The Female Character Wearing a Book Wants to Become an Immortal

So far, I feel that many of the descriptions are empty and have nothing to do with cultivation, and there is no tension in cultivation. I feel like the writing is not very good. The heroine is not very smart either. The heroine's intelligence is expressed very straightforwardly. It feels like the author directly wrote it instead of reading it out. It feels average, I don't know if it looks good at the back.

The author's character design is great, and the world view (not blackmailing the original heroine) is also very good, but there is still a lot of room for improvement in the writing style. Maybe the author is a newbie.

It's so ordinary. It doesn't feel like there are any ups and downs. It's like plain water with nothing. It looks good, but after watching it for a long time, I feel really sleepy.

The biggest problem is that there is no sense of immersion in the writing.

It feels like the protagonist is just a soy sauce, serving as a foil to the original heroine throughout the whole process, without any meaning of time travel and rebirth, the protagonist feels worse than the original text

It's amazing that the author can keep writing despite being so miserable.

Cultivation of immortality is too easy, as if you are reading a running account, and you have no desire to continue reading!

After reading the first 20 chapters, it was too confusing. I hope there will be improvement in the following chapters.

What about comments? 🤔

The writing is still very good, but there are a lot of typos. People like me who read carefully will really think about it for a long time.

It's beautiful. I like it very much. Please update it soon.

Is the author a boy? I feel like there are quite a lot of fighting scenes, but very few plot aspects, and it doesn't necessarily have to have a male protagonist. The main reason is that there are relatively few scenes with supporting characters. The supporting characters are not rich enough. In my humble opinion, I don't know if that's right.

I feel like the male protagonist's name is not very nice.

In how many chapters does the male protagonist appear?

I felt like I was reading the introduction, and it just took my time. The plot has ups and downs and makes people want to stop 😁

Originally, the subject matter was pretty good, and the character setting was also very satisfying, but could the author check it before publishing? There are too many typos and wrong sentences! This really dissuades people who read the article.

There is a problem with Chapters 21 and 24. In Chapter 21, Cheng Yiyi saw Jiang Ning, but Mingyue did not. Mingyue was still practicing, but in Chapter 24, Cheng Yiyi did not know Jiang Ning, but Mingyue did.

The author didn't prepare the heroine to fall in love with the hero, right? I like that there is no male protagonist. Brahma has not appeared until now. Only Brahma's clone, Jie Yuhua, died at the beginning of the spiritual world 😥. Moreover, Brahma is still a son of Buddha who has become a Buddha... There is nothing wrong with it, right?