If You Don't Ask About Immortals

It is a good article that needs to be read carefully, it is not conventional. Come on, I hope you will keep up the good work! Asking for feedback and advice

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Received, "World of Demons and Martial Arts" is here to visit, the author is very encouraging, it is very good, I hope to visit again.

I don't read many fairy tale books. This is one of the few fairy tale books I've read. It's pretty good. The writing is very good. I'll keep it for now. I hope the author will do more.

You haven't signed a contract yet. How dare you do this?

The writing is good. I would like to make a small suggestion. In fact, many emotional aids can be deleted from the character dialogue, such as: "Can you tell me some stories about cows, ghosts, and snakes?" The little boy said with bright eyes, "I don't know everything, hahaha." The old man laughed, and this "The little boy's eyes shone" and "the old man laughed" can be deleted, which will limit the reader's imagination. If it is not necessary to highlight the tone, it can be omitted. This is why a thousand readers of Hamlet have a thousand ideas. This way it won't seem cumbersome, and any small comments can be treated as if I didn't say them. Wish you finish it soon. Will always collect it

There are no big loopholes in the article, nor is there any bad plot. Although there are some problems in some places, as a new author, it is remarkable. Come on, author! I have two suggestions ① Like that idiot elder, you should write less in the future. ②Is this upgrade speed too fast?

Very interesting very good content very brain-burning

Sure enough, this is the rhythm of writing.