Fu Ming

Although it is a book shortage, I really couldn't continue reading after reaching 100 chapters. I was confused and confused about one sentence after another. The protagonist still hasn't figured out who he is after so long? Who is the opponent? There is no sense of urgency, the plot advances too slowly, even though it is a free chapter, it cannot be too watery, the supporting characters have more scenes than the protagonists, I am drunk!

Not bad, keep it up at this level

It's a bit surprising that it wasn't revealed on the spot.

From the beginning, you suppressed and suppressed all the time. After Chapter 15, you exposed the Taoist priest. Later, you were arrested and ran for your life. Are you writing traditional literature? If you are writing a fun article, how many chapters will it take before the fun part comes out? When will this family be revenged by the protagonist? According to the author's pace, I doubt whether it will be enjoyable within a hundred chapters. It will probably take hundreds of chapters for the protagonist to have the ability to take revenge on this family. This is only a small local family. The writing is good, but it may not be suitable for me to read.

Doudou, are all of us modern people such virgins? It's okay in peacetime, but it's better to be ruthless in troubled times! It's okay if you don't want to kill, but you don't have this idea, and you don't even struggle in your heart. Alas, I feel relieved when I see your results. The darker points you wrote should have better results😄

The writing is very messy and the priorities are unclear. Why write so many supporting characters? It's like making a TV series without being afraid of the main character but carefully filming the supporting characters. Who would love to watch it?

There are so many subplots that it's hard to figure out who the protagonist is. Even though I have already said it, the protagonist is written like a soy sauce artist.

The conclusion is written at the beginning: The writing is good, but it is posted on the wrong platform. If you don't like long explanations, you can skip reading below. Let's talk about the advantages first. The author's writing skills are already quite good. The first dozens of chapters describe a traditional charlatan and a landlord's trick of defrauding the daughter of a poor family. The ugly faces of the fellow villagers are vividly depicted, and the debates with the old Taoist priests are also remarkable. To be honest, it has the flavor of traditional literature that appeared after the early founding of the People's Republic of China. However, this is also a shortcoming, which will be discussed in detail next. What online writing platforms now require is that the plot should have ups and downs within a few chapters, and should not be too aggrieved. The protagonist's personality should be more likable. Unfortunately, the protagonist of this book is decidedly unlikable. When facing doubts from the villagers, the protagonist actually chose to let Jiang San do the so-called explanation even though he had already seen through the old trick. Not only did it make people feel that it was a confusing operation (exposing the principle of the trick and asking someone to explain it?), It was unnecessary, but also made the protagonist show a feeling of being at a loss and indecisive when he was questioned later. Also, I still can't understand the brain circuit that the author set for the villagers. Why is it that the old Taoist priest's trick is to covet Jiang San's daughter and then become a pervert? Shouldn't it be disrespectful to the immortal family? Just saying a few words questioning the old Taoist priest can lead to the association of being greedy for others' bodies? After talking about the irrationality of the plot, let's talk about the rhythm, which can be summed up in three words: drag, slowness, and cumbersomeness. I don't know how long the author's ideal outline is, but if I keep writing at this pace, it will start at seven to eight million words. Exposing a charlatan alone took thirty chapters, many of which were unnecessary. Unless Wang Qing was some kind of villain, the emphasis was on the main point. The hero's duel, the key scene in Jin Yong's book, was not this long. In other online articles, readers can understand what is going on at a glance and wrote dozens of chapters. If the first seven or eight chapters had solved the problem and established a solid character for the protagonist, the book would not have been so bad. The indecisive, even a little hung up protagonist and the procrastination of the plot are really difficult to retain fast-paced online readers. (PS: This book is actually okay as a traditional novel) The last sentence,

Damn it, isn't this order too messy? There are many plots that seem to have appeared before. They must have appeared before, and then appeared again later. Please give the author some refreshments! . . . . . .

Hurry up and update. One chapter a day is a bit too little 😆 Of course, quality and quantity must be maintained

Look how bleak it is, how pitiful it is