Return to Blue Star

Ah, let's evaluate it. The author appeared in the comment area of my salted fish book list, so I came to read it. I don't recommend books. Although I feel embarrassed to say it, this is indeed not a good book. So just write a long review in return. First of all, I quite like the author Xiao Heiji. From the "author's words", you can clearly see what kind of person the author is, right? I saw other comments saying "I like the author more than the book itself" and I really agreed, so I thought about it for a long time and wrote so many words. I hope the author can get better and express what he wants to express smoothly. There is no core or context in the comments. Let's start with what I think is the biggest problem with Little Black Bacteria. The biggest problem is... The author is too eager to express his feelings. From a reader's perspective, the plot of a novel is very important. When reading novels, you basically focus on the plot. The plot is created for the characters. If the protagonist is well shaped through the plot, the reader will have a sense of involvement, which will attract people. What retains people in novels is not the plot (except Xiaobai Shuangwen), but the characters created through the plot. After the characters, there are emotions, or concepts and opinions. This is the key to becoming a masterpiece, such as Abnormal's reminiscence of lost civilizations, Mystery's compassion for every ordinary person of the era (sorry for the poor example), these empathy will move the readers and leave them. Here at Little Black Fungus, the plot is designed to be lyrical. In my opinion, this book starts to fall apart from my grandfather's memories (the writing style in that place is very problematic), with a long series of emotions, and unclear emotions in several consecutive chapters. I know that the author is praising love and the like, but I don't understand why he is praising it here. The same applies to subsequent cases. The beginning of a novel is used to let readers understand what kind of book it is. As for feelings, the author has 600,000 words to express emotions, so why bother with the 100,000 words at the beginning? When I was writing and reading in the past, novels were always the most difficult to read, because all the emotions were hidden in the story. To me, the essence of a novel is this, putting the author's point of view and the character's feelings into the story. As for Xiao Heijun, he just writes his emotions directly. He is too eager to express them, so he saves the plot, or sets up a plot specifically for discussion. But what readers see is the plot. The more I read, the more I feel. In fact, if the author writes prose instead of novels, it must be good. He can write whatever he wants, and his perspective will not be limited by the "protagonist". Or set up a person who can travel around, simply break up all the stories from the beginning, turn them into short films, and write whatever you want. At least it looks better this way. Then there is the question about the place of classical Chinese in the text. This just looks awkward. In fact, the problem is not that this style of writing conflicts with a world background similar to cyberpunk, but that it conflicts with another writing style of the author, which is the style of youth literature that was originally a salty fish. This is very uncomfortable, right? Moreover, in the chapter about grandpa, the writing style conflicts with the setting. Readers will subconsciously bring the background into modern society 100 years later. Then grandpa is a modern person. How can modern people talk like that? If the setting is like this, the author must let the readers know upfront that this is how those people talk, otherwise it will lead to the default society. …… Actually there is something else I wanted to say, but I forgot about it after sleeping, so let's leave it at that.

