Connor's Hogwarts

I have read more than 200 chapters, and the writing is pretty good, but the ambiguous emotional lines made me uncomfortable. The emotional lines were not handled well and the paper character wife was added, which made it even more uncomfortable to watch. There should be either a single heroine or two heroines, or a direct harem. Don't be vague. There is also the problem of Paper Man. My first reaction is that I am in the late stage of death. Why I like Paper Man is that it has everything in the anime, but not in reality. The male protagonist should be at home in this world and can do whatever he wants. I would not be surprised if he opened a harem. But he wants paper people. There is a problem with the setting. I also like paper people, but the male protagonist can only be said to be obsessed or perverted, so I can't bring myself into it. Doesn't the girl look good? It would be much better to change the setting of the Paper Man to a summoned beast, a psychic beast, to enhance the strength.

The author wisely avoids the poisonous point of time travel background at the beginning, but the beginning after time travel in the first chapter is even more poisonous. The protagonist's mother's attitude, the Chinese family's attitude, the protagonist's inexplicable repetition, the entire first chapter is as unnecessary as the time-travel background.

{"NickName":"Moyu Trumpet","UserId":223661537}The author is big I have been fattening for a long time and I slaughtered it today. It feels very good I like it very much and really hope to open the Asian volume The collision of Eastern and Western cultivation and magic Come on! ! !

This is a story about the protagonist learning magic with his feet on the ground (zheng). This is a story about the author who allowed others to tease him but still persisted in updating the article every day.

Speaking of Connor, I think of short legs

Cuttlefish said she wants to update 10,000 yuan a day, and the pictures are proof

I know it's the male protagonist, I know

The emotional drama written by the author is also too toxic. . . The premise of a harem is to write good and impressive emotional scenes and characters that make people not want to choose just one person. Writing such poisonous female characters and emotional scenes will only end up making everyone dislike it, just like those garbage people in Riqing who buy illustrations and give away toilet paper. .

First of all, the first part of this book, the combination of Chinese and Western magic, as well as the themes of magic painting, family business management and school life in the magical world, are all written very well; I decided to order them all at that time. However, when the protagonist arrived at school and started writing emotional scenes, I began to feel uncomfortable. He was open to all girls. The superficial reason was to practice his painting skills, but he never painted for boys. The characters of the several girls highlighted are not particularly likable. In fact, if that's all it takes, it's still acceptable to have an affair with other girls before the heroine shows up. But after the collar appeared in Alice's story, and the story about Alice after the protagonist put on that collar, I felt sick. Alice went from being a pretty cute girl to a character that some readers wanted her to die (I was one of them). There is also the protagonist, who after clearly telling other girls that he has someone he likes, does not keep a distance from other girls, remains ambiguous, and has no way to deal with a little girl, which makes people feel very uncomfortable. Maybe the author doesn't know how to write emotional dramas! Here are some suggestions for the author. 1. Either there is no heroine, and the protagonist only focuses on career and magic. 2. Either have only one female protagonist and keep distance from other girls who like the protagonist (especially Alice, please break off the relationship quickly, it will be too uncomfortable for people watching). 3. If the author wants to open a harem, then please make each girl more likable. At least each harem should have a unique charm that can make readers like it. Forget it about Alice. After writing this book review, I will say goodbye to this book for a while and save a few more chapters. If the protagonist is still ambiguous with Alice after a while, and Alice's character is still so annoying, such an annoying person actually becomes the heroine. Then I can only say goodbye with great regret. I write this just hoping that this book will be better. I hope that this good book will not be ruined by emotional drama. Again, I hope that the author can write better and better. 🙂

