Dunjia

It's really not enough to update once a day like this, it's absolutely a vicious cycle. The editor is looking for follow-up reading. If you update like this, your follow-up reading must be very miserable. You may not even get a contract, let alone a good recommendation.

To be honest, I felt like pills after reading the beginning of this book. The first is the inability to update. The second is that Azi made the same mistake as the previous book. The opening chapter was not exciting at all. This kind of writing was completely unable to retain people. Third, the protagonist's character lacks appeal, and the description of the protagonist is sparse, which is a taboo in online writing. Fourth, since it is Shushan style versus mortal style, the writing lacks the plot of mortal style underworld cultivating immortality. On the contrary, it is like Jin Yongfeng, and there is no spark in the collision. The last point is my subjective opinion, but Azi really has to learn a lesson in the first three days if she wants to make money.

After all, the little protagonist is also a little real person who turns the golden egg. . He didn't even have a bite of the flying sword used to refine demons and protect himself. What a sin.

The protagonist's identity changed too quickly. He was obviously drugged and imprisoned and forced to make elixirs. However, after the protagonist accepted the task of refining the elixir, he did not concentrate on refining the elixir. He did not even look at him trying to escape. With such a smooth identity change, he thought he owed the Ye family a favor to help or was hired by the Ye family with a high salary.

The protagonist's character design is not good, the plot is bland and procrastinating, and there are no ups and downs**. A Shushan-style immortal cultivator did not stay in the mountains to develop and become the Shilipo Sword God. As soon as the master left, he went down the mountain and wandered around showing off, and the result was such an awesome Shushan. Liu was actually drugged and imprisoned. The key point is that the author has always hinted between the lines that Shushan Liu is very good at cultivating immortals. However, the protagonist of this book is not able to see what is so awesome about him. The character design is very stupid. B, and it even feels inferior to resource flow.     ,,, 20191920,,**,,

This book deserves a return to Purple Fire, right?

Everyone is calm. I have already said that Ziying's original creation will collapse at the beginning. This is all basic.

I would say, now is the time to consider a new book. Compromise to the market, this photo will not work. Zi Ying's original work is bound to collapse at the beginning, and you never consider the reason? Let's write about time travel, or the Xianxia version of Zhutianliu. Write something interesting and stop philosophizing all the time.

I think the author's writing is quite good. I don't like the kind of book that, no matter how many millions of words it has written, there are only two words between the lines. It's pretentious. A book has emotions, writing style, and twists and turns so people can follow it. It doesn't mean that the book is not good if it abuses the main character. What's important is whether the protagonist learns anything and gains something after encountering setbacks. This is a flesh-and-blood protagonist. Come on, author

I liked it very much in the early stage, but I haven't come across a novel that suits my taste in a long time I felt uncomfortable after that, and I still like the protagonist with brains I had a heart attack when I mentioned my sister before, and thought that a love line was about to appear at the beginning, but then I was betrayed, and suddenly I felt that the protagonist's brain was a little bad and he was incapable of accepting it.