Eternal Atonement

I was a loser, but finally persevered 😭 I updated more than 3,000 times for 30 consecutive days. I kept my promise 😡 and will update every day from now on... It's so tiring... Please forgive me, everyone One last thing, the promise of not being a eunuch is still valid

To comment carefully, I read the first two chapters and found the following problems. ①In the first person, too many repetitions of (I) are used, which leads to reader boredom. ②The plot at the beginning seems too huge, it is too gloomy at the beginning, and the first-person expressive ability seems to be somewhat lacking, which makes it unable to attract readers. ③ It seems that the beginning of the plot cannot arouse readers' affection for the protagonist, and the settings explained are somewhat vague. Solution (personal suggestion, for reference only) ① The advantage of the first person is that it allows readers to better immerse themselves in the situation. It is recommended to start from small things and events that readers can easily relate to. ② Reduce the frequency of use of the personal pronoun "I". ③The first person has an advantage over the third person in describing the appearance of characters, and can describe the appearance of the characters more clearly. ④ On the basis of ①, try to give interesting stories, which is very important for attracting fans. ④My standard view of the first person is: write what the protagonist sees and imagines, the description of the action can be less, and the protagonist's thoughts can be interspersed in the dialogue. ⑤ Maybe you have a very exciting plot in your mind, but before you get there, you write an article that is tasteless, resulting in no fans. The above are some suggestions I have given to the author. I hope it will be helpful to your future writing. (I am a first-person person)

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Dear writer, your new book is very good. I have joined the new book investment group. Please update~

Come on! Let's encourage each other and have collected it! Hope recycling

Dear writer, your new book is very good. I have joined the new book investment group. Please update~

Comment and learn from each other, come to support, come on

I'm sorry that I couldn't keep pursuing it, but it's already good that you have this kind of heart. I will continue to come back and read your books. Come on.

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Come on come on! Persistence is victory.

It's great that I can write it to the end.

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Dear writer, your new book is very good. I have joined the new book investment group. Please update~

Hehe, the more you write, the more interesting it becomes, okay! I'll invest in you. Come on!

A title should be added to each chapter, otherwise most readers will just quit when they see that there is no title.