I Can Log into the Game

This is a very novel setting, come on. Also, I would like to make some suggestions. One is speaking. What a person says can be as concise as possible. Many of the spoken parts do not need to be written, and I hope the paragraphs are better. On the other hand, the part about the game is not very detailed. The heroine's role in the current plot is not particularly large, but her roommates. Like the previous part where she found a monk, the heroine spent a lot of words to persuade them, but in the end she did not convince them. It can be understood that it is necessary for the plot, but this actually makes me feel a little bit disfavored. Communicating with friends is indeed very important, but it is impossible to bear everything by myself, especially since the article mentions that the heroine is very cautious. The next step is to go with the team and go with the roommates. It is not very convenient for the heroine herself. I want to see how the boss handles it next. Another thing is that there is no obvious protagonist. Apart from the heroine, there are many characters, but the roles are evenly distributed, and it is hard to tell which one is more important. Moreover, the heroine herself was very considerate about her thoughts and kept it secret. She became stronger and took care of her roommates, but how to explain it later without affecting the relationship was obviously difficult to deal with. After all, they were not family members, and her roommate did also want to become an awakener. It would be okay if they were not so familiar, but the relationship between the girls in the dormitory is obviously very good now. Finally, Chen Ke really has a lot of ideas, but he doesn't have much interaction with the heroine at all. I can't figure out why he mentioned it repeatedly_(:зゝ∠)_ Anyway, I will continue to pay attention, so go for it!

The subject matter of the article is quite good, but the plot is a bit watery. What I wanted to see was the heroine's upgrade plot, but there were too many chapters describing daily life, and it was still verbose. There are a few points below that I don't understand the heroine's approach. 1. The heroine is able to practice cultivation, and she also describes a lot of the plot of making money with her roommates. If there is a business, natural resources, alchemy, etc. (Although the plot is old-fashioned), it is quite good to make money. At least it is more in line with the purpose of this article, cultivation! As a result, the heroine and her roommates are all kinds of "takeaways" on campus, which only cost tens of thousands of dollars. If you have the time to do these, it is better to practice wholeheartedly. Although this is possible with the heroine's ability, it seems very low. To make a simple metaphor, it is like a high school student. As a third-year student, if you work hard, you can get into Tsinghua University, but in the end, you waste a lot of time on various small part-time jobs. As a result, it is time-consuming and thankless, and you ignore the key points. It feels like you have picked up sesame seeds and lost the watermelon; 😏 2. The heroine is always entertained by all kinds of villains. She is the kind who gets blackmailed after picking up a dollar and spends several chapters to solve it. This kind of incident is too imbecile and the heroine solves the problem too slowly. It feels like the heroine wastes too much time on trivial things. If you want to write a conflict incident, the pattern can be a little bigger. How can you kill a chicken with a butcher's knife? Or it would be enough to write this kind of small incident in a few hundred words, and it would be nice if it was a little simpler and clearer; 3. It is understandable that the heroine is good to her family. As long as she is not a top-notch family member, normal people give priority to relatives. However, the setting of the heroine's roommate is a bit difficult to explain in one sentence. You may say they are friends, but you can't see in the article that the heroine and her roommate are close friends. Friends feel like they are just ordinary roommates and ordinary friends, but the heroine has been worrying about it for a long time, forget about the amulet (although there are some plots here that are disgusting to the roommate, but it is normal for most people to be selfish, understandable), the heroine can do what she can, but the heroine also helps the roommate to awaken? emmm, the heroine's roommate prefers one or two of them. She has normal outlook on life, so I can help if I can, as long as the heroine doesn't find it troublesome. But the other one's outlook on life is not upright. Is it Wang Xia or something? I kind of forgot about it. What I'm thinking is quite beautiful. I can't stand it anymore when I see this. I'll pay to hire someone to meet her. The other roommates in the book, including the heroine herself, all disagreed with this and gave their reasons. She was a master and she had a lot of money. She was a burden (and had to be responsible for safety), and she had to protect and share resources. Why did she have such a big face? In the end, the heroine was quite happy that Wang Xia would not go to the mountains and old forests to commit suicide by herself? What kind of gangster logic? You should have known that you should not be close friends with this kind of person. If you don't watch the follow-up, you don't know the final situation of Wang Xia among the roommates; if there is a reversal in the follow-up or the author deliberately arranged the plot this way, just think I didn't say it ╮(￣▽￣)╭ To be honest, I can't stand it after seeing this. This kind of person strongly causes discomfort!

What should I say? Generally speaking, I feel that the heroine is more like the golden finger of the roommates, and she is very fluent and has no sense of excitement. The interests of the heroine and the roommates are not equal. The heroine is too selfless, and people who read the novel will find it very boring.

If the food is tasteless, it would be a pity to throw it away.

One seedling, vote for watering.

I hope there will be less emotional drama without a male protagonist

Very creative👍

It's too watery. The heroine who touched the porcelain stepped in and returned the water several times. The person who was touched was a passerby.

My spiritual energy was revived, but I ended up watching hundreds of thousands of protagonists still working very hard selling snacks just to earn a few dollars a portion, and engaging in intrigues all day long.

