Immortal Kitchen System from Another World

The writing is good, I will give you a recommendation ticket to encourage you 🙂

The writing is quite interesting. I hope I can improve my writing skills.

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I'm here to help you review books. I said yesterday that I will help you today. First of all, the writing style of your book is okay, and so is the story. That's how I feel. The protagonist is alone and very confused. The plot goes too smoothly. You come out of the pig pen first, and there are just a bunch of people waiting for you. This part of the story is a bit cliche. The introduction is not very clear. It feels like you brought it here in a blur. Also, your time travel is really not good at all. Odd, I feel like someone who has nothing to do. I didn't prepare anything in the early stage and just walked up the mountain. The process in the middle was too rough. You feel like two people are talking and they can run away quietly alone. This person is the same. How come I feel like a stooge? He is so enthusiastic towards you for no reason, and he even forgets about himself. , Lacks description of the environment, even when I went to test it, why do I feel that it is specially prepared for you alone? Although you mentioned a little bit later, you just gave a rough overview. At least it is also the place where you will need a dog in the future. I will introduce it in a little detail, as well as the scene. I didn't read too carefully, and I forgot some of the plot. I've only seen your first chapter. Sorry, I don't have much time. Also, you are sure that the system will not introduce you or anything else, just give you a pot, and don't talk about other things, such as benefits. This is optional. However, it starts with a pot and lacks description of the characters' facial expressions. I feel like you could write more in this chapter, or split it into two chapters. It's really too sloppy, and it feels completely like it was arranged, and it doesn't look like you walked alone. That's it. I forgot about the plot. I don't know if I wrote it wrong. Please forgive me for the plot. Thank you. In fact, the story is really funny, but it's too sketchy and lacks a lot of details. However, it seems that systematic writing is not really needed.

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