Guild Trading Group

I would like to remind the author that Madara is aware of the existence of Black Zetsu, and he believes that he created Black Zetsu. Another example is the section where the artificial intelligence greets the protagonist and then all countries suspect that the protagonist is a spy. It feels a bit forced. If the protagonist is really a spy of Genesis, shouldn't Star Network try its best to hide the identity of the protagonist? The artificial intelligence greeting the protagonist will attract the attention of others. If you push it backwards, you can conclude that it is a rift. As a result, representatives from various countries believed it. I hope the author can think more carefully about this part. Furthermore, I feel that the creation of each character has not yet been established. One of the highlights of this guild-type novel is the collision of characters from different works, which makes up for the regrets in the original work, but it is currently slightly lacking. If the author is not familiar with some works, he can first write familiar ones that can stand up and grasp the characters well. It does not have to be popular characters. The advantage of writing about popular characters is that people are familiar with them and don't have to spend a lot of pen and ink to carve them out. However, if too many people write about them, if they can't write new ideas, they will be lost to everyone. It is better to find a new way and find a supporting character who doesn't have too many roles. First, because they are not too popular, there are not many people writing about them. Second, because they don't have many roles, there is more room for independent expression, which may lead to unexpected surprises. You can also take a look at the character analysis of the major UP owners at Station B, which may be of some use. Of course, after all, I am not a professional writer or critic, and I am not even an old bookworm. The above are just my imperfect suggestions. I hope it will be helpful to the author.

Don't worry about what others say, write what you should write. It's quite interesting. It's much better than the same cookie-cutter chat groups.

My first thought was not to go out and save myself, but to change rooms and spend 24 hours to prevent Huang Mao's revenge, and then make a deal with the Empress to see if I could gain the ability to protect myself. Then think about the follow-up. Instead of going out to explore without authorization when there are still more than 10 hours left to complete the task. It is not within the protagonist's IQ to go out on adventures while not knowing the mutation, at least the IQ given to the protagonist by the author would not do such a thing.

Not great, the protagonist doesn't know about pirates, so how can he cheat?

Floating by, burning paper, lighting wax, adding incense, no movement; pouring wine, paying tribute, setting off cannons, smashing monuments, no response; digging graves, digging graves, opening coffins, whipping corpses, no temper; setting fire, burning corpses, filing bones, raising ashes , try again, set up a table, draw talismans, perform martial arts, thunder, remove corpses, magic bells, wooden swords, villains, recite incantations, summon the soul again, shed tears, cry bitterly, wail, beat the ground. This person is dead and has no way to recover.

I'm a little speechless. The author is really speechless. Everything is driven by the task. Can you change it a little? Don't focus on the task every time. It's a bit stiff to write like this.

There are too many unreasonable things. The mutation time is so short, and someone can study the mutation so thoroughly. Is it possible?

The first chapter is too long-winded! ! Since you are not a time traveler, you don't need to explain too much. Just let the protagonist explore by himself The plot fragments are too strange. Is this a prelude to wanting the protagonist to become a prophet? Isn't it better for this plot to allow the protagonist to have a reincarnated identity than to have plot fragments?

I feel like the holy scripture is a bit poisonous!

Holy Mary! Indecisive!

There are too many descriptions of the real world, giving the impression that the union has no sense of existence. I want to focus on the main world, but it is too weak and the upper limit is too low. If the world is destined to develop in the future, it would be better for the main world to end as soon as possible.

Before the apocalypse, I stocked up and prepared to protect my home, but when the outbreak broke out, I wanted to find a way out of the city to make me laugh. Were the previous 24 hours not enough to run back to your hometown? Isn't it okay to just take a plane to go to your parents' place?

Just like playing a game, one mission after another! No autonomy at all.

After reading more than 20 chapters, I discovered that the main character is a virgin

It doesn't feel like reincarnation, rebirth, and time travel when writing fan animation, but there is no such feeling in urban fantasy and supernatural beings.

No matter what others say, I think it's well written.

Brother's original article? Tang San is coming to find you.

The writing is very blunt, and some of the plots made me feel embarrassed.

The reason why I can't watch it is just because the main character made me cry.

In other words, the protagonist will definitely have a lot of abilities in the later stage. In addition to some bloodline types that must be systematically strengthened, you can spend time improving your general skills and combat skills by yourself. The protagonist should get a low-end version of the cultivation body. One day of cultivation is equivalent to a hundred days for others, so you can save a lot of points Sometimes when I see the protagonist randomly adding points, it feels like there are a lot of points, and I am convinced. After all, doesn't the protagonist have a systematic cultivation space? Feel like the protagonist's president's privileges haven't been fully utilized? Obviously it can be used in advance, right?

That part of the trading group is missing?

It's still the old routine of bringing a beautiful woman with you at the beginning.

The later original spiritual world was really not that good.

When will new members be invited? I feel like it will be over after beating Lord of Haze. . .

The introduction seems very good, but I don't know what it is like. Guys, have you tried the poison?

Is the author playing single player? There aren't many comments?

It ended suddenly. I thought I returned to Aqua Blue Star just for peace of mind, so that I could conquer the stars and the sea...

There are many things I don't understand about this book, but it clearly has a trading system. Find a safe place and think of ways to become stronger. If there are no mistakes, ask the members to give you some food. Or is it very simple? Still wandering around? Could it be that this monster has its own navigation system?

I stopped watching when I saw the male protagonist's family being threatened. (I saw the male protagonist showing off earlier and thought someone was protecting his family. Unexpectedly, he didn't take care of his family at all and was directly kidnapped later. If those people hadn't come to help, they would have died long ago.)

I just watched it, and I personally think that there is something wrong with the fact that group members are kicked out of the group after they die. Just like in ordinary worlds, people who die and are resurrected are kicked out of the group. For some game worlds or worlds that can be resurrected immediately, being kicked out of the group feels like a big problem. Some members of the group have the ability to resurrect immediately after death. There is also a similar situation where the world of Death is not over after death. Running into Soul Society is just the beginning, or you can become virtual. Otherwise, how can you let humans play behind the World of Death?