Collapse of Campus

[Book Review by Dove League Friends] "Collapsed Campus" Number of chapters to read: Chapter 10 The Insider Introduction (6/10): The introduction basically tells you the content of the first few chapters. If readers read the introduction carefully, the reading experience of the first few chapters may seem a bit boring. It is recommended to make the introduction more streamlined and use some language to attract readers. Your introduction looks like outline 233 Plot (4/10): The overall progress is slow. I saw your tenth chapter. I estimate it is more than 20,000 words. It tells about two aspects, the family is falling apart, and then being forced to attend college. Emmmm, maybe it's because I've watched a lot of anime in this area. When I read about the third chapter, I already guessed what you're going to write next, so my reading interest is not particularly high. The slow advancement of the plot may make readers lose interest in reading. The first few chapters have nothing refreshing in terms of plot. This may be one of the reasons why it cannot attract editors. I didn't read the latter part. Your title is "Collapse of Campus," so I guess the focus of your description should be on "campus." But describing campus life can easily make the plot dull, so I think it is very important to deal with the "collapse" part of the campus. Description (7/10): The overall description is quite smooth, at least I don't feel stuck when reading it, and the paragraphs are relatively clear and not lengthy. However, there is a lack of highlights, no eye-catching descriptions, and refreshing points in the early stages, making it difficult to retain readers. It is recommended that the suspense be enhanced and described. Summary (6/10): Come on! Hold on! I also suggest that you revise the previous chapters and introduction appropriately, and try again when you reach 200,000 words. Don't be a eunuch, just in case you can sign a contract ⊙ω⊙

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