I really can't fall in love with the character of Alice, so I can't help but complain about it First of all, this character setting is not likable. The daughter of a rich family is unconventional, blindly confident and mischievous. She is first-class in blind confidence and mischief. She doesn't even know when she causes trouble. In reality, how far away can such a person go? Secondly, the positioning of Alice makes me feel uncomfortable. Penelo is the secretary and Blanche is the cousin. Each has its own characteristics and functions, but Alice is completely useless except to promote the plot of Angel. It feels like there is no difference between her and her, but she has a lot of space. Is it the heroine or the female partner? In the end, all Alice's emotional fluctuations have not touched me at all. Her view of love is too childish (you can see in her dreams that she is completely willful and secondary). Pretending to be strong is still in front of others (if you want to be strong, don't cry in front of others. Who are you crying to? See? Isn't it just to find sympathy?), Open your mouth and shut up, my xx completely conceals his intelligence and ability, and his deliberate cuteness makes me feel sick (the student doesn't look like a student, he keeps changing his clothes), anyway, almost all the behaviors of this character are my fault. Don't say that she is a child balabala before she is a minor. Does she have to be so naive when she is a minor? (Other characters are much stronger than her) And what about aristocratic education? Alice has really been dancing in my mind all this time. I can tell by looking at the character that she is not that popular. I hope the author will reduce her role. I almost feel PTSD towards her now (she will do nothing good when she appears, all kinds of pretense, betrayal, and shameless behavior. I lost two pounds of goosebumps) Of course, if she is the heroine, I will pretend that I didn't say it, and I will slip away ε=ε=ε=┌(；´ﾟｪﾟ)┘

When I saw Connor, I thought of the assassin with the axe. It suddenly occurred to me that it would be very interesting if Assassin's Creed was integrated into Harry Potter. It would be very interesting if the Brotherhood of the Wizarding World promoted in it that all things are false.

Hehe

I love this book so much that I have ordered all of it! Do you dare the author to add some details?

I feel that the recent plot appeared a little too early and the author did not handle it well. First, there is a problem with Dumbledore's recent characterization. In fact, Dumbledore is wise and almost demonic. He has read most of the books on Hogwarts. Even if he doesn't know which angel he is, he should be able to guess the nature of the angel. But here, Dumbledore believes whatever others say. Apart from his ability to hold the Elder Wand, there is no way to tell that he is the most powerful white wizard. Second, there is a problem with the plot. The protagonist's halo is too much, and the transition is not smooth enough. They listen to whatever the protagonist says. You must know that the protagonist is only a student. In addition to the family's wealth, what is currently reflected is only the strength and wisdom of the student. Moreover, he has no contact with the Holy See. Even if you want to listen to him, Dumbledore should believe him. Not only does the Holy See not have a good relationship with Connor, but if he insists on saying it, it is a bit unreasonable. Because knowledge leads to fear. The Holy See knows the power of fallen angels, so it should be firmer, and then let Dumbledore and other teachers at Hogwarts serve as guarantees, compromise with each other, and give it a period of time to think of a solution. Then the Holy See will give information, and the protagonist will be wild and open-minded. The Holy See and Dumbledore will work together to complete the plan, so it will feel better. Third, it is still a problem with the character. The intelligence is too serious. Dumbledore is just a tool. The protagonist has no sense of character after living for decades. Even the teachers at Hogwarts can't get in the way. The protagonist talks about solutions as soon as he comes, not mentioning whether it is feasible or not. Dumbledore negotiates with the Holy See, or Dumbledore wants to When solving a problem, the protagonist cannot intervene except from the perspective of friends. In fact, the author can give the protagonist some tricks here, such as going berserk. In order to alleviate the protagonist's rampage, Dumbledore is forced to stop. This way, there will be a better reason for the protagonist to propose a solution, instead of being awkward like now. Fourth, it is still a matter of the protagonist's strength. With the protagonist's current strength, this plot should not appear. For the sake of students, Dumbledore cannot put the protagonist into a dream. I feel that the author could actually use the explanation of the butterfly effect to place this plot around the fifth to sixth grade. In this way, the protagonist can participate in the plot, instead of being just a marginal character like now, requiring the author to forcefully arrange the plot. In fact, in this plot, I feel that no one can remember it, which means that all the characters are not three-dimensional enough, and the author you wrote is not as good as before. That's it. I don't want to read the rest of the plot anymore. I hope the author can write better and better. Goodbye.

Let me share my feelings about these recent chapters and make some suggestions. 1. It's okay to write about the silly King Mao, Bijing is also a classic character. However, the proportion was wrong, which led to the collapse of the characters of King Da Mao and the protagonist. Why do I say that? Because it's too abrupt. The protagonist's personality has changed too much. From a rationalist to a licking dog, the contrast is too big. 2. There is less character interaction. Without entering the main plot, you have only three daily interactive characters since the release of King of the Dead. Alice, including other supporting characters, are marginalized and feel like they are just a tool. It feels like only the interaction of King of the Dead is left. It's really incomprehensible that you have destroyed the character foundation you laid before. Licking a dog in a novel will only cause discomfort. Everyone is here to see the protagonist rise up, but he is not a coward. It feels like the character has collapsed. 3. You have let yourself go a bit, and I feel like there has been a lot of personal stuff in recent chapters. If you don't write an outline, the plot will collapse. You should make some outlines first, really, sort them out and see how you write them. Otherwise it feels like a pill.

