brief look at the front, I found that the sense of immersion is not good, and the description is almost non-existent. It still has the same problems as most newcomers: long dialogues make the full text appear bloated, making people lose the interest of reading** That's it, I wish you to become a god soon.

I always feel that the author didn't pay much attention to this article. There are many grammatical errors (obvious errors), many typos, and some indescribable symbols. The writing style is a bit immature, and it is quite boring to read, and there is a bit of helplessness... The punctuation marks are also not used standardly, and there are many errors. The article is boring to read. I hope the author will take this article seriously! Come on.

The writing is very good and the characters are very distinct, but the first few chapters are a bit inconsistent with the title of the book. Come on, the author, I wish God will make it a big success! ! ! ✊✊✊✊

The plot is pretty good, but it needs to be refreshed and the punctuation is wrong! Under normal circumstances, three exclamation points should not be used together. Well, the six dots of the ellipses are enough. Readers may think that too many dots of the ellipsis will annoy the reader. In fact, this is not the case.

Please put another nice cover! This still has a little impact! If you like cultivating immortals, you hope to take a look at mine!

You can change the introduction to be more exciting, come on!

It's very honest. I feel like the author is very considerate. Come on, look forward to the update.