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The subject matter of the article is quite good, but the plot is a bit watery. What I wanted to see was the heroine's upgrade plot, but there were too many chapters describing daily life, and it was still verbose. There are a few points below that I don't understand the heroine's approach. 1. The heroine is able to practice cultivation, and she also describes a lot of the plot of making money with her roommates. If there is a business, natural resources, alchemy, etc. (Although the plot is old-fashioned), it is quite good to make money. At least it is more in line with the purpose of this article, cultivation! As a result, the heroine and her roommates are all kinds of "takeaways" on campus, which only cost tens of thousands of dollars. If you have the time to do these, it is better to practice wholeheartedly. Although this is possible with the heroine's ability, it seems very low. To make a simple metaphor, it is like a high school student. As a third-year student, if you work hard, you can get into Tsinghua University, but in the end, you waste a lot of time on various small part-time jobs. As a result, it is time-consuming and thankless, and you ignore the key points. It feels like you have picked up sesame seeds and lost the watermelon; 😏 2. The heroine is always entertained by all kinds of villains. She is the kind who gets blackmailed after picking up a dollar and spends several chapters to solve it. This kind of incident is too imbecile and the heroine solves the problem too slowly. It feels like the heroine wastes too much time on trivial things. If you want to write a conflict incident, the pattern can be a little bigger. How can you kill a chicken with a butcher's knife? Or it would be enough to write this kind of small incident in a few hundred words, and it would be nice if it was a little simpler and clearer; 3. It is understandable that the heroine is good to her family. As long as she is not a top-notch family member, normal people give priority to relatives. However, the setting of the heroine's roommate is a bit difficult to explain in one sentence. You may say they are friends, but you can't see in the article that the heroine and her roommate are close friends. Friends feel like they are just ordinary roommates and ordinary friends, but the heroine has been worrying about it for a long time, forget about the amulet (although there are some plots here that are disgusting to the roommate, but it is normal for most people to be selfish, understandable), the heroine can do what she can, but the heroine also helps the roommate to awaken? emmm, the heroine's roommate prefers one or two of them. She has normal outlook on life, so I can help if I can, as long as the heroine doesn't find it troublesome. But the other one's outlook on life is not upright. Is it Wang Xia or something? I kind of forgot about it. What I'm thinking is quite beautiful. I can't stand it anymore when I see this. I'll pay to hire someone to meet her. The other roommates in the book, including the heroine herself, all disagreed with this and gave their reasons. She was a master and she had a lot of money. She was a burden (and had to be responsible for safety), and she had to protect and share resources. Why did she have such a big face? In the end, the heroine was quite happy that Wang Xia would not go to the mountains and old forests to commit suicide by herself? What kind of gangster logic? You should have known that you should not be close friends with this kind of person. If you don't watch the follow-up, you don't know the final situation of Wang Xia among the roommates; if there is a reversal in the follow-up or the author deliberately arranged the plot this way, just think I didn't say it ╮(￣▽￣)╭ To be honest, I can't stand it after seeing this. This kind of person strongly causes discomfort!

What should I say? Generally speaking, I feel that the heroine is more like the golden finger of the roommates, and she is very fluent and has no sense of excitement. The interests of the heroine and the roommates are not equal. The heroine is too selfless, and people who read the novel will find it very boring.

If the food is tasteless, it would be a pity to throw it away.

One seedling, vote for watering.

I hope there will be less emotional drama without a male protagonist

It's too watery. The heroine who touched the porcelain stepped in and returned the water several times. The person who was touched was a passerby.

The other protagonists just dropped out of school, recovered their spiritual energy, and wasted time in school. There must be a special training school in the future. The protagonist's vision is too low. Although the protagonist should stay in school for the sake of his parents, all kinds of troubles are a waste of time The Pengwa family really loves the plot, the protagonist is also looking for trouble, and the author also insists on getting Pengwa to constantly trouble the protagonist, so the protagonist can't practice well? In reality, all kinds of miscellaneous problems are very annoying. I was seriously injured after playing a few times in the game copy, and it took a long time to recover from the injury. It felt like there was nothing interesting to watch. The game could not speed up the progress, and the actual practice was also slowed down by other things. The protagonist can stay in the game all day long and practice continuously. There is no need to spend time practicing during the day. First, get the elixir formula. Ah The protagonist is also too worried about family problems. Parents in the city are very safe. It is very dangerous for grandma and the like to directly use certain places recently. It's just a matter of letting grandma and the others live at their parents' house. They have to be in a hurry... The world is still peaceful at the beginning. The protagonist works hard to become stronger first, otherwise it will be in vain to think too much.

My spiritual energy was revived, but I ended up watching hundreds of thousands of protagonists still working very hard selling snacks just to earn a few dollars a portion, and engaging in intrigues all day long.

I don't even know if this author is really verbose or just because of the word count. He repeats one sentence over and over again countless times.

Very creative👍