Memories of the Day

I read the first chapter, and as a senior (even though I am a slut and the book has been deleted), I shamelessly pointed out a small problem. First of all, most of the first chapter is dialogue, and the characterization of the characters is not clear enough. For example, in the first paragraph, when picking up the child, you can add some psychological activities of the protagonist. For example, when you pick up the child, you think "Huh? Why is there a child here?" and then drop the pieces of paper. After picking up the piece of paper, you can also ask the male protagonist to stretch out his finger and tease the child, "Is your name Qingtian?" At this time, the child giggles, making the male protagonist feel familiar and feel that this is some kind of fate, so that the story will not be too abrupt. Secondly, in the dialogue, this one yelled and that one smiled, which looks very weak. It is recommended to open the door and shout, and then write the dialogue content in another paragraph. In the laughter channel, use the corners of the mouth to smile, and then write the dialogue content in another paragraph. Finally, I am not here to ruin things. The author's story has just begun. I hope it will become more and more interesting in the future.