The protagonist is a doormat in front of all the female supporting characters. The author has never seen a woman?

A pretty good book that not only retains the flavor of the original HP, but also adds something of its own, which is the author's second setting. Many readers regard the second setting as a scourge and blindly pursue the so-called original flavor. Once there is a slight difference, they will shake the earth. In my opinion, being able to use one's own settings without causing any sense of disobedience among fans is the best evidence to prove the author's level. The author uses the second setting to make the whole article more flexible and attractive, especially the setting of angels. It is like a painting that has been painted suddenly has the finishing touch. We have been experiencing the corner of the painting through the writer's brush, just like a blind man touching an elephant. The arrival of the angel plot is like a blind man having eyes to see the true identity of an elephant. The painter tears off the canvas and sees the winning black piece on the chess game, which makes people feel so happy and has a feeling of clearing the clouds and seeing the sun. However, you can't just look at the bright side of everything. Angel has a layout of more than 200 chapters, but the result is not satisfactory. It feels that it is written too hastily and not polished enough. It seems that "it" shouldn't feel like this, but there seems to be no better result. In the context of the peeping wolves, death seems to be the best choice. I use the words "as if" and "really". "As if" means that I think there is a better result, and "really" means that I can't refute it when I do it. In any case, it is really gratifying to find such a book among a lot of brainless HP articles. I would like to apologize. I first read the pirated version, but I was forced from the pirated version to the original version. After reading it, I was still unsatisfied, and then I realized what I had done. It doesn't matter if I subscribe to more of those great books, and it doesn't matter if I subscribe to less. But for a new writer and an author who has just started on the road of being a writer, every subscription is the motivation for him to continue writing. Only then did I realize what a bad thing I had done. I will not subscribe to the chapters I have read, but I will make up for the money I spent reading the books through rewards. Finally, I still want to complain about the tragic ending of Angel. It relies on the mystery created by myself (Pet Elf card), spreads it through my own hands (propaganda), and the elves spawned by my own paintings are contaminated by others, and in the end only a few residual souls are left. I really can't accept it.

Recently, several readers said that these two books were not well written (✘_✘)↯. In fact, I just wanted to write about the magic showdown. Maybe it is because my writing power is limited and I can't express it well, which makes everyone feel a bit embarrassed... The author is a new writer and is still exploring his writing skills. I hope you can provide some opinions or suggestions, and I will take a good look at them. Orz Make a comment post, and everyone can comment on anything they have to say.

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I have been raising it for a long time, and I will kill it when I raise it 😎 To be honest, after reading so many chapters, the author's level is still good, but I want to ask, since I am writing foreign fan fiction, try not to write too many oriental things. I don't know why I always feel weird. . . Especially the first few chapters. . . What do you think? The author is great Can I still want a sperm 🙂

Priest Mo Yu from Tiantian Shuiqun!      ， ！ Don't rush, don't update, don't code, The strongest person is to fish in the water! Ten thousand recommendations, ten thousand rewards and ten thousand collections, Promise to add more if the standards are met. Today I am in debt for thirteen chapters, I am still busy in Shuiqun! To fish, go code! ! !

Shock! The Taoist priest fishes in the group every day! Is this a lack of humanity or a loss of morality?

Cuttlefish has been updated. It's really not easy. Please apologize by pretending to be a woman.

No, brother, I was watching it very hard, and suddenly I realized that it was updated three years ago? ? ? ? ? ? ? Bad one? You you

Boss Connor wants to be careful ฅ(⌯͒• ɪ •⌯͒)ฅmua~ﾝ❣

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How many magic patterns has the protagonist learned so far: One, leaving traces two, sound three, finishing touch four, connection five, becoming a fox Any more?

Do you know that I still recommend it to you? I said you can read it even if you cut it. It's quite interesting To this day, your HP book is still on my favorite table...