I'm Going to Be Played to Death by the Game

It's very well written. You must work hard.

Author, you are so interesting

The plot of this detective story is simply discouraging. I suggest you make an outline. Should you write the main plot of the game, the spiritual energy recovery, or the mastermind behind the scenes? You won't write a ghost and just have a secondary detective. Otherwise, the main plot will be more suspenseful and supernatural. In addition, it is unbelievable to involve the protagonist's parents. The original plot of solving the case was suddenly a big poisonous point.

I am a Shennong. I passed by the Baidu Valley at the starting point one day and saw a grass that looked like immortal food, so I picked it up in the food basket on the bookshelf. After more than a month, I remembered the grass and took it out to taste. It was only three cents thick, and I spit out black blood at the mouth. My face was like gold paper. I struggled to get up. It must be tasted by people with no brains, and it must not be tasted by sailors. I hope the world can take it as a warning. The name of this herb is "I will be played to death by a game." Forget all fellow Taoists to stay away.

Today~ I saw a pigeon~ Gugu~

Xiaotian Pigeon House How many times have I counted pigeons since today Raise one pigeon at a time Let's see how many little pigeons we will raise in the end.

The starting point is good, but a good deck of cards is played with a pulpy and dehydrated plot. The plot is not rigorous enough, and it is confusing to watch. Well, if you can change a sentence, just watch it. Can't change it. You can either put a vest on, or let him paddle the whole time. Don't show up from time to time to rub him. It reminds people that there is a protagonist. It makes people uncomfortable to watch you like this.

The villain is a bit too much. In a big city with a million people, 70,000 to 80,000 people have disappeared within three months. Even if it is a selective disappearance, it is too much. The police are not a loser, and the special affairs bureau is not a flower vase. It is mentally retarded.

It's not unreasonable to have so few recommendation votes. Look at what you wrote, and you also revealed your identity. Why don't you just finish the whole book? What a great idea, written like this by you.

This is a novel in which the main character is so promiscuous under the guise of being the mastermind behind the scenes. I like to see the prudence of the mastermind behind the scenes.

Now that I see it, I can't help but complain, the protagonist's presence is too weak 😅

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There are also a few chapters on memes and spirituality in the early stage. If you can't write something complicated, don't write it. Keep it straightforward, it's redundant. The main character's official player identity is completely useless. Choosing activities and so on is obviously a matter of planning. There is something wrong with the identity of the player. As for the game panel and the test players, don't write it if they don't have any role in it. !

A dove flew in the sky~ Author Dada~ Did you see it?

Come on author, don't give up. I feel that it is more appropriate to classify your book as modern supernatural literature, so there are problems with your book's title and introduction. The readers' favorite points attracted by this title and introduction are not in line with the content you wrote. Your comments are all criticism. If possible, change the title and introduction of the book. What you wrote is very interesting. Come on

Other problems are not big, but I feel like the protagonist has never grown much.