Sword Supporting Technique and Song of Songs

It's decided, no matter what the grade is! After all, there is no achievement to speak of! Still trying to code! Watch your work grow step by step! Every word is a breakthrough! I firmly believe that no matter how bad the results are, there will still be readers who occasionally pass by! Even if he doesn't like it, let him not like it! Without effort, there will be nothing gained! What comes out of water is water after all. It will flow away easily, but it will not stay forever! Writing a book in a down-to-earth manner may be of no use! But, I am proud! Pounce on the street! Anyway, it's time to dream! The reality is too cruel! Hope... Expectation... May the flowers wither and spring forever, because then I will have a chance to show my face!

After reading it briefly, let me comment. I won't comment on the title of the book, everyone has their own preferences... I won't comment on the book cover. Isn't that just a free cover that I made casually in three minutes? ? Σ(ŎдŎ|||)ﾉﾉ Well, let's talk about the text, let me complain about the author first... Don't write woowoowoo(๑ŏŏ๑) The fault is in the first paragraph, and the original text of the first paragraph is quoted here: "In the chaotic starry sky , the beautiful stars are blooming there, lighting up the whole night, bringing a different kind of longing. " (Note: I read in traditional Chinese, don't mind) Let's look at this first paragraph. Chaos should be white (white light???), Of course I am not sure, at least that's what I think. In the first paragraph, the author used "chaotic" to describe the starry sky, which I think is fine But then he said that the light illuminates the night... emmmm... Me:? ? ? What about the promised chaos? Okay, the author himself is welcome to refute me by saying "you got it wrong" or something like that. Anyway, I think it's weird? There is also the Milky Way, the "beautiful" Milky Way. It feels like the whole section suddenly looks very... Low? You mentioned the light of the galaxy later. You can use some adjectives about light and brightness to describe the galaxy... Actually, I think, Simple description is sometimes good, right qwq After that, it becomes more plot-oriented... In the article, the male protagonist When talking to his master, he secretly complained in his heart many times... The protagonist complaining about the person himself has no problem, it is a kind of psychological description (in my opinion) Especially those that are a bit silly, such as "There are always people who want to lead my disciples" by You Qian. The characters often complain, but that kind of complaint is very funny and suits You Qian's writing style. From the title to the introduction to the plot... Your book is quite "serious", at least it's not some nonsense. I think it's okay to occasionally complain to relax the atmosphere, but in the conversation between the male protagonist and the master, the male protagonist kept complaining (and the content of the complaints was not very funny, it was very long, anyway, it was very embarrassing for me to read) And this has a great impact on the character. Your descriptions have always described the male protagonist as very polite and respectful of the Master... During the conversation, the male protagonist has been complaining about the Master, which makes me feel that the male protagonist is pretending to be respectful! ? It's very destructive qwq (Of course you can say that the two of them have been together for a long time and have a lot of affection, so they are very relaxed and uninhibited blahblahblah... Anyway, I think this complaint is not suitable) And it also makes the whole writing style change... The word count is already more than 700 words. To summarize, except for the above two people who particularly want to complain, there is nothing to complain about. I think there is room for improvement in the author'sdaily life plots and descriptions, But the combat aspect is still good (although I really want to complain about the move names, the original paragraph of a move name (the original text is intact, not a collection): "Qingling Jingfeng Palm! The sky is shadowless, Ha! " "Qing Ling Jing Feng Palm! Qing Qiu Wuhen, ha!" " Qing Ling Jing Feng Palm! Qing Tian Tongri, hey! ") At first glance, it seems to be the same move... Emmmmm In addition, the obsessive-compulsive disorder means that you either use "he" or "hey", or the three are different! ? Woo woo

I'll bookmark it and ask for a return visit.

Welcome everyone who likes to make friends, I have an interesting soul! And you? The world has been home for a long time, and the years have been cold. Just for the sea of ​​people to meet you, not for acquaintance or acquaintance.

Write a book quickly, write ten chapters first and then read the comments 🤭

Dear writer, your new book is very good. I have joined the new book investment group. Please update~

Build a notification building! Although I feel a little arrogant, in order to record myself, I think it is still necessary. After all, the experience of growing up is the most missed! Article 1: Improve various equipment related to books! ! ! Article 2: This book was evaluated by the book review team! ! ! (Although I know the person, I still have to record it) Article 3: Finally, a reader cast six votes! Article 4: Write a thank you letter! Article 5: The daily life of a street writer! Looking forward to the 33rd day of being ****ed! Article 6: Start a major rectification, starting from the first chapter! Article 7: The book has reached 100,000 words and has applied for a contract! I don't know if I can make it! Article 8: Thank you to all living readers!

You still gave up, you are no longer the majestic and heroic you you were before

Come on, author, don't forget your original intention and keep it up. I also hope that the author

In addition, although the protagonist has a divine body, there is no mystery about it. The author can go from the shallower to the deeper, slowly showing the magical functions of the divine body and how to use it to do great things.

The third-level numb vine makes me feel like the author is on the verge of committing suicide and testing like crazy 😰

Happy Winter Solstice(ノ๑`ȏ´๑)ノ⌨

As a reader who has read many novels, the pace of this book is a bit fast. I should not write in detail, but write less. Because it is too fast, it feels like running water, urgent and detailed. From the early stage of the plot, the author can write more about the protagonist's first mission and the attack of the monster to allow the protagonist to develop and progress. However, from the article, I found that the author is a really cute new author. This is not a big problem, after all, there are still manuscripts. However, the author should not write less about later events, and write more when necessary. After all, as a new author, if you want to sign a contract for a novel, the quality of the novel must be good or the writing has reached a certain level. In general, the writing style is average and the writing is okay. The writing style needs more practice and needs to be improved. In particular, the author needs to read more novels of the same type to learn, learn, and reflect. Also, read more other books to increase experience, which will be beneficial to the author in writing novels in the future. It is recommended that this book be used as a test.