The Journey of the Heavens Begins with Zhu Xian

After reading about 10 chapters, I think the writing is pretty good, the sentences are fluent, and the punctuation marks are better than most ** authors. But I found that the author does not know how to write novels. To write a novel, there must be conflicts and contradictions. Only when conflicts and contradictions are resolved can you feel better, but not vice versa. Also, the character descriptions do not have unique personalities. Actually, if you look at the protagonists of the novels on the monthly ticket list, they may be funny, cold, or have high IQs, or they may have supporting characters to complement the protagonist's personality. And your first 10 chapters are just a passer-by template. It does not make the reader feel that he is a living person. Then the plot is set up without conflicts. The protagonist saw the Spiritual Lord just to satisfy his own shallow knowledge and did not do much. If it were written by someone else, he might have used earthly delicacies to please him, or told jokes and storytelling to show his extraordinaryness. In Wan Jianyi's strategy, the protagonist was actually arranged by someone else, which completely failed to reflect the protagonist's ability. And after so many years, the protagonist reveals his true feelings for Wan Jianyi, but on the other hand he doesn't know that he has been arranged. This will make the reader's protagonist have a low IQ, little experience, and not feel happy. When he met Xiaohuan, he directly told her name. Neither Xiaohuan nor his grandfather were surprised. This was a bug. I read in the comments that there is an explanation at the end, but I don't know how to explain it, so I didn't read it. Because the plot you are dealing with here is still ordinary. If it were written by another author, it might be set up as Xiaohuan and Grandpa being bullied, and then the protagonist would pretend to be slapped in the face to make it more enjoyable by default. But the author didn't, he just showed that he knew the plot well and had a superior attitude. Xiao Huan praised the protagonist for being handsome, but the protagonist didn't show how happy he was. If it were another author, he would have shown the protagonist's personality and developed a relationship with Xiao Huan. The biggest poisonous point of this paragraph is that it does not reflect the character of Zhou Xian as a liar and the interesting plot of Zhou Xiaohuan's confrontation with his grandfather. In general, the author of the first ten chapters not only abandoned the cool points of the original work, but also failed to reflect the fun points of writing his own book. Don't think that only cool novels with pretentious slaps in the face are enjoyable, any novel can be enjoyable. In "Lord of Mysteries", it's more fun to have the protagonist become an unknown boss. In "The Legend of Mortal Cultivation of Immortality", the protagonist just runs away if he can't beat him. After running, it's more fun to be a villain. The brotherly love of the protagonists sacrificing their breastbones in "Perfect World" is a cool point, and the weak victory over the strong and being the leader in the school in "Global Martial Arts" is a cool point. Digging for treasures, picking up girls, leveling up, bullying others, etc. Are all fun. I say so much because "Zhu Xian" is a work that I like very much. The parents of Caomiao Village were killed; Dazhu Fengtian was not easy to protect his shortcomings, his fellow apprentices pitied Zhang Xiaofan, but his crush on Tian Linger fulfilled Qi Hao's love, and his efforts failed to improve his decadence; and then the Seven Meridians Martial Arts Competition, encountering Baguio, the concept of good and evil, etc. I hope there will be an author who can write Zhu Xian well, but most of them are either mediocre or come to search for heavenly books. I don't really understand what Zhu Xian's novel is trying to express. I hope the author will get better and better. I suggest you follow the public account "Xuan Pai" which teaches you how to write novels. I hope the second part of the Zhu Xian fanfic will be a big hit.

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Doesn't the author create a group? Actually, author, have you ever thought that the death of the protagonist would be the best ending? The beauty of incompleteness can bring infinite reverie to readers, so many classic novels are incomplete. The Dead Ming Dynasty opens the next time travel and has its own style. The reason why many classic novels are classic is that they have their own style. For example, the originator of Infinite, if there is a heroine in it, it will not become the originator.

Will the author harvest Ye Hongyu and Shanshan at night?

Big cheers for the author! Well written❤️

The author made this protagonist look like a waste. Ever since he came down from the mountain after studying, he has been injured and vomited blood again and again. He has never been completely intact.

Can you make the protagonist's character more normal? What is the most unpleasant thing about a woman crying and being merciful when seeing a woman? This is not the emotion that a normal person should have. Why don't you understand the principles of yin and yang if you practice Tai Chi? If you can't see through women, why should you practice? The author really likes it. You can arrange a separate world scene. It's always messy and really boring.

I discovered that Xiao Ding wrote a prequel to Zhu Xian, and then I discovered that Xiao Ding had long forgotten what he had written in Zhu Xian. In Zhu Xian, he wrote that Wan Jian Yi broke off his hand. The ghost doctor pressed one on him, and then he wrote that when Wan Jian Yi swept the floor, his hand was still broken, ghost. The doctor has long since become Mr. Ghost. In Zhu Xian, Wan Jianyi and Youji were healing together, etc. He simply forgot that in Zhu Xian, Wan Jianyi died on the surface as a public trial. A group of people begged for mercy. Several of the older generation leaders he wrote asked Xuan Wanjian in the corner. As soon as I asked for an explanation, Wan Jianyi was killed in private. In this way, apart from understanding why Cangsong was so devoted to Wan Jianyi, the prequel of Zhu Xian was basically shit. Xiao Ding had almost completely forgotten what he wrote. He talked about Ten Thousand Swords and One Duo Niu, relying on his physical skills to fight against dozens of masters without defeat. In order to delay Cangsong, he had to fight with dozens of masters several times and exhausted his spiritual power before his hand was severed and seriously injured. He still struggled to get beaten and ran away with Cansong on his back.