This article, I just want to write about my daily life!   … . Just picked it up and put it down again! I took a look at my own novel circle, and the comments are still the same! Why is there no one watching even though there are tickets? Thinking about it later, it was normal. I was overestimating my abilities. Quality is the basis of everything. Of course there is a difference whether it is a mindless and exciting book or a book that has charm after reading! Spent a few dollars and climbed up the list! But I didn't feel happy at all. It's really pointless to rely on this method! Because, I am still me! The novel is still the same novel! I was confused by the list. When typing, I would read the list first before starting, and then read it again when I was halfway through writing... If I care so much, how can I write a book? Has anyone read what I wrote? I don't know... Fortunately, my old friend Chuang asked me to go out and play badminton, so I didn't hesitate... Since the beginning of my internship, I haven't touched a racket, so of course I got wet today! Then we made an appointment to have a barbecue together. Thinking about it, I haven't even finished the fried food I had for lunch, but we haven't eaten together for a long time, so I still want to go! It's a great experience. I had some Northeastern barbecue. I don't know if it's authentic or not, but I think the taste is pretty good! Pair it with some raw coriander, eh! Oily but not greasy... After eating, they planned to enter the Internet cafe to spend the night! Anyway, I don't understand why I still do this when I have a computer at home! Think about it, going to the cinema to watch a movie looks different from watching it at home, so I feel relieved! On the way to accompany Brother Chuang to get his ID card, he saw a blind old man under the bridge, holding an erhu in his hand. Suddenly it occurred to me that I talked about Erhu in the previous chapter, and the old man seemed to be very lonely... I have some ideas! After getting my ID card back, I played half a game of chess with Brother Chuang. Why do I say it was half a game? Because the chess game was limited to ten minutes, and of course it was nothing in the end. So he went into the Internet cafe, and it was time for me to go back... But I didn't go back directly. I turned to the old man and wanted to ask him to play the erhu! Chat with him and listen to his past... I don't know where I read such a story, whether it was "Everything Lost Will Come Back in Another Way" or "I Have Wine, Do You Have a Story"? In which book, it mentioned such a plot: It said that the author was passing by the subway entrance and saw someone playing and singing, so he also listened to it, and finally threw a few coins and prepared to leave. But the singer suddenly stopped him. He said that they were too lonely, hurried passers-by. Although some people would listen to it, they left in a hurry in the end. Little did they know that they also wanted to find someone to chat with... The author also stayed to listen to their stories, and finally wrote his own story! …… …… Perhaps it's because of the influence of one, I also want to see the old man playing the erhu. But after I passed by, the building was already deserted. Thinking that a blind old man with inconvenient legs and feet would not be able to walk very far, so I walked around in a big circle. No result, go home! I thought a lot on the way: My uncle could play the erhu and the suona... However, they were all prepared for the deceased. Whenever the deceased was sent off, there would be erhu and suona, from one end of the village to the other end of the village. It's just that I haven't really calmed down and listened to it! The reason is also very simple and insensitive. Because I always feel that it is not as elegant as my classmates playing the piano at home! My dad occasionally joins in the fun, playing, playing, and singing in my uncle's courtyard. Thinking about the bamboo flutes that are more than one meter long and 10 centimeters in diameter, I still don't know how they blow them, and I have nothing. I have just touched them, that's all. Now that I think about it, it's a bit of a waste of resources... As I thought about it, I thought about badminton, novels and chess. Chess is my favorite in junior high school. Even on the day of the high school entrance examination, I went to find an old man to play, and then I only got 120 in math. I was scolded by the math teacher when I went back. Haha, think about it, in order to defeat my opponent, I went to my uncle, my father...**** I lost in order to improve my chess skills and to defeat my opponent. When I wanted to defeat an opponent who had lost many times, I could tremble all over, maybe it was a tremor from the depths of my soul, but now I have lost that heat... And badminton and novels are must-haves in high school. In order to enhance my skills, I spent every Saturday and Sunday at the court, so that I could meet the masters! I read novels at night and wrote for fun when I had free time, so I entered Erben University. When I meet more masters, I will take advantage of my free time in college to enjoy it. Finally, I joined the school team. After training and improving again and again, I became the captain! Thinking about it, I never begrudge my time for the things I love, and I will never regret doing nothing for the rest of my life. When it comes to writing, what is my original intention, to get on the list? To sign a contract? Or royalties? I'm afraid not. My original intention was just to write, record my life, record my thoughts, and read other people's emotions after reading what I wrote... And now, what have I done... So, I plan to slow down, I just want to write, whether it succeeds or fails, I am still me, and the novel should not be that novel anymore! Because, I am changing! Let's stop the small talk. In simple daily life, I should examine myself three times!

Sign it or not! I don't want to be a eunuch anymore in this book! It won't be finished if it's less than 600,000 yuan! 🙏

December 2: Find some time to reissue the post about strange beasts! If anyone wants to sort it out in the future, I will leave it to him (look forward to it)... 1. Yiwangshan ( beast) 2.(Red Leopard) 3. Sliding Pad 4. Vines monster 5. Hook snake 6. Wendigo These are the strange beasts in this issue. There will be a lot of strange beasts appearing in the future, so stay tuned...