I don't even know if this author is really verbose or just because of the word count. He repeats one sentence over and over again countless times.

The other protagonists just dropped out of school, recovered their spiritual energy, and wasted time in school. There must be a special training school in the future. The protagonist's vision is too low. Although the protagonist should stay in school for the sake of his parents, all kinds of troubles are a waste of time The Pengwa family really loves the plot, the protagonist is also looking for trouble, and the author also insists on getting Pengwa to constantly trouble the protagonist, so the protagonist can't practice well? In reality, all kinds of miscellaneous problems are very annoying. I was seriously injured after playing a few times in the game copy, and it took a long time to recover from the injury. It felt like there was nothing interesting to watch. The game could not speed up the progress, and the actual practice was also slowed down by other things. The protagonist can stay in the game all day long and practice continuously. There is no need to spend time practicing during the day. First, get the elixir formula. Ah The protagonist is also too worried about family problems. Parents in the city are very safe. It is very dangerous for grandma and the like to directly use certain places recently. It's just a matter of letting grandma and the others live at their parents' house. They have to be in a hurry... The world is still peaceful at the beginning. The protagonist works hard to become stronger first, otherwise it will be in vain to think too much.

Come on ＾0＾~ I just started watching it, it's very fascinating.

The heroine's thoughts are quite lengthy, so there's no need to say so much. There is a lot of similar content, such as not being reluctant to part with it, but ordinary people can't bear it. From the heroine giving soup to her roommates to keeping her parents healthy, there are a lot of them. It feels a bit repetitive. Generally speaking, I think the content of this book is quite good, but the writing style is a bit lacking.

I hope there will be no cp. If I have to, can I attack it myself? 😌😠😏😏😏

Hope no cp, like no cp

The idea is great, it would be better if the layout was bigger.

It's so watery. Oh my god. It's such a waste of a good idea.

By the way, the protagonist is really wasting his time by selling food. After all, he can't make much money. It's enough for the protagonist to make enough money to rent a house. There's no need to make more money. Because he sells too much food, what should the protagonist do if he doesn't have time to practice later? How much can I earn from snacks? Especially if you live in a dormitory, you don't really have much money. It's not as fast as writing a few articles a day. A hundred days a day is a guarantee. Ten days is enough for one month's rent. The copy of food expenses has... You can't spend a few more days to make some money.

The protagonist begins to worry about this and that. He doesn't know that technology in the early stage is the number one, and cultivation and other things are very poor. After all, he cannot stop the power of technology. There is nothing to worry about when parents are in the city. Grandma and others can just ask their parents to pick them up and bring them into the city. What does it mean for the protagonist to run there? I didn't study hard and ran back. I said before that I was afraid of all kinds of problems in school and that I would disappoint my parents if I didn't study hard. Then I immediately asked for leave and ran back. I was convinced And when the protagonist gave the amulet to his roommate, he didn't need to say anything about an eminent monk. He could just say something like "keep him safe". What kind of eminent monk was necessary? Normal people don't believe it, because they are afraid that the protagonist will be deceived, and the protagonist doesn't use spiritual energy recovery or anything like that to make people believe it... After all, there are many things that don't make sense without evidence.

Long-winded, long-winded, long-winded, too long-winded, I have no desire to read it.

That's too long-winded! I kind of regret buying 100 chapters at once.

It's so procrastinating, it's so watery, it's so long-winded, it's the same situation, the same meaning, I'm writing it over and over again for several chapters. I'm so tired of reading it, I just want to skip over it, or give up. I can't finish writing it 💔

By the way, those tile bumpers are staring at the school gate. Are you sure no one is causing trouble for them? It has been said recently that the neighborhood is unsafe, and these videos of people touching tiles being trolled have been uploaded. The neighborhood of Zhenxin School has become famous, right? It must have been more than a week, right? Staring at the school gate, I couldn't believe that the school gatekeepers didn't take care of it. After all, some students almost had accidents.

The back end of this book is very slow. Practice in reality and in the game are separated. The treatment time for injuries in the game is too long, and the practice speed in reality is too slow. The protagonist wastes time with all kinds of miscellaneous things, and the practice speed is too slow. In the first few days, you can practice the second level of Qi. There is no reason to take a long time to reach the second level in the later levels. After all, the protagonist in the back has monster meat and various spiritual energy ingredients. It is much better than just drinking the spiritual energy river water in the early stage. The cultivation speed has not increased, but has slowed down due to various real-life things.

There is a very pitfall in this book. I suddenly remembered that reality and game progress are calculated separately. So later cultivation requires hundreds and thousands of years. So what about the real life span of the protagonist? After all, it takes many years to practice in the game to reach an advanced level, and it takes several times the time in the game to reach the same level in reality, and more than twice the training resources are required. In reality, low aura can only be supplemented by resources The author will later think of ways to solve a series of problems such as training in the game and reality, the lifespan of the protagonist, and resources. The parents of the protagonist must also have problems in the later stage. After all, in the late stage of cultivating immortals, they often stay in seclusion for hundreds of thousands of years.