This introduction makes the monkey feel as if he has suffered a great deal of grievance. Isn't it worth celebrating that the monkey becomes a Buddha? The Victorious Buddha is one of the 35 Buddhas in the Buddhist sect. He is just waiting for his perfect enlightenment. He is on the same level as the Tathagata in terms of status, but he is called a disciple a generation shorter. He is only a mere 81, but he has achieved such a great fortune. If he were not Laojun's own son, the Tathagata would not have such a great fruition status.

Excellent product. I came across this book when I was searching for Zhu Xian fans. I couldn't help but stay up all night and read them all. There are many novels about Zhu Xian, and this one feels like the plot is the most reasonable. Whether it's the character or the plot development, it's just a bit lacking in writing. I've already collected it. Work hard. I'll have to order all of them after it's released.

This novel expresses the feelings I most want to see. I voted for it monthly and hope for more.

All monthly tickets and recommended tickets during this period are given to you. I have posted so many comments, but I have never added any details. Why is this? 😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭

If you get a monthly pass 😭 for the first time, I'll give it to you.

It just represents my personal opinion, the previous one seems fine. But the latest chapters suddenly feel like they were written in my younger brother's style. Tell me that in real life, someone robbed your sister and locked her in a dark room. I didn't care whether there was any harmonious content or not, but she was locked up for a long time. Just because you think he is the protagonist, ah, I can't afford to offend him. I'm afraid there will be big bosses behind him who will not bother to warn him. Even if he takes the thing, he will just take it and not pass it around. Hehe, little brother, I feel like vomiting right away. As for me, no matter who you are, I, the Heavenly King, I have to remove several layers of your skin. I don't care who is right or wrong, if you dare to treat my relatives like this, I will do it to you. As an author, first of all, your protagonist is the protagonist in this book. The protagonists in other worlds have to stand aside because this is a book written by you and is your protagonist. Otherwise, you might as well write a side story of XXX. It's just my own complaint after reading the latest chapters. I hope you won't start a fight randomly, and I hope the author will write better and better.

After reading more than 40 chapters, the author's motivations for doing things are all women. He has never seen a woman? He is convinced and still practices Taoism like this?

You all praise me and think it's good! Chapter 1 Pig's Feet gives me the feeling that he is a disabled person. What kind of spiritual master are you playing with by throwing stones? Are you sure it will die if you don't control it well when it takes action? If you feel that you are still young and want to be a happy child, you can play in the mud, climb trees and dig out bird nests, or play hide and seek with a group of little kids!

The appraisal is completed. The author Zhu Xian did not understand it clearly. This book is full of pitfalls. It is recommended that latecomers withdraw as soon as possible.

Not to mention anything else, as long as it is a woman, no matter whether she knows her or not, whether she is an enemy or not, she will try her best to save her, and she will be half-dead every time. She is really a "good guy"

After reading the introduction, I asked: What did you do, the protagonist?

This is the worst book ever released for free, bar none!

Uh... What can I say... I think the writing is pretty good at the beginning! It tastes good! Unfortunately, the gap is too big at the end, and after more than 30 chapters, it feels like a mindless article! When I met Lu Xueqi in the martial arts competition, I started writing awkwardly! Forcibly sensationalizing, it feels like taking the protagonist's path, leaving the original protagonist with no way to go, and then downhill to forcefully insert the protagonist's role! It feels like the opening and the opening were not written by the same person. I just want to know how long the author of the opening had to hold it in? ? ?

His writing skills are not good, he forcibly arranges pretense projects, takes the initiative to kill young masters, licks women when he sees them, and recognizes relatives in different worlds. It seems that the author has lacked family ties in his life and wants to find family ties in the book. He skipped chapters and almost got poisoned to death.

In one chapter, the protagonist is persuaded to quit, and the protagonist feels a bit like making a staff.

She is so cruel, she still pushes this crappy book, the starting point is getting worse and worse, the ending point is better!

I don't understand, how come this kind of eunuch book can be exempted from the upper limit?

Many book friends will feel that the first few chapters of this book are very poisonous. In fact, from my personal feeling, some parts of Zhu Xian in the early stage are indeed very poisonous. Although the author later said that he would revise it, I don't know what it will look like after the revision. But I personally feel that the author's writing style has made a lot of progress in the later chapters. Although the first few chapters are toxic, you can actually start reading Jiang Ye. I have to admit that the author's writing of Jiang Ye is very flavorful and his writing style has also made great progress. Moreover, compared with some other Jiangye fans, this book is way ahead of other books. Okay! I'm too lazy to type. I actually want to say something, but I'm still too lazy. The last sentence is [Mountains are as high as mountains, and mountains are the best.

I've given you the monthly pass, please add some points

The woman in white from Journey to the West?

What the hell are you writing about? Those who write about fan fiction are just going to the academy to worship the master and lick the original author. Isn't it good to read original works?

I recommend all the books written by eunuchs, but there is no one at the starting point.