Alas, the home planet here is so miserable. I hope that the protagonist can restore the past environment of the Blue and White Star in the future, allowing humans to rise up and fight back. The writing is okay, the writing style is average, but there are some dark things. The author should not write too much, otherwise it will be easy to be banned by Harmony in the future.

1. Shoggoth 2. Gu carving 3. Shark 4. Earth-burrowing demonic insect

1. Fire Monster (Essence of Fire) 2. Argali Tribe 3. Demon Elephant

The writing is good and there is emotion. The first two lines of the introduction are enough, they are very concise. Entering the plot is too slow and the main line is not clear. The story is not compelling, and the characters are not prominent and distinct enough. First, focus on the story, and second, focus on the characters. Both of them are distinct, it would be better if the plot advances faster!

The idea is very good, but the naming and the wording of some settings are a bit discouraging.

It doesn't matter if you write slowly, the key is to write well, persist, and don't give up.

When he was bored, Xiao Hei would look through pictures of future cities. Unexpectedly, he found some pictures that were very similar to the scenes Xiao Hei described, so I put them all here! 1. Chaotianque (Although there are some discrepancies, haha!) I feel that Salem in "Alita, Battle Angel" also fits this image somewhat, but Salem is fixed! Chaotian Que can be moved! 2. Mecha Competition Opening Ceremony Scene

Just want to know how many people are watching! Ha ha! Double group:277574079

[Three Beasts of Burial of Heaven and Death] 1. Refute 2. Xian 3. Starry Sky Predator [Baiyaki] 4. Zhu Huai 5. Manman (Biyiniao, Xiao Heijun compiled it with the following image!)

It's well written, quite high quality, but a little less refreshing.

Be your true fan, unknown to everyone

To be honest, after reading your book, I dreamed about the world in your book many times. I really like the polarized and decadent post-apocalyptic life you described... Compared to the protagonist, I am more fascinated by the life in Tianque, and I can't forget it for a long time.

I'll read it carefully. If you, the author, are willing to correct minor mistakes, you can refer to my chapter.

It's been more than three months since I wrote it! The second volume has more than 200,000 words and will be released tomorrow. Along the way, Que Mo saw the scenery of Chaotian Que! Along the way, Que Mo fights ferocious beasts, fights prisoners, makes brothers, and escapes from the wilderness. Along the way, Que Mo stood on the stage of the mecha competition. Along the way, Que Mo received help from millions of people... Que Mo's peaceful life in Chaotian Que has also come to an end. And he, at the last moment, finally confessed to the heroine: "Meng, please allow me to call you this last time! I don't know if you can listen. Yes, but I still want to tell you: I like you, for a long time! I like you, like the wind that has traveled eighty thousand miles, regardless of the return date! I like you, like water droplets condensed into clouds and rain! , I don't know why. I still like you very much, just like the ebb and flow of the tide, so it should be. But I can no longer like you, and you don't have to miss me anymore. I will stay with you till the end! You should find your beloved again and live the rest of your life happily. My first love is as bright as a summer flower!" I don't know how to say it, but I feel a little reluctant to finish writing this volume. But the story continues, so let me continue! So, I want to come here to complain...

Come on! Everyone is the same! I still appreciate the author's charisma!

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In my understanding, science fiction should completely throw away social ethics and morals, and even be anti-human. Only in this way can we completely let go of the restrictions on our imagination, boldly imagine, and then use known technologies to slowly join in the fantasy technology, and then practice. In this way, once anti-human technology is born, it will make people I am disgusted, but I will use it as a reference for future technologies, and no one will understand the true use of new technologies. They will only be afraid of unfamiliar technologies. It is like trying to build a weapon of mass destruction in war, but your imagination is limited by ethics and human rights, and you will only be able to make fun of yourself.

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